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Dozing off at neural level in the stoic silence
of shotgun explosion I see small white bubbles
burst in unison as my eyelids succumb to gravity-
a hurricane in timelapse-in between tiny flutters
flames of saturation scorch me in the pit within
amidst wails and unfamiliar shadowplay of time
shape-shifting nightmares pour in swift
thru slits in the hourglass of conscious
Edith Piaf wallows in the periphery
nascent doubt licks stillborn questions
looming over the jagged edged exit wound
I float in the muck of nothingness
Just a cavity-a non-event-no.
Photograph courtesy-Mehmet Turgut
Published 2nd Apr 2012
| Edited 13th Apr 2012
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2nd Apr 2012 1:12pm
I don't really have anything to offer, than wow, this is so beautiful and wistfully dark, and it will end up in my reading list when I have more space.
Peace... Ind
Peace... Ind
2nd Apr 2012 1:25pm
Indie.
Thank You for the kind words.
I was not sure about this. Honestly this
is my first write after almost a month.
There were moments of self doubt.
Feel a little better.
Light,
Sumeet
Thank You for the kind words.
I was not sure about this. Honestly this
is my first write after almost a month.
There were moments of self doubt.
Feel a little better.
Light,
Sumeet
Anonymous
2nd Apr 2012 1:32pm
You are one of the poets I follow...because you project great potential and have a mastery over poetry that is gratifying to see and read
However the above was not clear
Your ability to weave words together in a very satisfying read does not free you from making the poem understandable
Kitty
However the above was not clear
Your ability to weave words together in a very satisfying read does not free you from making the poem understandable
Kitty
4th Apr 2012 8:09am
Kitty
It's great to have you here as always. Contrary to my previous writes the recent ones deal with issues and events which I had never pondered upon.
This one was written at one go within a few minutes. SInce then I have had a couple of interpretations myself and I entirely leave
it to the reader. Borderline abstract it is,
yes.
Recoil could be a reference to a gun and
therefore it could be read as a near death thought-flood. Or the like.:)
Sumeet
It's great to have you here as always. Contrary to my previous writes the recent ones deal with issues and events which I had never pondered upon.
This one was written at one go within a few minutes. SInce then I have had a couple of interpretations myself and I entirely leave
it to the reader. Borderline abstract it is,
yes.
Recoil could be a reference to a gun and
therefore it could be read as a near death thought-flood. Or the like.:)
Sumeet
3rd Apr 2012 12:09pm
I won't say wow or strange but will use the word queer and the same is just apt with the darkness that you have contemplated to create. It's unique.
4th Apr 2012 8:01am
Anando
I get the picture, yes.
Queer is used in another niche these days, but I
could relate to it in a most gripping way.
Thank you as always.
Sumeet
I get the picture, yes.
Queer is used in another niche these days, but I
could relate to it in a most gripping way.
Thank you as always.
Sumeet
