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Dark and stormy
I need to be where there is no me
I want you to go where there is no you
Where wind rips my hair and waves drown my ears
Let’s go to the dark and stormy
I’ve got a mind that won’t stop thinking
I’ve got a body that just wants to sweat
I’ve got a heart that’s ripe for the breaking
Why haven’t you broken it yet?
I’m a disaster waiting to happen
I’m your nightmare wrapped in a smile
High maintenance is miles below me
You’ll only dare stay for a while
I’ve got a mind that won’t stop thinking
I’ve got a body that just wants to sweat
I’ve got a heart that’s ripe for the breaking
Why haven’t you broken it yet?
(Hey! What are you still doing here?)
Stop gazing at me like a saint or an angel
Your admiration is too much to bear
Why can’t you hate me the way that I hate me
I know that I’m dark and stormy
I’ve got a mind that won’t stop thinking
I’ve got a body that just wants to sweat
I’ve got a heart that’s ripe for the breaking
Why haven’t you broken it yet?
I want you to go where there is no you
Where wind rips my hair and waves drown my ears
Let’s go to the dark and stormy
I’ve got a mind that won’t stop thinking
I’ve got a body that just wants to sweat
I’ve got a heart that’s ripe for the breaking
Why haven’t you broken it yet?
I’m a disaster waiting to happen
I’m your nightmare wrapped in a smile
High maintenance is miles below me
You’ll only dare stay for a while
I’ve got a mind that won’t stop thinking
I’ve got a body that just wants to sweat
I’ve got a heart that’s ripe for the breaking
Why haven’t you broken it yet?
(Hey! What are you still doing here?)
Stop gazing at me like a saint or an angel
Your admiration is too much to bear
Why can’t you hate me the way that I hate me
I know that I’m dark and stormy
I’ve got a mind that won’t stop thinking
I’ve got a body that just wants to sweat
I’ve got a heart that’s ripe for the breaking
Why haven’t you broken it yet?
Written by
brokentitanium
(k.)
Published 20th Sep 2022
| Edited 26th Oct 2022
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Re. Dark and stormy
20th Sep 2022 2:45pm
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22nd Sep 2022 11:57pm
Re. Dark and stormy
20th Sep 2022 4:15pm
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22nd Sep 2022 11:57pm
Re. Dark and stormy
21st Sep 2022 6:11am
Dear K,
I hear a song in this. It’s the perfect storm of sadness, anger, grief, and frustration. All my favorites. Love everything about this. That point of no return when (for me driving forever-I’d never make it trying to physically run) but the image of running and running until everything just fades out…a numbing agent, as the only way to keep the pain at bay…sing it! Powerful write. H🌷
I hear a song in this. It’s the perfect storm of sadness, anger, grief, and frustration. All my favorites. Love everything about this. That point of no return when (for me driving forever-I’d never make it trying to physically run) but the image of running and running until everything just fades out…a numbing agent, as the only way to keep the pain at bay…sing it! Powerful write. H🌷
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Re: Re. Dark and stormy
22nd Sep 2022 11:58pm
It doesn't even capture how dark I was feeling. Perhaps I'll find a way to sing it someday.
Thank you.
❤️k
Thank you.
❤️k
Re. Dark and stormy
21st Sep 2022 9:27am
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22nd Sep 2022 11:59pm
Re. Dark and stormy
Wow wee. K❣ I love this poignant, all too identifiable piece. I am forever humbled by those who truly love and accept me as is. Because that passage"Why can’t you hate me the way that I hate me" causes me to mistrust love. And, my goddess friend, if you've "... got a body that just wants to sweat" come to Texas where you can work up a sweat breating in and out 💦🤠💦
Bravissima💞
Bravissima💞
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Re: Re. Dark and stormy
23rd Sep 2022 00:01am
Waiting for a hurricane here... not quite sweaty but it should be fun!
Was in a place of deep mistrust when I wrote this. Thanks for getting it.
Was in a place of deep mistrust when I wrote this. Thanks for getting it.
Re: Re. Dark and stormy
23rd Sep 2022 11:47am
Batten down the hatches. Be safe during the huricane...I'll pray for that very thing💕
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Re. Dark and stormy
24th Sep 2022 6:53pm
Hi BK
Wondering when everything will fall apart. Waiting for the shoe to drop.
I so get it. Why is he still here? I'm leaving first. Totally been there.
Great channeling of emotions in this.
Wondering when everything will fall apart. Waiting for the shoe to drop.
I so get it. Why is he still here? I'm leaving first. Totally been there.
Great channeling of emotions in this.
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Re: Re. Dark and stormy
29th Sep 2022 12:02pm
Re. Dark and stormy
28th Sep 2022 10:25am
Woah this is honest and revealing the self warning and expecting to be broken because of inner upheavals . Its an awesome poem indeed.
The refrain stanzas are fab as well. Kudos!!
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
The refrain stanzas are fab as well. Kudos!!
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
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Re: Re. Dark and stormy
29th Sep 2022 12:03pm
Re. Dark and stormy
29th Sep 2022 1:13am
It's the green eyes (your avatar)... they're a jungle of wild beasts.
This is a really awesome lyrical write. I love it.
It's so crazy having hurricane issues in Canada! But obviously it happens.
You're ready for Florida's wonderful current situation. Bring a bucket. Lol.
This is a really awesome lyrical write. I love it.
It's so crazy having hurricane issues in Canada! But obviously it happens.
You're ready for Florida's wonderful current situation. Bring a bucket. Lol.
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Re: Re. Dark and stormy
29th Sep 2022 12:02pm
Oooh, I might get a whole new poem out of that eyes comment... 🤩
Yeah, we've had hurricanes here before but this one was quite a bitch. I still have no power and really shitty internet.
But Florida gets it worse... hope you're doing OK down there, if that's where you are.
Thanks for the like & RL!
❤️k
Yeah, we've had hurricanes here before but this one was quite a bitch. I still have no power and really shitty internet.
But Florida gets it worse... hope you're doing OK down there, if that's where you are.
Thanks for the like & RL!
❤️k
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29th Sep 2022 5:15pm
My area only received the outer bands. Minimal damage and thankfully light flooding.
I was fortunate, once again. So I'm back to mocking the gods!
One of these days, I'm getting squished, I know. Lol. But Dammit, I will be an infected splinter in their toe!
I was fortunate, once again. So I'm back to mocking the gods!
One of these days, I'm getting squished, I know. Lol. But Dammit, I will be an infected splinter in their toe!
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Re. Dark and stormy
2nd Oct 2022 11:31pm
As I read, I could think of two paths
1. You are friends, and you are needing to go physical. Even if it ends up similar to a one-night stand.
2. You are looking in the mirror, and the poem is the conflict between your passionate (body that needs to sweat) versus your responsible self.
The heartbreak, makes me lean heavier to #1
1. You are friends, and you are needing to go physical. Even if it ends up similar to a one-night stand.
2. You are looking in the mirror, and the poem is the conflict between your passionate (body that needs to sweat) versus your responsible self.
The heartbreak, makes me lean heavier to #1
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Re: Re. Dark and stormy
3rd Oct 2022 12:15pm
Two very interesting possibilities! I love seeing what others read in my writing... there were probably aspects of both of those paths in this, but the poem actually was born in the middle stanzas with a whole lot of self-loathing & darkness. It branched out from there...
Thanks for stopping by to read, and think, and comment.
❤️k
Thanks for stopping by to read, and think, and comment.
❤️k
Re. Dark and stormy
4th Oct 2022 4:40pm
Hey BT,
You have great power with your pen.
Your lyrical poem resonates deeply to me.
My interpretation reignites my own personal fires of distrust that burned a past relationship to the ground.
Mistrust burns down all the good with the bad and I was the arsonist.
Secrets are no where near more destructive then Suspicion,
Your incredible talent with words creates beautiful art and art heals....
You have a special gift beautiful girl!
You have great power with your pen.
Your lyrical poem resonates deeply to me.
My interpretation reignites my own personal fires of distrust that burned a past relationship to the ground.
Mistrust burns down all the good with the bad and I was the arsonist.
Secrets are no where near more destructive then Suspicion,
Your incredible talent with words creates beautiful art and art heals....
You have a special gift beautiful girl!
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Re: Re. Dark and stormy
4th Oct 2022 7:00pm
Hi Feet! Great to see you here. Gosh, thank you for your kind words and for sharing about your own connection with this. This was such a dark & destructive write for me. I've found what I think is the perfect soundtrack for it, so stay tuned... spoiler alert - it is NOT beautiful. 😆
❤k
❤k