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jealous of his "poetry"
Thanks for the laugh, J-Z.
Your claim that I am jealous of your poetry
assumes that you have written things
that fill me up
with envy of the way you set out words
upon a page
and make me rage that I’m
unable to compose a thing or two
that even comes within a mile
of imitating you.
The problem, though, is that your way,
with all its grammar gaffes
fallacious and pretentious claims,
inclarity of thought,
inversions causing dread,
a lack of concrete imagery
the sacrifice of sense to get a rhyme
great incoherenceies from line to line
mistitleing of text
pomposity and deixis
didacticism through and through
and faulty English, too,
displays
no talent on your part
or skill to phrase your themes
with requisite linguistic mastery
to make me (or any reader) think
that if I followed you in writing as you do
that I’d produce a “write”
that was in substance or its sway
possessing any art
let alone a composition worthy
to be read.
There’s nothing there, you see,
to make the green-eyed monster rouse
himself inside of me.
In fact, it’s right to say
your “work” exemplifies
how not to write
if one would a good poet be,
Your claim that I am jealous of your poetry
assumes that you have written things
that fill me up
with envy of the way you set out words
upon a page
and make me rage that I’m
unable to compose a thing or two
that even comes within a mile
of imitating you.
The problem, though, is that your way,
with all its grammar gaffes
fallacious and pretentious claims,
inclarity of thought,
inversions causing dread,
a lack of concrete imagery
the sacrifice of sense to get a rhyme
great incoherenceies from line to line
mistitleing of text
pomposity and deixis
didacticism through and through
and faulty English, too,
displays
no talent on your part
or skill to phrase your themes
with requisite linguistic mastery
to make me (or any reader) think
that if I followed you in writing as you do
that I’d produce a “write”
that was in substance or its sway
possessing any art
let alone a composition worthy
to be read.
There’s nothing there, you see,
to make the green-eyed monster rouse
himself inside of me.
In fact, it’s right to say
your “work” exemplifies
how not to write
if one would a good poet be,
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