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Drowning
Another sunrise I wake to alone
Tell me my love
What's the purpose in this again?
You're in the next room but may as well be on another planet
The distance between us screams
How do I fix this?
I wouldn't know where to begin
The further you drift away
The more desperate I become
I can't pinpoint where I lost you
My only relief from this torture
The smoke I inhale... within seconds I go numb
Just going through the motions
Two strangers co-existing in this cold and lonely house
My skin starting to rot from your neglect
I'm drowning in this room in the memories of our love
While you sleep out on the couch
Tell me my love
What's the purpose in this again?
You're in the next room but may as well be on another planet
The distance between us screams
How do I fix this?
I wouldn't know where to begin
The further you drift away
The more desperate I become
I can't pinpoint where I lost you
My only relief from this torture
The smoke I inhale... within seconds I go numb
Just going through the motions
Two strangers co-existing in this cold and lonely house
My skin starting to rot from your neglect
I'm drowning in this room in the memories of our love
While you sleep out on the couch
Published 28th Jan 2023
Author's Note
Could not figure out how to end this one or if this was the end..either way.. woke up 20 mins ago and laid here looking out at the fresh new day with too much on my mind. Happy Saturday
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28th Jan 2023 8:40pm
Really tender confessional or epistle, it seems to me. Thank you for sharing from such intimate depth with us. 💖🙏🏻
28th Jan 2023 11:30pm
I remember thus emptiness and feeling of tension lingering throughout the house
29th Jan 2023 1:16am
Very vivid write of an all too familiar scene for many of us.
I once purposely left something along this message out for my ex to see. It wasn't to salvage anything. But to acknowledge the void. Like a pre-goodbye.
Through it all, keep your writing going. It's the one thing that won't let you down.
I once purposely left something along this message out for my ex to see. It wasn't to salvage anything. But to acknowledge the void. Like a pre-goodbye.
Through it all, keep your writing going. It's the one thing that won't let you down.
29th Jan 2023 11:14am
When you smoke the herb, it reveals you to yourself.
Bob Marley ♥♥♥ Peace to you :)
Bob Marley ♥♥♥ Peace to you :)
Grab yourself a bottle of high-end shampoo and WASH THAT MAN RIGHT OUT OF YOUR HAIR.
Put on heels and hose, make sure he sees, and sashay out the door. Tell him you’re tired of his jive ass and you’re going out looking for action.
This is your best move. Fuck fixing. Sounds like his warranty has run out. When you realize you’re worth it and he ain’t, drop me a line how it went. I’m 78, btw, and that’s not rpm’s. Years! Been there, done that.
Go git ‘em!
mrd
Put on heels and hose, make sure he sees, and sashay out the door. Tell him you’re tired of his jive ass and you’re going out looking for action.
This is your best move. Fuck fixing. Sounds like his warranty has run out. When you realize you’re worth it and he ain’t, drop me a line how it went. I’m 78, btw, and that’s not rpm’s. Years! Been there, done that.
Go git ‘em!
mrd
31st Jan 2023 2:37pm
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3rd Feb 2023 5:52pm
Such an introspective piece – Reminded me of the alone feeling while walking within a crowd. Always difficult to reconcile what happened to love while you drift apart. I hope you can stay away from the smoke as it’s numbing affect seldom leads to a path of happiness.
💚🤗
💚🤗
2nd Jun 2023 8:42pm
My ex wife claimed this as well. I guess without maintenance Time can be a solvent in a relationship sometimes.
True observation,good poem🤘
True observation,good poem🤘
Anonymous
21st Jun 2023 4:45pm
beautiful
