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Soul "Mates"
I once thought
FATE
brought us together
the sea
the moon
the stars
aligned perfectly
our souls spoke
their own language
while our bodies intertwined
I now know
KARMA
brought us together
Mother nature's audience
aligned to laugh
at our broken lives
our unredeemed souls
suffering from
past mistakes
both
longing to be
the cockroach
instead
of each others
soul "mates"
FATE
brought us together
the sea
the moon
the stars
aligned perfectly
our souls spoke
their own language
while our bodies intertwined
I now know
KARMA
brought us together
Mother nature's audience
aligned to laugh
at our broken lives
our unredeemed souls
suffering from
past mistakes
both
longing to be
the cockroach
instead
of each others
soul "mates"
Published 3rd Apr 2012
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3rd Apr 2012 6:12am
It's amazing that you can write like this and it still sounds beautiful.. I love it, great job! XD
3rd Apr 2012 6:14am
3rd Apr 2012 6:15am
Anonymous
3rd Apr 2012 5:09pm
This poem is so sarcastic in such a subtle way that one could mistake it for a love poem....
Very clever use of language
A good read
Kitty
Very clever use of language
A good read
Kitty
Thank you Kitty :)
Glad you picked up on the sarcasm.
Your comment means a lot ;)
Glad you picked up on the sarcasm.
Your comment means a lot ;)
5th Apr 2012 5:03pm
5th Apr 2012 6:59pm
5th Apr 2012 7:28pm
Fully agree with somelikeithot.
very clever analogy of the process where one discovers fate can work two ways and karma trumps fate every fkn time.
really enjoyable read Rachel, love the direction your work is going.
shine on!
very clever analogy of the process where one discovers fate can work two ways and karma trumps fate every fkn time.
really enjoyable read Rachel, love the direction your work is going.
shine on!
5th Apr 2012 8:49pm
Thank you Eamon! I am so glad you liked it. :D
You're right about Karma trumping Fate. Karma can be a bitch.
I truly appreciate your comments. :)
You're right about Karma trumping Fate. Karma can be a bitch.
I truly appreciate your comments. :)
9th Apr 2012 9:06pm
Not much i can say that wasn't said already.
Sometimes fate is karma i suppose and vice versa.
A clever little write and beautifully written!
Sometimes fate is karma i suppose and vice versa.
A clever little write and beautifully written!
10th Apr 2012 00:09am
Anonymous
11th Apr 2012 7:15pm
I just adore this, thank's.
11th Apr 2012 7:28pm
I adore that you adore this :D
Thank you so much for your comment and for the add :)
Thank you so much for your comment and for the add :)
Anonymous
24th Apr 2012 4:46am
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24th Apr 2012 5:11am
17th Feb 2013 11:21pm
Again, you craft a scene with layers beyond a casual glimpse.
In youth, expectations and perceptions regarding love are lofty while often murky. Eventually, some awake from the slumber and reckon the reality of disappointment. Easy to be jaded toward love and romance... yet life is an adventure of possibilities we get to explore every day.
In youth, expectations and perceptions regarding love are lofty while often murky. Eventually, some awake from the slumber and reckon the reality of disappointment. Easy to be jaded toward love and romance... yet life is an adventure of possibilities we get to explore every day.
