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broken window (forgiving)
the world
gathers
and crowds
outside
my closed walls,
serenading
the lonely
hours that
trespass me.
the bright sun
once shone
clearer,
now
dressing me
in shades
of dying
anger.
i long
to forget
these awful
feelings,
to forgive
as i watch
from behind
a broken
window.
gathers
and crowds
outside
my closed walls,
serenading
the lonely
hours that
trespass me.
the bright sun
once shone
clearer,
now
dressing me
in shades
of dying
anger.
i long
to forget
these awful
feelings,
to forgive
as i watch
from behind
a broken
window.
Published 12th Sep 2022
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- Edited 13th Oct 2022 6:45am
12th Sep 2022 11:35pm
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12th Sep 2022 11:37pm
12th Sep 2022 11:41pm
Dude, you're really posting some major pieces. They are not to long and not to short, but they say a lot. Tight
12th Sep 2022 11:46pm
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12th Sep 2022 11:53pm
thank you jigg, i am not a people person, but i can deal with one on one situations, sometimes
12th Sep 2022 11:57pm
Yeah man,I totally get it, once you’ve been saturated with all that drama you kinda become a robot with a hard drive of pain.
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13th Sep 2022 5:54am
Dear J,
Fantastic poem. You’ve done an excellent job of portraying a person desperate to move on, but still remain cautious and a bit isolated. You’ve structured this so nicely the words just roll. It’s a great write. H🌷
Fantastic poem. You’ve done an excellent job of portraying a person desperate to move on, but still remain cautious and a bit isolated. You’ve structured this so nicely the words just roll. It’s a great write. H🌷
13th Sep 2022 8:13am
14th Sep 2022 00:30am
Hi A
Each stanza flowed to the next like a great build. Great ending with the broken window.
Forgiveness is hard for some.
I can relate to everything in this.
Each stanza flowed to the next like a great build. Great ending with the broken window.
Forgiveness is hard for some.
I can relate to everything in this.
14th Sep 2022 00:31am
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