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Fatal Beauty
I am blessed with finest beauty,
I am imprisoned in my own beauty,
I am on the path of the ascetic,
I decide to renunciate the world,
I walk out in the dark of night,
I am oblivious in the quiet night,
I shall be a mystery of the night.
My beauty is my greatest enemy,
My beauty is evil to be my curse,
My beauty becomes my fatal death.
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I am imprisoned in my own beauty,
I am on the path of the ascetic,
I decide to renunciate the world,
I walk out in the dark of night,
I am oblivious in the quiet night,
I shall be a mystery of the night.
My beauty is my greatest enemy,
My beauty is evil to be my curse,
My beauty becomes my fatal death.
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Published 3rd Jan 2023
| Edited 26th May 2023
Author's Note
This is a saga of Beauty who renunciates the world to become a nun (monkess).
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10th Jan 2023 1:19pm
A strong character
who knows what she wants
and she's going for it. Can't argue with that.
who knows what she wants
and she's going for it. Can't argue with that.
Anonymous
13th Jan 2023 11:05pm
I found the story interesting. Before reading the author’s note I thought that the narrator sounded egotistical. You could maybe improve the poem by taking a less direct and repetitive approach, for example by including more imagery. JMO.
2nd Apr 2023 9:27pm
A fab intrigue, a beauty becoming ascetic instead of flaunting her aesthetic side eh. Kudos for the fab poem!
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
