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Slovenly
do I make you uncomfortable?
I've been quiet
I'm angry...
not with you
but at the state I find myself in
I hurt inside, I could never satisfy
you will always be ahead of me in wisdom
our paths may cross over and over
you will grow and evolve
but I will always seem a child
experiencing things just a little too late to understand you fully
the powers that be have nicknames for me
Slovenly being one of them
I lack grace
I am a misfit of the universes
tripping my way through
I am silly, I make them laugh
I desire grace and definition
but I have a confession
in the eternal void
I am but a child
you have existed for eons I'm told
perhaps longer
you are cultured and commanding
I lack finesse and can be brutal
I ask my Father will I ever be a suitable mate?
he says I'm far too young to even be considered
that in the immortal sense I'm only a young teen
I am allowed to put on darkness
and be full grown in pretense only
pretending to understand what I do not
how to love unconditionally
Published 22nd Oct 2022
Author's Note
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23rd Oct 2022 00:30am
Hi Crimsin
I can relate to a lot of this.
Being a misfit in the universe - at times being ungraceful
from lack of maturity - in other peoples eyes.
And that picture just quietly screams to me:)
Great piece:)
I can relate to a lot of this.
Being a misfit in the universe - at times being ungraceful
from lack of maturity - in other peoples eyes.
And that picture just quietly screams to me:)
Great piece:)
23rd Oct 2022 00:40am
good evening beautiful Adelphina thank you lovely lady most graciously I see you as beautiful thank you for sharing your thoughts it's deeply appreciated 💕
23rd Oct 2022 1:21am
A great poem! One which has me thinking that we menfolk must grow beyond the oddly popular notion that ladies are more attractive by way of perpetual infantilization.
It just isn't true.
At 59, my wandering man eye will not seriously linger on anyone under the half century mark.
But of course age compels me to value humility, not only in myself, but in society at large, for humility is actually a sign of accomplishment, which we do not see as much of in the candy chomping teen.
Ironically, it's a poetic achievement such as this one that folks should be proud of!
Splendid work!
It just isn't true.
At 59, my wandering man eye will not seriously linger on anyone under the half century mark.
But of course age compels me to value humility, not only in myself, but in society at large, for humility is actually a sign of accomplishment, which we do not see as much of in the candy chomping teen.
Ironically, it's a poetic achievement such as this one that folks should be proud of!
Splendid work!
23rd Oct 2022 2:46am
thank you dearest Sonneteer for such a thoughtful comment I understand what you mean this is along the lines of wisdom and the immortal timeline where life after life we gain understanding becoming eons and eons and old it's my lack of understanding that has me question my immortal age I am 52 as far as human physical age goes but it's my trouble with relationships that inspired this poem... I deeply appreciate you views on it ❤️
