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Sometimes I leave my body.
The mind opens a portal
in which I step through,
and in the next dimension
She is there
Every nerve tingles,
every muscle tightens,
every cell explodes
For 10 seconds, the mountains
melt into lakes beneath the ocean;
it’s rapture in the rawest form.
It rattles my bones,
bites my flesh,
burns my soul
She is always in my subconscious,
whispering for me to come to her
But I never see her face
…I never see her face.
The mind opens a portal
in which I step through,
and in the next dimension
She is there
Every nerve tingles,
every muscle tightens,
every cell explodes
For 10 seconds, the mountains
melt into lakes beneath the ocean;
it’s rapture in the rawest form.
It rattles my bones,
bites my flesh,
burns my soul
She is always in my subconscious,
whispering for me to come to her
But I never see her face
…I never see her face.
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5th Feb 2023 10:51pm
Steamy, could she be you and you be her, looking into a mirror and seeing the back of your own head. May be the question still exist who can take you to those heights, we don't know really really just guessing with that last part. It made us think which means its tight, Sis
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5th Feb 2023 11:41pm
Well written.
"But I never see her face" ... ... ( It's hard to see her face. 😀😉 )
"But I never see her face" ... ... ( It's hard to see her face. 😀😉 )
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6th Feb 2023 6:54am
Some force holding us down...
Some force pulling us away...
Have you ever tried to study your hand before
going to sleep..?
In order to see it and study it in the dream world...?
This reminds me of that exercise...
Or...
The psychic exertions which we are capable of...
The willful struggle to identify the self...
Great work...
Some force pulling us away...
Have you ever tried to study your hand before
going to sleep..?
In order to see it and study it in the dream world...?
This reminds me of that exercise...
Or...
The psychic exertions which we are capable of...
The willful struggle to identify the self...
Great work...
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6th Feb 2023 10:16pm
Journeying through a door of perception reveals a world that is 1,000 times more vivid, vital, interconnected and electrifying than our usual mundane everyday experience. It seems everything and anything is up for grabs. I enjoyed the read very much.
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7th Feb 2023 6:20am
OH MY FG!!!!
it's liken to my
My Succubus
spill ---- i never ever have seen her face!!!
i almost became attached, as well
Super relatable spill for me (thank You -- i am not crazy)
it's liken to my
My Succubus
spill ---- i never ever have seen her face!!!
i almost became attached, as well
Super relatable spill for me (thank You -- i am not crazy)
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9th Feb 2023 10:46pm
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2nd Mar 2023 1:46am
The repetition in the last line is very effective. The poem as a whole has a nicely executed mystical quality.
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11th Mar 2023 7:35pm
👏 👏 👏 absolutely 💯 percent beautiful ink spill please keep 🙏 on writing ✍ ok 👌 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖
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18th Mar 2023 3:27pm
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20th Mar 2023 1:59am
Wonderful.
Maybe you should linger there longer. See her face. Check her eyes for kindness.
And, maybe, in your next write... yes?
Maybe you should linger there longer. See her face. Check her eyes for kindness.
And, maybe, in your next write... yes?
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8th Sep 2023 2:50am
Self the uhknowable yet known, unseen, present, aware and aware of the awareness. I love it.
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