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the singing bowl [gong]
take me to nirvana
down an alley
in mullumbimbi
where silent ombre hippies
shuck faux chakras
in temples of fire and steam
sadist priests conjure
blissful depths of inferno
in a vortex of eucalypt ghost flame
the rite of sweat and chloral rapture
[gong]
euphoria gurgles and puffs
amongst the golden palm and little dragon
at the end of the alley
in the belly of kiva
down an alley
in mullumbimbi
where silent ombre hippies
shuck faux chakras
in temples of fire and steam
sadist priests conjure
blissful depths of inferno
in a vortex of eucalypt ghost flame
the rite of sweat and chloral rapture
[gong]
euphoria gurgles and puffs
amongst the golden palm and little dragon
at the end of the alley
in the belly of kiva
Published 23rd Feb 2023
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you always have such good imagery. i will admit to not understanding everything in here, but that doesn't mean I can't appreciate it.
my only quibble, and this could be because i don't understand where you're going:
should it be:
where silent ombre hippies
shuck faux chakras
in temples of fire and steam
or
where silent ombre hippy
shucks faux chakras.
and then the same for the next stanza:
sadist priest conjures
or
sadist priests conjure.
my only quibble, and this could be because i don't understand where you're going:
should it be:
where silent ombre hippies
shuck faux chakras
in temples of fire and steam
or
where silent ombre hippy
shucks faux chakras.
and then the same for the next stanza:
sadist priest conjures
or
sadist priests conjure.
Thank you, Lady of Daisy and Grace.
Just trying to break the long silence of feeling anything poetic… kinda like busting the rigor mortis… with a whiff of inspiration for life.
Thanks again… appreciate the feedback!
Just trying to break the long silence of feeling anything poetic… kinda like busting the rigor mortis… with a whiff of inspiration for life.
Thanks again… appreciate the feedback!
24th Feb 2023 00:58am
24th Feb 2023 00:13am
Alexander its great to see some writing from you. You never disappoint. Your word choices are unique, the overall mien of the writing has presence.
7th Sep 2023 5:17pm
visited yout profile very first time... n I'm glad I found something super... Keep glowing
14th Jan 2024 6:23am
Is it weird that I felt a tickle in my belly while reading this? I don't know why I feel like I know the imagery you've portrayed but it makes me 'euphoric' haha
Hope you're doing well, Mr Case. It's been a while and a half.
Hope you're doing well, Mr Case. It's been a while and a half.
