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Sister Sleep
My sister sleep and me are close
it's almost as if we are twins
but we argue, sometimes I win,
but sister sleep she wins the most.
My shadow she or she's my ghost
she haunts my every waking breath,
she knows me deep down to my depths
and siren like sings lullabies,
ignoring all protests of mine
luring me to meet, brother death.
it's almost as if we are twins
but we argue, sometimes I win,
but sister sleep she wins the most.
My shadow she or she's my ghost
she haunts my every waking breath,
she knows me deep down to my depths
and siren like sings lullabies,
ignoring all protests of mine
luring me to meet, brother death.
Published 16th Mar 2023
Author's Note
An espinela Decima.
8 syllables per line. 10 lines.
ABBA ACCD DC.
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poem from me.
8 syllables per line. 10 lines.
ABBA ACCD DC.
Info from Wikipedia
poem from me.
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16th Mar 2023 7:37pm
Speaking of sleep;
I can't write to save my life unless I've slept well the night before.
Lots of neurological maintenance going on when I sack out.
I can't write to save my life unless I've slept well the night before.
Lots of neurological maintenance going on when I sack out.
16th Mar 2023 8:11pm
Indeed it does.
Luckily I've always been able sleep & to catnap
For breaks at school and later work read, catnap!
And that's where this piece came from.
Luckily I've always been able sleep & to catnap
For breaks at school and later work read, catnap!
And that's where this piece came from.
16th Mar 2023 9:10pm
16th Mar 2023 10:36pm
18th Mar 2023 1:09pm
Probably eighty percent of rhyming poems that I read, I don't particularly care for. They overlook everything else for the sake of the rhyme. You do not.
You're quite good at what you do, Rew. Solid, enjoyable, rewarding writes.
This write is but one of your all.
You're quite good at what you do, Rew. Solid, enjoyable, rewarding writes.
This write is but one of your all.
18th Mar 2023 1:17pm
It really is nice of you Styxian to be so generous
in your comment. I thank you kindly for that
" Solid, enjoyable, rewarding writes "
encouragement, above and beyond!
in your comment. I thank you kindly for that
" Solid, enjoyable, rewarding writes "
encouragement, above and beyond!
18th Mar 2023 1:20pm
Well, let's say this. Some of us write for the sake of saying something that itches our heads. And some write for the sake of feeding the gods of poetry.
Those gods shine on you.
Those gods shine on you.
18th Mar 2023 2:00pm
Once again thank you.
what I try to do is produce something interesting
and in rhyme. And have fun at the same time.
what I try to do is produce something interesting
and in rhyme. And have fun at the same time.
