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It's dark under the bridge.
I will meet you at the pillars.
The crowd will disappear.
Does not matter...
I only see your torch.
Burning for me.
A beacon that cannot be ignored.
Separate journeys often lead to the same place.
Father time offering a shaky foundation.
The steps are scary...
They creak and break.
The climb is hard, the fall is worse.
You will never make it with armor.
The weight is to much to bear.
Changing into a skirt and heels.
Also too much to bear sometimes.
But even Father time notices.
He told me to change.
So I did, and he wants me more yes...
In order to torture me more.
The arrows embedded deep.
But you try to pull them out.
Still you cannot save me.
Bleeding forever.
Salt in the wounds.
I will give you fried rice.
You don't want to hear the stories, nobody does.
How many men? today it's only you.
Those scratches are my nails on your back.
You signed me deeply.
So hungry, and I will feed you what you need.
And what will you do to get something.
To get me in your stomach.
You will always meet me at the bridge.
To the right is hell.
To the left is heaven.
But for me it's all hell.
You better wear a helmet.
I have no home so lead me into your bed.
That's where I belong.
No angel, and still I try to shine.
But the darkness just consumes more of me.
And you want what they all want.
To find that endless eagerness and youth.
Scratching your initials inside me.
A rough and lewd pattern.
The same knife, a simple proposition.
My heart is served raw.
I will shine your steel.
You can fight with me if you want.
I already lost but I will win this round.
My aches forging you new armor.
Father time stopped time for me.
Not as a favor, just to torture me more.
Save me, if just for a moment
that never moves forward.
I will be your river, throw your knife in me.
Bleeding for eternity...
I will come for you at the bridge.
The crowd will disappear.
Does not matter...
I only see your torch.
Burning for me.
A beacon that cannot be ignored.
Separate journeys often lead to the same place.
Father time offering a shaky foundation.
The steps are scary...
They creak and break.
The climb is hard, the fall is worse.
You will never make it with armor.
The weight is to much to bear.
Changing into a skirt and heels.
Also too much to bear sometimes.
But even Father time notices.
He told me to change.
So I did, and he wants me more yes...
In order to torture me more.
The arrows embedded deep.
But you try to pull them out.
Still you cannot save me.
Bleeding forever.
Salt in the wounds.
I will give you fried rice.
You don't want to hear the stories, nobody does.
How many men? today it's only you.
Those scratches are my nails on your back.
You signed me deeply.
So hungry, and I will feed you what you need.
And what will you do to get something.
To get me in your stomach.
You will always meet me at the bridge.
To the right is hell.
To the left is heaven.
But for me it's all hell.
You better wear a helmet.
I have no home so lead me into your bed.
That's where I belong.
No angel, and still I try to shine.
But the darkness just consumes more of me.
And you want what they all want.
To find that endless eagerness and youth.
Scratching your initials inside me.
A rough and lewd pattern.
The same knife, a simple proposition.
My heart is served raw.
I will shine your steel.
You can fight with me if you want.
I already lost but I will win this round.
My aches forging you new armor.
Father time stopped time for me.
Not as a favor, just to torture me more.
Save me, if just for a moment
that never moves forward.
I will be your river, throw your knife in me.
Bleeding for eternity...
I will come for you at the bridge.
Author's Note
There is so much inspiration here,
Often when reading I will be inspired to write something in my mind as I go.
So I thought I would start posting some of these,
and include the link to the piece that inspired it.
I will call this series of posts Kristina's Mirror. ;)
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/458988-the-light-from-lu-bus-bridge/
Often when reading I will be inspired to write something in my mind as I go.
So I thought I would start posting some of these,
and include the link to the piece that inspired it.
I will call this series of posts Kristina's Mirror. ;)
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/458988-the-light-from-lu-bus-bridge/
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Re. It's dark under the bridge.
Yahoo hooray for Kristina's Mirrors, listen to me. There is horror, there is lust, and there is get away from thee I will. There's excitement with this passion of for u I crave. So Kristina u truly are the ah Poetess poet of these the very days. There's the cry of suspense within this poem tears. Giving the answer to the questions of each characters fears. Dynamic job! He's out! Sandals, the Birchel Devon Robinson! 🌷👅💋🍑🛳️🤎🤍👍🤜🤛👁️🌈🥂🍹🍺🥃🍜🥥🥦🥬🌽🧅🧅👁️🍄🍄🤎💎🛳️🌷👅💋🍑
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 1:54am
Wow, you leave me speechless Birchel. I absolutely adore your enthusiasm. ;) You know I am full horror, lust, excitement, and passion... And you know I always want to give you what you crave. 'Poetess poet of these very days' Damn Birchel I am blushing. 'Cry of suspense within this poem tears' is such a perfect interpretation. It was definitely very dynamic and this is the way my mind answer's questions as I go. :p There will definitely be more to come and I very much want to do the rounds although it will take some time. :) Thanks so much for the absolutely wonderful comment and support Birchel. U are awesome!
Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 5:51am
Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 3:17pm
Never forget you are awesome Birchel. Just in case I will remind you in the future. ;)
Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 3:53pm
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 1:10am
Loving the idea. What a cool concept
Looking forward to reading your mirror views
Love and light
Ron xx
Looking forward to reading your mirror views
Love and light
Ron xx
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 2:01am
You know me Ron, tons of creative ideas. ;) Not exactly sure what works and what doesn't but it's not like the first time I have taken a chance. lol I love that you like the concept and are looking forward to more. That makes me feel like it might be an okay idea. If people like the idea then I will plan to keep posting these, I know more will come. I do have to say these were written very rapidly and without editing so hopefully they read well. :) Thanks so much for the letting me know your thoughts on the idea and encouragement. I really appreciate that so much!
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 2:07am
“The climb is hard, the fall is worse.”
That line echoed throughout this piece for me. I love your creativity, Kristina. There are a few female poets on this site that push the envelope and I’m always eager to open and see what’s inside. Please, keep your creative juices flowing…can’t wait to read more!
That line echoed throughout this piece for me. I love your creativity, Kristina. There are a few female poets on this site that push the envelope and I’m always eager to open and see what’s inside. Please, keep your creative juices flowing…can’t wait to read more!
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29th Aug 2022 2:56am
That line is definitely central to and echoed throughout the piece so I am glad you can see that. Perhaps those stairs are the shaky foundation which love is built on. It can definitely be hard to climb, and the higher you get the further you can fall. But for me there is no other choice than to love intensely and passionately, and I can definitely see that in you too. ;) There are few sensations more powerful than pain and it's part of the journey. Sometimes pain becomes pleasure, and you can appreciate everything else so much more too.
Thank you so much Mary. You have definitely left me speechless, I keep trying to express how much I love what you said and failing miserably. It means so much to me that you are eager to open and see what's inside and want to read more. You have definitely made me smile. I really appreciate your wonderful comment more than you know.
Thank you so much Mary. You have definitely left me speechless, I keep trying to express how much I love what you said and failing miserably. It means so much to me that you are eager to open and see what's inside and want to read more. You have definitely made me smile. I really appreciate your wonderful comment more than you know.
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 2:08am
Fast and furious Kx speed write, drenching flow, nails on the back, into his bed, fried rice to boot. Styx you might have had a bad day but Kx to the rescue. You've been saved son.
Poetspeak quick write, no editing...
BIG LIKE
Poetspeak quick write, no editing...
BIG LIKE
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 3:07am
Oh God! If you only knew the speed at which I wrote this. :p Definitely drenching flow, nails on the back, love bite on the shoulder, into the bed... a little Asian city feel and atmosphere with the fried rice too. ;) Haha, yeah Styx knows he always owes me. I don't want anyone to have a bad day especially if it means they will owe me. lol Saving people is what I do. Now if only I knew how to save myself... I have not figured that one out yet.
Lol, I like quick Poetspeak writes. No editing necessary.
And love the BIG LIKE as always... Thanks so much for stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me.
Lol, I like quick Poetspeak writes. No editing necessary.
And love the BIG LIKE as always... Thanks so much for stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me.
Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
28th Oct 2022 4:22pm
I aim to please those who please me
Ya know ?
Want some fried kx patties now ...
Ya know ?
Want some fried kx patties now ...
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
28th Oct 2022 4:24pm
Well I am a 'pleaser', that's what I call it anyway. :p
And yeah I know... that's so nice.
fried kx patties, not sure how I feel about that. lol
And yeah I know... that's so nice.
fried kx patties, not sure how I feel about that. lol
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29th Aug 2022 3:29am
I love your passion Francisco. Always keep those flames burning. That's definitely something sexy women can help with. :p Thanks so much for coming by and sharing your thoughts with me. You know how much I love that. ;)
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 2:44am
Hi Kristina:)
This is awesome!! The way you entwined catch phrases that spoke to you
from Styxian's poem and put your own style/spin to them - so well done!!
I'm sure he's going to love this!!
Fantastic write chica:)
This is awesome!! The way you entwined catch phrases that spoke to you
from Styxian's poem and put your own style/spin to them - so well done!!
I'm sure he's going to love this!!
Fantastic write chica:)
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29th Aug 2022 3:40am
Hey Chica!
I love awesome!! you are awesome. ;) My mind does all kinds of obscene stuff with the words. lol And whatever comes from that is exactly as is and written very fast so I love that found it well done. There are definitely certain things that speak to me and those get entwined and spun into something else. :p He better love it damnit! lol (just kidding, not really). Thanks so much for coming by and the wonderful comment. I really appreciate it so much.
I love awesome!! you are awesome. ;) My mind does all kinds of obscene stuff with the words. lol And whatever comes from that is exactly as is and written very fast so I love that found it well done. There are definitely certain things that speak to me and those get entwined and spun into something else. :p He better love it damnit! lol (just kidding, not really). Thanks so much for coming by and the wonderful comment. I really appreciate it so much.
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 3:03am
Cool idea! Love how you've expanded on the original with your signature intensity and lust. Can't wait to read more.
❤️k
❤️k
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 3:50am
I am really happy you like the idea BT. I figured if my mind is going to write them anyway then might as well do something with that. :) 'signature intensity and lust' Oh yeah! I love that you can feel it. And I love that you can't wait to read more, that means so much to me. Thank you so much for the wonderful comment and sharing your thoughts with me. I really love that. :) <3
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 5:39am
This is like watching you blossom.
There are realms within creative writing, and we all should get our feet wet in several.
There's an art to building the surroundings around the subject. You built a castle!
I love how you're expanding your literary horizons. It's rewarding for us all as your readers, as much as it is for you as a writer.
Thank you for feeling that my effort was worth yours. I'm humbly honored, as well as pleased to see this transformation of your poetic flight.
Poetry is limitless. Don't ever hesitate to fly.
There are realms within creative writing, and we all should get our feet wet in several.
There's an art to building the surroundings around the subject. You built a castle!
I love how you're expanding your literary horizons. It's rewarding for us all as your readers, as much as it is for you as a writer.
Thank you for feeling that my effort was worth yours. I'm humbly honored, as well as pleased to see this transformation of your poetic flight.
Poetry is limitless. Don't ever hesitate to fly.
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 2:27pm
You are a phenomenal writer and I appreciate your opinion, and everyone's, so much.
Creative writing is an interesting subject, My writing pretty much always comes from the soul. There is a much deeper and personal message in this for me. I used the Love category to match the original however it should have actually been Dark so I changed it. I was reluctant to use the abuse line else I spin out in comments perhaps... been there done that. But anyway...
The art of building the surroundings definitely comes from experiences and memories for me. I love the idea of building a castle, I would love to have a castle. :) A haunted one would be even better. Expanding literary horizons, I love that. Sometimes it takes someone saying it for me to even realize that yes I am venturing out more into areas I have avoided. It's still weird to be called a 'writer'.
Your effort was absolute worth it and more. And so many others here as well. I will share more of these in the future. I love that you were humbly honored, I hope others will be too.
It is limitless, even three years ago I had no idea. Yes I would write things but it was different. Anyway, thanks so much for your encouragement, it means so much to me.
Creative writing is an interesting subject, My writing pretty much always comes from the soul. There is a much deeper and personal message in this for me. I used the Love category to match the original however it should have actually been Dark so I changed it. I was reluctant to use the abuse line else I spin out in comments perhaps... been there done that. But anyway...
The art of building the surroundings definitely comes from experiences and memories for me. I love the idea of building a castle, I would love to have a castle. :) A haunted one would be even better. Expanding literary horizons, I love that. Sometimes it takes someone saying it for me to even realize that yes I am venturing out more into areas I have avoided. It's still weird to be called a 'writer'.
Your effort was absolute worth it and more. And so many others here as well. I will share more of these in the future. I love that you were humbly honored, I hope others will be too.
It is limitless, even three years ago I had no idea. Yes I would write things but it was different. Anyway, thanks so much for your encouragement, it means so much to me.
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29th Aug 2022 2:47pm
Hey you, 'absolutely outstanding' makes me feel really good, thank you. You found the words perfectly. ;)
I love that are in awe, that's such an incredible compliment. My mind interprets and twists things all the time from experience, memories, and such. The outlook is something that comes from those things. The words just come from the heart and soul, somehow they just end up as they do.
We are very lucky to have you here as well. And thanks, that appreciation and understanding means so much to me.
You are really trying to shut me up now. I see what you are doing. :p and it's working... I am glad you see that it's my soul on the page, so often the deeper meanings are lost or veiled; so often by design or simply subconscious avoidance. But I am sharing more which is an interesting dilemma sometimes.
Just in case all the previous things you said didn't work... you are going in for the kill to really shut me up. :p That's such an incredible thing to say. I don't know what to say back to that. There are so many wonderful people here and I hope this is a bit more personal way I can share with everyone. The challenge is never having enough time to read and comment and write these I would like. But I will keep trying. Thanks again for incredible comment. <3
I love that are in awe, that's such an incredible compliment. My mind interprets and twists things all the time from experience, memories, and such. The outlook is something that comes from those things. The words just come from the heart and soul, somehow they just end up as they do.
We are very lucky to have you here as well. And thanks, that appreciation and understanding means so much to me.
You are really trying to shut me up now. I see what you are doing. :p and it's working... I am glad you see that it's my soul on the page, so often the deeper meanings are lost or veiled; so often by design or simply subconscious avoidance. But I am sharing more which is an interesting dilemma sometimes.
Just in case all the previous things you said didn't work... you are going in for the kill to really shut me up. :p That's such an incredible thing to say. I don't know what to say back to that. There are so many wonderful people here and I hope this is a bit more personal way I can share with everyone. The challenge is never having enough time to read and comment and write these I would like. But I will keep trying. Thanks again for incredible comment. <3
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 5:44pm
We didn't agree with previous comments of this being a love piece. We see torture and acceptance of that torture. Someone punished for their looks, their beauty and their youth. So every lover wants exactly what the previous lover wanted to own, to control, to dirty, to confuse, and destroy if possible. The you can be targeted so vengefully for everything that pedofiling predators think they've lost or never have. It can put the victim in a frame of mind of acceptance, because if not violated by one of their protectors then where was their protectors. The mind is an amazing thing and will convince the body to perform and that that this is love or to use weaknesses as strengths. You have so that blame themselves for their beauty and attempt in someway to destroy that beauty, getting sloppy drunk, cutting themselves, acting out. This is a deep dark piece, it tight of you to put it out there.
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 6:15pm
You are always so incredibly perceptive and you definitely saw much of the deeper meaning. I am very impressed by that. I had originally used the love category because that was the category used by the other piece however dark makes much more sense. The torture and punishment running throughout and that is the central theme. Jealousy, abuse, control, to dirty and confuse, and destroy self worth. "It can put the victim in a frame of mind of acceptance" absolutely. When someone tells you are beautiful and in the next breath says the most horrible things possible over and over again. Those constant threats an assault on the mind. Forcing you into this desperation to hear the good things, doing any and everything for that momentary reprieve. The body will always perform, the psychological damage is so much worse. Acting out in so many ways... substances and self harm among them. Reckless behavior and defense mechanisms that just make you not care about what happens anymore. You outlined much of what is behind the words so well. I really appreciate your intuitive comment so much.
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 10:43pm
First read of you of this type and I
am impressed. Thoroughly enjoyed the write and enjoyed the inspiring write.
Keith
am impressed. Thoroughly enjoyed the write and enjoyed the inspiring write.
Keith
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
29th Aug 2022 11:16pm
Hey Keith, I am so happy you are impressed and thoroughly enjoyed it. There is certainly a lot below the surface and there are definitely other themes that apply but I avoided. Knowing the full meaning I am never quite sure how something like this will read to others so I really appreciate the feedback so much. Thanks so much for meeting under the bridge and sharing your thoughts with me. That's a great place to make out too... and other stuff. ;)
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30th Aug 2022 5:39pm
I am really happy you like it Ted. Lots of things growing in my mind always, and definitely taking lots of different directions. I love that you find them enjoyable and well constructed especially considering the stream of consciousness nature of something like this. Hopefully I can keep leading you down various paths, getting lost in my mind. ;) Thanks so much for stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me. I love that.
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
31st Aug 2022 2:21am
Kristina's XX Mirror.....
The deeper we look, the more there is to see.
The deeper we look, the more there is to see.
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
31st Aug 2022 3:18am
Oooooooo I love that! You have to look deep because there are buried meanings everywhere and there is so much more to see. And I really love that you want to look deeper RT. I know how very perceptive you are and I think you love hunting for stuff in the darkness. It's like a dark Easter egg hunt. :p You never know what you are going to see in this mirror. Thanks so much for visiting me under the bridge, I really love what you said a lot. ;)
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
31st Aug 2022 7:03pm
Nice deep delve, Kristina...
I really think that the short sentences
and application of fragments worked so well...
I think they helped to establish a unique tempo... Which popped in the perception.
I dig that tremendously...
I really think that the short sentences
and application of fragments worked so well...
I think they helped to establish a unique tempo... Which popped in the perception.
I dig that tremendously...
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Re: Re. It's dark under the bridge.
31st Aug 2022 10:41pm
Just trying drown you in the depth of my mind with me.
I am really happy you found it effective especially considering when I wrote there was no structure in mind at all as usual, it simply came out exactly that way. I thought I needed to make the lines a bit more uniform and aesthetically pleasing but I found I liked it as it was despite my OCD.
A unique tempo that popped in the perception. I love that perspective a lot.
And that you dig tremendously. Thank you so much for visiting me under the bridge and the wonderful thoughts. I love it when you stop by.
I am really happy you found it effective especially considering when I wrote there was no structure in mind at all as usual, it simply came out exactly that way. I thought I needed to make the lines a bit more uniform and aesthetically pleasing but I found I liked it as it was despite my OCD.
A unique tempo that popped in the perception. I love that perspective a lot.
And that you dig tremendously. Thank you so much for visiting me under the bridge and the wonderful thoughts. I love it when you stop by.
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1st Sep 2022 3:35am
I think that line length is perhaps
more impactful than meets the eye...
I think sentence length variation can
be magnetic to the reader...
I feel like this is the energy of chaos...
There really are infinite possibilities and only
correct paths...
:)
more impactful than meets the eye...
I think sentence length variation can
be magnetic to the reader...
I feel like this is the energy of chaos...
There really are infinite possibilities and only
correct paths...
:)
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Re. It's dark under the bridge.
1st Sep 2022 6:44pm
Many perspectives taken in this piece, which in itself makes it wonderful. Compelling to me is the juxtaposition of father time’s extensions as a prolonging of the torture and yet the torture seems to have no limits. Meeting under the dark bridge, another torture for the senses, while knowing beneath it all, home is in your keeper’s bed, the ever consuming darkness.
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1st Sep 2022 8:50pm
Hey NG, it's great to see you. There are definitely many different perspectives and feelings, so I am happy you see that. And oh yes, the chaos of my mind tends to write riddles and contrasts to contemplate; sometimes speaking in strange ways. :) I especially love the last part of your comment and how you interpreted that perfectly about the ever consuming darkness. Thanks so much for stopping by to read me and sharing your thoughts. I really appreciate it a lot.
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
6th Sep 2022 5:40pm
Intriguing write Kristina.
"You will never make it with armor.
The weight is to much to bear." I like the metaphor here, as if with the extra weight on us it's harder to climb. I also like the analogy under Father time, understanding how things change and so do us in order to acclimate.
Well done.
"You will never make it with armor.
The weight is to much to bear." I like the metaphor here, as if with the extra weight on us it's harder to climb. I also like the analogy under Father time, understanding how things change and so do us in order to acclimate.
Well done.
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6th Sep 2022 6:34pm
I like intriguing. Yes so many things put extra weight on us and make it difficult to climb but that is part of life. Some people have more of that to bear than others so it's a harder climb. Father time certainly has a way of teaching us so many lessons and stops for no one. You can't get that time back so it's important to learn and make the best use of the times ahead. So often we repeat the same mistakes though. Thanks so much for stopping by to visit me under the bridge and sharing your thoughts. I really appreciate it so much.
Re. It's dark under the bridge.
9th Sep 2022 9:48pm
Hi, you are a true poet....I write stuff too and I don't consider myself a poet.
I like how women write their poetry...their passion is unbeatable.
I have written similar things, that's why I like this a lot.
I like how women write their poetry...their passion is unbeatable.
I have written similar things, that's why I like this a lot.
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9th Sep 2022 10:36pm
Hey Gil, I never really considered myself a poetess either but people have been telling me that so maybe I am. :) I think that's the first time I ever said it though so maybe that's progress. lol Oh yeah! that's something I have an infinite supply of, passion, so I really love that you see it. It's nice to meet you and I will definitely try to read you some over the weekend. I am intrigued to see what's out there and I am so happy you liked it a lot. Thank you so much for visiting me under the bridge and sharing your thoughts. I really appreciate it.
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10th Sep 2022 3:18am