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Making it Beautiful
Home playing piano
Making it beautiful
Just for you
In your favorite red dress
Each heart beat key
Bringing me closer for free
Fingertip music notes
Catching a ride
Exhaled at midnight
Melody blown kisses
For only your ears
Devoted to appear
Millions of miles away
Playing piano keys
Until my nails bleed
Sitting all alone
Making it echo
Just for you
Making it beautiful
Just for you
In your favorite red dress
Each heart beat key
Bringing me closer for free
Fingertip music notes
Catching a ride
Exhaled at midnight
Melody blown kisses
For only your ears
Devoted to appear
Millions of miles away
Playing piano keys
Until my nails bleed
Sitting all alone
Making it echo
Just for you
Author's Note
Wanted to try something uncomplicated and easy.
I heard the opening of this song and this just came to me.
The intro piano being played brought this on. LOL
The video is disturbing so I decided to make it beautiful:)
Blood Red Shoes - Comply
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rUMASK0cojk
I heard the opening of this song and this just came to me.
The intro piano being played brought this on. LOL
The video is disturbing so I decided to make it beautiful:)
Blood Red Shoes - Comply
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rUMASK0cojk
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Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 4:44am
It's really cool and spur of the moment pieces at times make the best writing. Tight work Lady
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 4:46am
Awh - hey Meme:)
Thanks for reading.
I've been writing and PMing at the same time. LOL
I'm learning how to multi task. LOL
Thanks for the comment amgio:)
Thanks for reading.
I've been writing and PMing at the same time. LOL
I'm learning how to multi task. LOL
Thanks for the comment amgio:)
Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 4:45am
hello beautiful Adelphina this so beautiful to me
is it okay if I pretend it's for me?
is it okay if I pretend it's for me?
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 4:47am
Absolutely lovely:) hahaha
So happy you enjoyed!!
Anything to make you smile:)
Thanks for the RL and commenting
So happy you enjoyed!!
Anything to make you smile:)
Thanks for the RL and commenting
Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 6:17am
Dear A,
I really enjoyed the almost eerie mystical quality in addition to the love. Made me think of a lost love playing in wait for their return.
So cool how you took the inspiration from the song. Someday I’m going to try that…
Lovely write. H🌷
I really enjoyed the almost eerie mystical quality in addition to the love. Made me think of a lost love playing in wait for their return.
So cool how you took the inspiration from the song. Someday I’m going to try that…
Lovely write. H🌷
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 10:50pm
Hi H!!
Yes, that was exactly what I was going for. Having someone
dear to your heart - and playing for him with your whole being.
When he's gone - living in the music for the connection. Who
cares if it's not healthy. Totally irrelevant:)
thanks for the RL and stopping by amiga.
And yes - you should totally try - you got nothing to lose:)
Yes, that was exactly what I was going for. Having someone
dear to your heart - and playing for him with your whole being.
When he's gone - living in the music for the connection. Who
cares if it's not healthy. Totally irrelevant:)
thanks for the RL and stopping by amiga.
And yes - you should totally try - you got nothing to lose:)
Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 11:44am
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4th Sep 2022 10:57pm
Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 2:14pm
I love how you repeated “Just for you.” Makes the reader feel that it is indeed, just for them. I agree with Honoria in that this has an eerie, mystical quality.
I really love this.
I really love this.
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 11:04pm
So happy you enjoyed. Love combining the essence of beauty
into something a little dark. But not too dark. Just enough to
be enchanting in a way. No one is perfect. I don't believe beauty is either.
Hope that make sense:)
Thanks for stopping by and the RL
Have a wonderful Sunday!!
into something a little dark. But not too dark. Just enough to
be enchanting in a way. No one is perfect. I don't believe beauty is either.
Hope that make sense:)
Thanks for stopping by and the RL
Have a wonderful Sunday!!
Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 3:26pm
Sorry, but I'm dealing with the fingers visual a bit too much for a minute....
-How is this write not complicated? The sexiness of it complicates things! It's all about the visual build to me. The intricacies of the moving fingers.
Sorry, but this is sexy. Lol
The bleeding fingers could be the movement of the fingers being enhanced by the nail polish catching light .
Hey I see what I see!
Music and you are a hell of a duo.
-How is this write not complicated? The sexiness of it complicates things! It's all about the visual build to me. The intricacies of the moving fingers.
Sorry, but this is sexy. Lol
The bleeding fingers could be the movement of the fingers being enhanced by the nail polish catching light .
Hey I see what I see!
Music and you are a hell of a duo.
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 11:20pm
Hi Styxian - hahahaha
I'm stoked you thought it is sexy. LOL
When I put "just for you" I wanted to bring in the reader.
To captivate and let you build your own visuals - cause it really is just for you. LOL
Not going to lie though - your comment made my heart flutter with happiness. If I could give you a high five you right now - I would. LOL
Loved your take on the bloody fingers and nail polish.
Totally awesome!!!!
Music's never let me down. Always been there for me through
thick and thin:)
Thanks for the RL and commenting Mr. Sexy:)
I'm stoked you thought it is sexy. LOL
When I put "just for you" I wanted to bring in the reader.
To captivate and let you build your own visuals - cause it really is just for you. LOL
Not going to lie though - your comment made my heart flutter with happiness. If I could give you a high five you right now - I would. LOL
Loved your take on the bloody fingers and nail polish.
Totally awesome!!!!
Music's never let me down. Always been there for me through
thick and thin:)
Thanks for the RL and commenting Mr. Sexy:)
Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 6:34pm
Wonderfully creepy
This band is coming to visit Poetspeak and who knows what influences they will have
BIG BLOODY LIKE
❤💯
This band is coming to visit Poetspeak and who knows what influences they will have
BIG BLOODY LIKE
❤💯
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 11:23pm
Hi PS
That is music to my ears. LOL
Can't wait to see what you cook up buddy!!!
Love the wonderfully creepy comment.
That is perfect!!!
Thanks for the RL and stopping by!!
That is music to my ears. LOL
Can't wait to see what you cook up buddy!!!
Love the wonderfully creepy comment.
That is perfect!!!
Thanks for the RL and stopping by!!
Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 8:06pm
Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
4th Sep 2022 11:26pm
Hi NG:)
I quit questioning the how and why a long time ago. LOL
For some reason music brings me images to absorb.
Putting them down on paper is challenging and fun at times.
Other times - it can be a pain in the booty!! LOL
thanks for commenting amiga.
Hope you are having a marvelous day!!
I quit questioning the how and why a long time ago. LOL
For some reason music brings me images to absorb.
Putting them down on paper is challenging and fun at times.
Other times - it can be a pain in the booty!! LOL
thanks for commenting amiga.
Hope you are having a marvelous day!!
Re. Making it Beautiful
5th Sep 2022 00:32am
Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
5th Sep 2022 00:39am
Hi LilD:)
Thank you!!
Not everything needs to be complicated.
To me some of the best reading is easy in words
and delivery:)
Totally got what I was trying to convey.
Hope you are having a blast in your travels amiga!!
Thanks for the RL and stopping by:)
Thank you!!
Not everything needs to be complicated.
To me some of the best reading is easy in words
and delivery:)
Totally got what I was trying to convey.
Hope you are having a blast in your travels amiga!!
Thanks for the RL and stopping by:)
Re. Making it Beautiful
6th Sep 2022 11:44pm
Oh, this is so hauntingly beautiful. I felt like she is a ghost in this house that they lived in. Making it beautiful, like her, for eternity just waiting for him to die and join her. Forever wearing this red dress waiting. The echo of her voice and notes heard throughout the house and she always appears at midnight. Blowing these creepy kisses so people can feel her presence. Playing this piano till her ghostly nails bleed. Sitting all alone, an echo scaring people away waiting for him. ;) Absolutely love it. You made it so beautiful. I love haunted places so I would definitely want to hang out with her for a while. Maybe go and get him and bring him back damnit. :p
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
7th Sep 2022 1:59am
Hey Kristina:)
What you just described is awesome!! LOL
To me the tone of the piano was dark and also beautiful in a way.
It does feel haunted when reading too. I also see the wind billowing
around her red dress making is seem like a red cloud she's floating on while playing. hahaha
Too cool:)!!!!
Thanks for stopping by and giving me your take on this.
You're thoughts added something extra special:)
And the RL:))))
What you just described is awesome!! LOL
To me the tone of the piano was dark and also beautiful in a way.
It does feel haunted when reading too. I also see the wind billowing
around her red dress making is seem like a red cloud she's floating on while playing. hahaha
Too cool:)!!!!
Thanks for stopping by and giving me your take on this.
You're thoughts added something extra special:)
And the RL:))))
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
7th Sep 2022 3:00am
Hi PW
Thank you. Was trying to keep it simple with three lines and
relatable words. LOL
So happy you enjoyed:)
Is that a double A!!
Woop Woop!!!
Thank you. Was trying to keep it simple with three lines and
relatable words. LOL
So happy you enjoyed:)
Is that a double A!!
Woop Woop!!!
Re. Making it Beautiful
7th Sep 2022 10:45pm
Beautifully captured... Most often I write listening to piano music...now I have a visual to go along with my inspiration :)
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
7th Sep 2022 11:41pm
Hey Tim:)
Dude !! That is awesome. Had no idea.
Just learned something about ya.
That is pretty cool!
So happy I could give you a visual:)
Thanks for stopping by and commenting.
Dude !! That is awesome. Had no idea.
Just learned something about ya.
That is pretty cool!
So happy I could give you a visual:)
Thanks for stopping by and commenting.
Re. Making it Beautiful
7th Sep 2022 11:36pm
Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
7th Sep 2022 11:45pm
Hi Billy:)
Yes - I was trying to bring in the reader and make it personal.
So glad it worked. Trying to write something with 3 lines
with words people can easily grasp.
I have no idea how to play
piano but in my mind I was killing it. LOL
Thanks for stopping by Snaggy!!
Yes - I was trying to bring in the reader and make it personal.
So glad it worked. Trying to write something with 3 lines
with words people can easily grasp.
I have no idea how to play
piano but in my mind I was killing it. LOL
Thanks for stopping by Snaggy!!
Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
7th Sep 2022 11:49pm
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7th Sep 2022 11:51pm
Re. Making it Beautiful
10th Sep 2022 9:02pm
Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
10th Sep 2022 9:13pm
Hi LJ.
I always like to build when I write.
Leave the intense stuff for the ending.
Trying different images to keep the reader interested.
Thanks for commenting:)
I always like to build when I write.
Leave the intense stuff for the ending.
Trying different images to keep the reader interested.
Thanks for commenting:)
Re. Making it Beautiful
11th Sep 2022 1:10am
So, here I am practicing piano... and I get distracted by poetry (frequent occurrence) and I read THIS, and wow I love it!! Better yet, I checked out the song, and now I want to play it and SCREAM it! 😁
Anyway - awesome, eerie poem, matches the freaky vibe of the video perfectly.
❤️k
Anyway - awesome, eerie poem, matches the freaky vibe of the video perfectly.
❤️k
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Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
11th Sep 2022 3:25am
Hahahah!!!
Greatest comment ever!! LOL
Thank you so much. I'm kinda speechless - doesn't happen often
but I'm rolling with it:) So glad you enjoyed this.
You're going to kill it!!! Go for it!!
Thanks for the RL and amazing comment BK:)
Greatest comment ever!! LOL
Thank you so much. I'm kinda speechless - doesn't happen often
but I'm rolling with it:) So glad you enjoyed this.
You're going to kill it!!! Go for it!!
Thanks for the RL and amazing comment BK:)
Re. Making it Beautiful
14th Sep 2022 00:33am
Re: Re. Making it Beautiful
14th Sep 2022 00:35am
Hey You:)
I just left you a comment.!!
Thank you!!! Truly:)
Sometimes I get metaphored out. LOL
Wanted to keep it simple.
Thank you so so much.
I just left you a comment.!!
Thank you!!! Truly:)
Sometimes I get metaphored out. LOL
Wanted to keep it simple.
Thank you so so much.