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Rhymes With You
If I could sing, just one song
I would sing it for you
Soothing, so that your eyes close
and allows me to take you
-As my fingers raise
the crescendo of lovenotes
that are no longer just murmurs
My lips would pose
as a promising kiss
on every word that rhymes with you
And my impassioned song, inspired
as my soul lifts me higher
It would reach you, there
inside to where your heart receives
my vocal verses of truth
aloud, and increasingly passionate
Our love song would be on yellow paper
Like sunlight, upon our window sill
As darkness rolls up
its rusty horizon
As the god of gold melts away
those impersonal shades
pouring his potion over us
Highlighting our arches
-We the nova in the light
Sunbeams slicing our eyes
as we rebound in
glorious panic
I will be there
like a morning dove
Heralding your image
You, the dawn of my great day
Here, you dressed as the beginning
Hearing my words of harbored wishes
How the notes all end
rhyming with you
For now, I place it to ink
as thin rails on night's stairs
As the din of darkness drags
it's heavy sword behind itself
This song, has him tired
but not yet dead
So I will sing
to quell his jealous wailing
of his forced goodbye
These words for you; My limitations
missing the impact of my impatience
I will save them for now
and bind them well
as a scrapbook of wishes
and silent dreams.
They are visions, then
without a voice
words without melody
Never to be as song
Unless sung in the audience
of only you
Words I leave trailing
My lips are halted, and blue
By a kiss in waiting
By songs that rhyme
with you.
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Published 13th Nov 2022
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13th Nov 2022 6:59pm
13th Nov 2022 7:55pm
Well that's all I hope for, really.
I felt overdue in feeding the DUP monster...
Thank you dear. How's my doggies, that you're raising for me? Lol.
I felt overdue in feeding the DUP monster...
Thank you dear. How's my doggies, that you're raising for me? Lol.
13th Nov 2022 9:30pm
14th Nov 2022 1:43am
Isn't that the way we're supposed to be? That saying "we get what we give" is hopefully true some of the time. That's what I hope for.
Thank you, by the way. I appreciate the kindness in your comment.
Thank you, by the way. I appreciate the kindness in your comment.
13th Nov 2022 10:46pm
Loved it from start to finish.
Especially the yellow paper & god of gold.
Something I wish I would have wrote!!
The tenderness in this shines. As someone who is inspired by music I really love
the notion of someone waiting inside a song.
Completely original!!
What a cool perspective. hahahaha
Especially the yellow paper & god of gold.
Something I wish I would have wrote!!
The tenderness in this shines. As someone who is inspired by music I really love
the notion of someone waiting inside a song.
Completely original!!
What a cool perspective. hahahaha
14th Nov 2022 1:50am
*You didn't think I'd notice the "perspective" usage? Lol
And, you're inspired by music? Who woulda thunk it?! It's not like you use songs to get your creative juices flowing or anything.
At work I use a yellow papered pad to write work notes, etc, down. But also to write any ideas or snippets for creative writing later. I put them in a wrinkled pile when I get home from work, to maybe use in something.
(What size Dolphins jersey do you want? Lol)
And, you're inspired by music? Who woulda thunk it?! It's not like you use songs to get your creative juices flowing or anything.
At work I use a yellow papered pad to write work notes, etc, down. But also to write any ideas or snippets for creative writing later. I put them in a wrinkled pile when I get home from work, to maybe use in something.
(What size Dolphins jersey do you want? Lol)
14th Nov 2022 11:47am
Dear S,
This is biblical. It’s as though god himself fed you those lyrics for the book of Styx to “prophetize” the absolute beauty for a love language. Smashing write. Now where can I buy someone exactly like this?
Really lovely, like it made my head stop thumping and my agitation was completely leveled off. There was a particular meter that just flowed in such a soothing manner. Beautiful piece. H🌷
This is biblical. It’s as though god himself fed you those lyrics for the book of Styx to “prophetize” the absolute beauty for a love language. Smashing write. Now where can I buy someone exactly like this?
Really lovely, like it made my head stop thumping and my agitation was completely leveled off. There was a particular meter that just flowed in such a soothing manner. Beautiful piece. H🌷
16th Nov 2022 1:10am
Biblical is a new one for me! Perhaps I CAN be saved! Lol.
I was in a different kind of mood when this one came about. More like an appreciation type thing. I always wanted to be a singer. But, no way. Lol.
So I just spill it out in writing.
Thank you, dearest you! You make me "try". Thank you.
I was in a different kind of mood when this one came about. More like an appreciation type thing. I always wanted to be a singer. But, no way. Lol.
So I just spill it out in writing.
Thank you, dearest you! You make me "try". Thank you.
14th Nov 2022 1:11pm
This is really different from your pen Styx.
Multiple reads at different intervals and now my comment.
BIG LIKE
Multiple reads at different intervals and now my comment.
BIG LIKE
16th Nov 2022 1:24am
Thank you for the BL.
Like I said to H, I was in a different mindset when writing this. I do best when in good moods, (like we all do, duh!). And sometimes I need to try different approaches to writing about the same subjects. Hopefully this works?
Like I said to H, I was in a different mindset when writing this. I do best when in good moods, (like we all do, duh!). And sometimes I need to try different approaches to writing about the same subjects. Hopefully this works?
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19th Nov 2022 5:16pm
Thank you Shadow. Sometimes I get my poetic act together, and sometimes I don't.
Hopefully my average is above average overall!
Hopefully my average is above average overall!
19th Nov 2022 5:55pm
Hello S,
Your poem unfolds so nicely gently and swaying on the page , each layer being peeled off like unmasking what often one tends to hide or hold back. For in order to truly love real openness is needed and embraced. The strangest thing happened to me, I kept on hearing all these old tunes reading your poem. I have read your poem a couple of times now and what keeps popping up is the old song Time in Bottle by Jim Croce. I have no idea why this popped up.
Maybe it is a song I heard often when I was very young.
I truly enjoyed the poem!
R
Your poem unfolds so nicely gently and swaying on the page , each layer being peeled off like unmasking what often one tends to hide or hold back. For in order to truly love real openness is needed and embraced. The strangest thing happened to me, I kept on hearing all these old tunes reading your poem. I have read your poem a couple of times now and what keeps popping up is the old song Time in Bottle by Jim Croce. I have no idea why this popped up.
Maybe it is a song I heard often when I was very young.
I truly enjoyed the poem!
R
19th Nov 2022 6:15pm
I know that song well. When I was a wee lad, my oldest sister played that song a lot.
She was in love with some guy at school.
But, if she liked it, I knew it was good stuff. (The guy was okay, too. They got married, had a baby...)
Thank you much, for your awesome comment. I actually had doubts about this write being post-worthy as is. I hate to butcher stuff, because it may take away from the original intent. So I took a chance and threw this one in.
You helped ease my worries.
She was in love with some guy at school.
But, if she liked it, I knew it was good stuff. (The guy was okay, too. They got married, had a baby...)
Thank you much, for your awesome comment. I actually had doubts about this write being post-worthy as is. I hate to butcher stuff, because it may take away from the original intent. So I took a chance and threw this one in.
You helped ease my worries.
