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a shadow doesn't feel
I'm hurting in the sunshine
bitter truth I am unlike you
I only know pain and my place in it
it is honest with me
it takes what it needs then leaves
I can't pretend I feel nothing
my eyes shine honesty
regrets, I will never be like you
jaded in trust and confident in the din
I tremble in the noise
my lonely refrain is echoed back
misfit over desire
it will never become you
there's us and then there is them
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Re: Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 3:36am
thank you dearest Ted I am very sensitive at the moment so it is me speaking... thank you for reading I deeply appreciate your thoughts ❤️
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1st Sep 2022 3:40am
Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 5:41am
Crimsin,
This is truly ah darkly ah sweet. And, u right u gotta understand thee. That is the tolerance of our brains as life came u remained strong. No matter how life u do it. U only grasp thy feel. And, to thyself with full breaths u ah true to it. In thyself believe still cause u know your end and begin. Cause in everything ah seen u your heavyweight champion in. Gothic unlazy and, if lost and crazy. U the product of thyself and no one from that can take thee. This write is superbly vibrance! He's out! Sandals!!!! 👁️🤜🤛🤍🌷💋👅🍑🤍🌈🥬🥦🥦🛳️💎🍹🥂🥃🎶🍺🍻🥥
This is truly ah darkly ah sweet. And, u right u gotta understand thee. That is the tolerance of our brains as life came u remained strong. No matter how life u do it. U only grasp thy feel. And, to thyself with full breaths u ah true to it. In thyself believe still cause u know your end and begin. Cause in everything ah seen u your heavyweight champion in. Gothic unlazy and, if lost and crazy. U the product of thyself and no one from that can take thee. This write is superbly vibrance! He's out! Sandals!!!! 👁️🤜🤛🤍🌷💋👅🍑🤍🌈🥬🥦🥦🛳️💎🍹🥂🥃🎶🍺🍻🥥
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Re: Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 5:52pm
hello dearest Birchel thank you thank you for the insightful comment and beautiful thoughts you are very kind and you make me smile with your lovely attitude 💕
Re: Re. a shadow doesn't feel
2nd Sep 2022 00:02am
U are welcome ah twicely. And, much aluv to u ah daily from me. It's also heart to know I make u smile with my attitude. I appreciate u in much aluv u. U take care of yourself Crimsin! 🌷🍑🌷👅🍑🌷💋🍑🌷👄🤜🤛🌷👁️🌈🤎🤍🛳️🎶💎🍺🍻🥂🍹👍
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Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 6:49am
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1st Sep 2022 5:53pm
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1st Sep 2022 1:54pm
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1st Sep 2022 6:26pm
Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 3:38pm
It is saddening to think that you are feeling this way. Just know that you are loved.
That you hold a dear and special place in the hearts of others.
That you hold a dear and special place in the hearts of others.
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Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 4:17pm
Dear B,
I never thought I could/would find solace in anything let alone poetry. I still find myself stunned when I read something that replicates feelings/situations I’ve experienced/experiencing and can breathe in solidarity. There is a prayer quality in this piece that puts it in the world to take a alter things that I find exceptionally touching. It’s real and it’s truthful and I think it’s the thread that can connect us. Aside from that while the subject matter is hard you have brilliantly expressed these feelings. H🌷
I never thought I could/would find solace in anything let alone poetry. I still find myself stunned when I read something that replicates feelings/situations I’ve experienced/experiencing and can breathe in solidarity. There is a prayer quality in this piece that puts it in the world to take a alter things that I find exceptionally touching. It’s real and it’s truthful and I think it’s the thread that can connect us. Aside from that while the subject matter is hard you have brilliantly expressed these feelings. H🌷
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Re: Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 6:29pm
good morning beautiful Honoria I'm happy this moved you so deeply... I am very grateful for having this outlet and way of reaching others...yes solidarity I feel that too with you and the ones we connect with here...I'm happy you picked up on the prayer like quality expressed many times when I am writing I am talking to the spirit I identify with... thank you lovely one for such a thoughtful comment ❤️
Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 4:41pm
Pain is not so bad once you get used to the pain. Almost comforting. This poem made me sad, so I read it again, wallowing in the sadness. Idk, is pain and sadness the detent setting for existence? Or is it a lesson we must learn, to hold it and make it are own, to walk through the valley of shadows to reach the other side. I do not fear your pain, I welcome it with open arms, for eventually, it is the pain that makes us whole. Peace most evocative witch.
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Re: Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 6:37pm
good morning dearest poet pain is part of who we are for some others are shielded from it I believe being too young a soul...sadness is beautiful too melancholy is key ingredient to flavor a soul and make it long...I think certain feelings open doors to new worlds...I believe space to be infinite with much to explore but if you have no basis to go from you won't comprehend these places...a mind can be raped and forced to see but it will burn with hatred perhaps preferring the blindfold to that of sight...the evolution of soul takes a long freaking time many live many worlds...I recognize this place for what it is neither the worst or the best of where I've been... it is simply...time is infinite what do have but to grow and explore...I'm not calling any shots but I'm grateful for the mind that feels... thank you I really enjoyed your thoughtfulness on this poem and for listening ❤️
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Re: Re. a shadow doesn't feel
1st Sep 2022 9:56pm
thank you dearest Jay for your knowledge our minds will expand and we will see the hidden I am a seeker...who once tried to fit with the sheep...they are different...there are many realms to discover 💕
Re. a shadow doesn't feel
15th Sep 2022 8:08pm
"jaded in trust and confident in the din" many of us at one point or another have felt and been there feeling exactly like this.
Well penned.
Well penned.
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