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Totality
your pretty face
my happy smile
your soft kiss
my loving touch
your deep gaze
my heart stops…
this devotion of mine you have earned
raised me up when I was broke
showed me that you’re no typical girl
unconditional, just so sweet
innocent and never vindictive
always loved me for me
understanding that I’m not perfect
seeing that I'm better then I show
you defend me with pride
fight for me with no end
making me your true other half
so give me this slow dance we call life
we can hold each other close
my head on yours, and yours on mine
as we sing to each other
I will hug you so tight tonight
I will kiss you so lovingly
I will look deep in your eyes
I will work hard to give you everything
I will buy gifts to see you smile
I will redeem myself when I fail
my life with you is speechless
hard to describe such happiness
watching your body move
every movement is erotic
listening to your every word
just brings me in deeper
I can’t help but want to know everything
when it comes to you
I don’t need anything else
I don’t want anyone else
so let’s just sleep
it’s been a long time since I rested
was exhausted for so long
I just need to hold you now
let’s lay down
because for once I just want to sleep
and forget about everything else
my happy smile
your soft kiss
my loving touch
your deep gaze
my heart stops…
this devotion of mine you have earned
raised me up when I was broke
showed me that you’re no typical girl
unconditional, just so sweet
innocent and never vindictive
always loved me for me
understanding that I’m not perfect
seeing that I'm better then I show
you defend me with pride
fight for me with no end
making me your true other half
so give me this slow dance we call life
we can hold each other close
my head on yours, and yours on mine
as we sing to each other
I will hug you so tight tonight
I will kiss you so lovingly
I will look deep in your eyes
I will work hard to give you everything
I will buy gifts to see you smile
I will redeem myself when I fail
my life with you is speechless
hard to describe such happiness
watching your body move
every movement is erotic
listening to your every word
just brings me in deeper
I can’t help but want to know everything
when it comes to you
I don’t need anything else
I don’t want anyone else
so let’s just sleep
it’s been a long time since I rested
was exhausted for so long
I just need to hold you now
let’s lay down
because for once I just want to sleep
and forget about everything else
Published 2nd Nov 2022
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2nd Nov 2022 3:23am
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2nd Nov 2022 11:47am
Mmm. Yummy... I'm a chocolate 🍫 lover, too!
( leftover candy is secretly the best part of Halloween!)
Thank youuuuuuu!!
( leftover candy is secretly the best part of Halloween!)
Thank youuuuuuu!!
2nd Nov 2022 4:31am
2nd Nov 2022 4:43am
2nd Nov 2022 8:11am
This is so romantic and beautiful✨one can feel the sincerity with which it's written.... the deep love that you have for your life partner is so palpable here... 😊lovely ink, dear friend😊
2nd Nov 2022 8:17am
Hey there friend 😁 hope all is well with you. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. Writing about my wife is my favorite thing even if it comes off cheesy at times.
Many thanks.
Here, have two pieces of candy 🍬 🍬
I had an extra piece...
Many thanks.
Here, have two pieces of candy 🍬 🍬
I had an extra piece...
2nd Nov 2022 8:20am
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4th Nov 2022 11:56pm
That is such a great thing to hear. Thank you for the read. I very much appreciate it, friend 😁
Feel free to stop by anytime.
Feel free to stop by anytime.
8th Nov 2022 6:57pm
This is so tender and loving.
Like Honoria said Stunning...
My heart hurts but in a good way. :p
I love the admiration and love...
the first stanza is a poem all by itself.
Just gorgeous...
face, smile, kiss, touch, gaze...
my heart stops indeed.
Such a lovely devotion...
And when you raise each other up, what could be more beautiful?
Unconditional and sweet, never vindictive...
Striving for innocence for you, but in the naughtiest ways. ;)
True love is never perfect... you have to accept the flaws, the mistakes.
Making each other so much better. Defending with pride.
This slow dance is absolutely incredible.
It is singing to me that's for sure. ;)
Your words are definitely hugging tight.
Kissing lovingly and looking deep into the eyes...
That desire to give each other everything.
When you just have to bring something back to see that look.
Not that it matters what it is, it's just to see the smile.
Feeling speechless right now. ;)
There is such joy and happiness.
And to watch the body move, always erotic. Oh yeah! :)
Taking your lover in deeper...
Not needing anything or anyone else...
This is such an incredible love poem.
Every word builds this deeper bond.
Definitely teared up reading this one.
Perhaps I would add to the end...
Something along the lines of.
I know when I wake you will be by my side.
And that's all I need in this life.
Like Honoria said Stunning...
My heart hurts but in a good way. :p
I love the admiration and love...
the first stanza is a poem all by itself.
Just gorgeous...
face, smile, kiss, touch, gaze...
my heart stops indeed.
Such a lovely devotion...
And when you raise each other up, what could be more beautiful?
Unconditional and sweet, never vindictive...
Striving for innocence for you, but in the naughtiest ways. ;)
True love is never perfect... you have to accept the flaws, the mistakes.
Making each other so much better. Defending with pride.
This slow dance is absolutely incredible.
It is singing to me that's for sure. ;)
Your words are definitely hugging tight.
Kissing lovingly and looking deep into the eyes...
That desire to give each other everything.
When you just have to bring something back to see that look.
Not that it matters what it is, it's just to see the smile.
Feeling speechless right now. ;)
There is such joy and happiness.
And to watch the body move, always erotic. Oh yeah! :)
Taking your lover in deeper...
Not needing anything or anyone else...
This is such an incredible love poem.
Every word builds this deeper bond.
Definitely teared up reading this one.
Perhaps I would add to the end...
Something along the lines of.
I know when I wake you will be by my side.
And that's all I need in this life.
9th Nov 2022 6:30am
Not sure if many people agree with me when I say this, but I feel true love means going through hell to get too heaven. And that's how it feels sometimes. With every low we fight for our heaven. It is not easy but it is worth every bit.
Thanks my friend. This comment made me smile 😁
Thanks my friend. This comment made me smile 😁
