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Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
Destroyed, She clutched her mangled heart,
unaware the darkness was listening.
Oh humble day, cast not your eyes upon this darkling
true.
Who now saunters admist the shadows.
In the tempest of it all, her pain is lovely.
A starless night vibrates with sinister stirrings,
abysmal echoing, talk of a great love stolen.
Beholden to her deepest heart's desires.
Fate proved cruel and took away her love forever.
Drenched in tears, she lay crippled,
in a maze of eternal why's.
Lost to the world she keens, she thought unheard,
she troubled the restless demons listening.
They were enticed by her agonized wail of sorrow.
A dark lullabye of whispers lulls her to surrender
to the darkness.
A shadow descends upon her gaping holes.
Her heart beats, but now lacks
a soul.
unaware the darkness was listening.
Oh humble day, cast not your eyes upon this darkling
true.
Who now saunters admist the shadows.
In the tempest of it all, her pain is lovely.
A starless night vibrates with sinister stirrings,
abysmal echoing, talk of a great love stolen.
Beholden to her deepest heart's desires.
Fate proved cruel and took away her love forever.
Drenched in tears, she lay crippled,
in a maze of eternal why's.
Lost to the world she keens, she thought unheard,
she troubled the restless demons listening.
They were enticed by her agonized wail of sorrow.
A dark lullabye of whispers lulls her to surrender
to the darkness.
A shadow descends upon her gaping holes.
Her heart beats, but now lacks
a soul.
Author's Note
My most heartfelt thanks to the exquisite ideas and writing of Crimsin ❤️, which inspired this poem.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
7th Mar 2023 4:18am
good evening beautiful Debbie thank you so much for creating with me it was real pleasure 💕
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Re: Re. Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
7th Mar 2023 10:15am
Thank you! It was fun, you are amazing & maybe we can collaborate again in the future.... ❤️
Re: Re. Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
7th Mar 2023 2:30pm
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7th Mar 2023 10:16am
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7th Mar 2023 10:31am
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7th Mar 2023 10:55am
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9th Mar 2023 3:21pm
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9th Mar 2023 3:22pm
Re. Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
12th Mar 2023 2:15am
Love this collaboration from two superbly talented women.
What a gorgeous poem. Looking forward to more collaborative poems from both of you.
What a gorgeous poem. Looking forward to more collaborative poems from both of you.
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Re: Re. Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
12th Mar 2023 8:21am
Re. Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
15th Mar 2024 5:20pm
A very beautiful, dark piece of poetry. Nicely worded and magnificently structured. You are really good at writing!!
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Re: Re. Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
15th Mar 2024 6:57pm
We both thank you. Our styles merged pretty well.
That is really cool you went and found this poem.
That is really cool you went and found this poem.
Re: Re. Surrender- with the talented Crimsin
15th Mar 2024 7:45pm