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Love
you shouldn't use that much water
this jar could of been something delicious
if only it wasn't so diluted
this jar could of been something delicious
if only it wasn't so diluted
Published 10th Oct 2022
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10th Oct 2022 9:05am
Really DC, you have that knack to say so much in just a few words...
This is a great write... Deep n so eloquent... Bravo👏
This is a great write... Deep n so eloquent... Bravo👏
10th Oct 2022 10:03am
That's such a sweet compliment 😁 this was kind of a take off another line I had in a old poem. Went something like love is like kool-aid, too much and it's too sweet, not enough and it gets diluted.
Many thanks, friend 😁
Many thanks, friend 😁
10th Oct 2022 3:56pm
Made me laugh
So true
Everything is broken or diluted but still a smiley face remains
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So true
Everything is broken or diluted but still a smiley face remains
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11th Oct 2022 2:34am
Can't go wrong with the kool-aid guy, oh yeah! Haha
Thanks for the read, friend 😁
Thanks for the read, friend 😁
14th Oct 2022 00:57am
Plus, sometimes love can come crashing through your walls, too... haha 😂 😂 😂
Really nostalgic and a wonderfully clever metaphor! .. I remember the wooden spoon we used to stir, it was stained red!!... lol...
Terrific ink, DC!
🌹-B
Really nostalgic and a wonderfully clever metaphor! .. I remember the wooden spoon we used to stir, it was stained red!!... lol...
Terrific ink, DC!
🌹-B
14th Oct 2022 2:41am
Haha yes, I think you had the same childhood i did 😁
Thank you for the read, friend. Oh yeah! 🥤
Thank you for the read, friend. Oh yeah! 🥤
