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Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
I continue to take it deeper so that it tickles my throat and I almost cough, so I pull back along the shaft with my tongue swirling over every inch as it goes. I can still feel his hesitation, the conflict about allowing me to take him in my mouth. My tongue flicking and rubbing the tip, tasting a little eagerness coming out on my tongue. Oh yes! This cock needs a hole, any hole to demonstrate its power in. And I am so willing to be that in every way, so horny for that display of power in me. My mind is consumed with only one thing, stroking this cock in my hand with my tongue, my lips, my throat, and everything else too. I stroke the base while sill concentrating on the tip. He grabs my hair, interweaving fingers and pulling hard as it sends an avalanche of sensation between my legs. I love this training; I need to feel firm hands to challenge me. I grab myself even deeper inserting a couple of more fingers to stop the dam from breaching. I grasp his buttocks with the other not letting myself be pushed away. It’s so hot in my mouth and I imagine what that will feel like truly inside me. I know I am going to find out. I continue taking him deep in my throat, back and forth along the shaft. Moving downward sucking deeply like this is the last Gelato on earth on the hottest day in Rome and applying pressure with my lips. It feels meditative stroking him up and down with my mouth, feeling that building orgasm rippling in my mouth so eager to come. And as much as I want to control him, to make him spill out inside my mouth I don’t want that just yet. So I take him out of my mouth watching the movements his cock is making with a life of its own. It’s definitely right at the precipice of climax.
I take one of his testicles in my mouth and suck on it diverting the attention from that eager cock. I want to feel that sperm that is brewing just for me. There is so much I can tell… This is going to fill my tight pussy for sure as long as I continue to exert my innocent control to get what I want, what I need. Taking the other testicle in my mouth to keep a balance. It’s so full of tastes that my mouth craves. I am stroking again, keeping that eager throbbing on my fingers; his and mine. Still gazing up, he is looking down on me with intense pleasure in his eyes, half closed. I continue and with each new contraction he makes in my mouth I want to feel that cum streaming down my throat. My own orgasm is strongly building but I hold it back, I want that to happen at the same time. He tries to regain control and pushes me away as I hold on tight. ‘Stop’ he says but I won’t stop. His cock is pulsating so much, inflated even more filling every bit of my mouth and throat. I can feel the spasms that have started and I just hang on tighter, closing my eyes as if to shield them from what’s coming. He shudders as the first thin fluid seeps out onto my tongue. It’s so tasty, I just swirl it around his cock lubricating it a bit more. He sighs grasping my hair as I pull him all the way in holding his testicles. I feel him start to burst in my mouth, now pulling me tight against him while a stream hits my throat sliding down as I try not to gag and swallow. Another hot stream hits as I stroke my clit and I start to shake letting myself go. It’s like he is running through me and out of me below onto my fingers inside me. He is holding my head tight still which is good because I am not sure I could hang on otherwise, I might fall back. My eyes rolling back as his cum runs onto my lips and I smear it all over him, some dropping on my perky breasts. I want him to lick them for me.
I take one of his testicles in my mouth and suck on it diverting the attention from that eager cock. I want to feel that sperm that is brewing just for me. There is so much I can tell… This is going to fill my tight pussy for sure as long as I continue to exert my innocent control to get what I want, what I need. Taking the other testicle in my mouth to keep a balance. It’s so full of tastes that my mouth craves. I am stroking again, keeping that eager throbbing on my fingers; his and mine. Still gazing up, he is looking down on me with intense pleasure in his eyes, half closed. I continue and with each new contraction he makes in my mouth I want to feel that cum streaming down my throat. My own orgasm is strongly building but I hold it back, I want that to happen at the same time. He tries to regain control and pushes me away as I hold on tight. ‘Stop’ he says but I won’t stop. His cock is pulsating so much, inflated even more filling every bit of my mouth and throat. I can feel the spasms that have started and I just hang on tighter, closing my eyes as if to shield them from what’s coming. He shudders as the first thin fluid seeps out onto my tongue. It’s so tasty, I just swirl it around his cock lubricating it a bit more. He sighs grasping my hair as I pull him all the way in holding his testicles. I feel him start to burst in my mouth, now pulling me tight against him while a stream hits my throat sliding down as I try not to gag and swallow. Another hot stream hits as I stroke my clit and I start to shake letting myself go. It’s like he is running through me and out of me below onto my fingers inside me. He is holding my head tight still which is good because I am not sure I could hang on otherwise, I might fall back. My eyes rolling back as his cum runs onto my lips and I smear it all over him, some dropping on my perky breasts. I want him to lick them for me.
Author's Note
I felt like Part 4 was missing something, so I have updated and revised it. I hope this more accurately reflects my thoughts and will be a better read for you. Thanks for reading and I really appreciate any feedback. X
Part 4... of more.
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Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
OMG your revised piece is seriously hot. Brilliant descriptions, awesome visuals, great job gorgeous
Great read and write
Love and light
Ron x
Great read and write
Love and light
Ron x
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
19th Jul 2022 9:15pm
Thanks for reading the revised too, Ron, I always want to be seriously hot for you. And I appreciate your feedback so much. I hope it was better the second time around. ;) I wasn't sure if I should leave the previous one up but I thought it would be confusing, so I didn't. Thanks for visiting me over in this corner of my forever horny mind and body. ;) It is the biggest corner so there is a lot to see there, and much that I keep secret too. :p
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
19th Jul 2022 8:15pm
a stimulating journey into your erotic persona...pleasurable to visualize...love it..as good as an erotic video...powerful and fulfilling...Lawrence
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
19th Jul 2022 9:16pm
So many stimulating journeys to be had in there. ;) Always super horny and writing it out just makes me more so, that's why I have to take breaks while writing some things. lol I love that you could visualize the imagery. 'as good as an erotic video' awesome I love that. Let me play the video in your mind because I always want to be powerful and fulfilling. More to come...
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
Currently we think that the females on site are totally killing this erotic genre. This piece falls perfectly inline with the three previous ones. This could encourage some readers to join a gym or return to their gyms. This is the perfect workout and one that many would love to happen to them. It kinda reminds us of plot to a many porn movies, the delivery person or the pool guy was always going to get lucky. Hahaha Maybe we should get a job at a gym in pursuit of such an outcome. Tight steamy piece Lil Skirt
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
19th Jul 2022 9:17pm
Females are killing it, hell yeah... but you have inspiration, don't we? I love that you found it to be perfectly in line, that definitely makes happy. I am all about encouraging people to joining the gym, and have sex anywhere, anytime... definitely the perfect workout in my mind, I am so glad you agree. I could write a porn movie. :p The babysitter, the teacher, the escort, the cheerleader, ... it's a long list. lol Become a personal trainer but only accept girls... you are bound to get an out come. :p Tight and steamy go together... so much steam to be had with the right friction.
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
19th Jul 2022 9:51pm
Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
19th Jul 2022 10:39pm
I have a picture that fits perfectly but it might be too much for here. lol Really glad you found the revision steamy PS and liked the pic. Thanks for reading it and I really appreciate you coming by and sharing your thoughts with me. I am really happy you like it.
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
20th Jul 2022 00:51am
Dear xina,
The tease turns into foreplay and foreplay becomes blow-up. The muscle girl playfully loves it the most to make inroads to explore the forbidden area of a man with her tongue and feel the pulsating impact and glide deep to take complete length and balls to fill her mouth to feel his hard deep down the throat and wait to fill her mouth with warm sperm. You set a nice flow. The wild. the game just takes off. I wait for the next part to see your passionate pen.
Love
KS
KS
The tease turns into foreplay and foreplay becomes blow-up. The muscle girl playfully loves it the most to make inroads to explore the forbidden area of a man with her tongue and feel the pulsating impact and glide deep to take complete length and balls to fill her mouth to feel his hard deep down the throat and wait to fill her mouth with warm sperm. You set a nice flow. The wild. the game just takes off. I wait for the next part to see your passionate pen.
Love
KS
KS
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
20th Jul 2022 12:20pm
No area is forbidden when I am done. ;) Oh, how wonderful it is to feel that pulsating impact gliding deep. To be able to take it in full and caress with the tongue making it harder, pulsating more. Edging... Getting things right to that point of... over and over. I am really happy you like the flow. There are more parts to come - there is a lot of passion in the pen, might even have to use it to ... * nevermind *. ;) Thanks so much for sharing your detailed feedback and thoughts with me KS. I really appreciate it. Much love back to you.
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
20th Jul 2022 12:24pm
Perhaps slightly calculated since I revised it but mostly it was literally written very fast straight from the thoughts without any editing, a continuous stream. So aside from having to stop for breaks because ... * cough * nevermind. lol I love that you didn't think it was overly stated. I would much rather it be more art than straight porn. (Not that there is anything wrong with that). I love the fill in the blank conveyance... Ah, so many things could fill that blank. But I definitely love having something filling in my blanks. :p
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
20th Jul 2022 1:20pm
I do try to avoid gratuitously sexual terms when I can, so I am really happy you see that. It's an interesting balance to strike when you are writing about gratuitous sex. But I like to lean more towards erotica when possible, finding that happy median if possible so I really love your comment. It really means a lot to me, and I appreciate your observations so much.
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
20th Jul 2022 12:31pm
Absolutely love Holy climax writes, all Holy climaxes. ;) I am really happy it was a spectacular surprise, more to come I am sure. :p I loved writing it, I get really worked up easy so let's just say it was fun. lol Oh yes! a filthy mind there are all kinds of things in there... Some that are really... * nevermind, innocent look * But I love when it sounds amazing, maybe I did an okay job capturing my thoughts then. ;)
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
20th Jul 2022 1:25pm
Thanks Danny, I really appreciate your thoughts so much and that you could follow mine so well. ;)
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
20th Jul 2022 12:55pm
An exquisite example of how the stimulation of working out is channeled into sexual lust.
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
20th Jul 2022 1:21pm
I know working out always makes me want to get worked out. :p Your body just feels so good, and it wants to feel even better, only one way to accomplish that for me. And truly going to exhaustion in every way is the perfect work out. ;) You cannot help but feel that sense of calm tingling throughout the whole body in the aftershock. I love that feeling. Lots of sexual lust to fuel getting there. ;)
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
21st Jul 2022 7:23am
Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
21st Jul 2022 1:08pm
I love yummy, I can think of so many things that fit the bill. ;) Not sure if you did or not but it's better if you read from part 1 for more of the story and build up in my opinion. Thanks so much for coming by and sharing your thoughts with me. I really appreciate it. ;)
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
21st Jul 2022 4:47pm
Oh X, this is perfect. The sensuality and lust are off the scale. Completely feminine, completely erotic, and the detailed writing is hot as hell. You are re-inventing erotica, and re-inventing both femininity and masculinity.
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
21st Jul 2022 5:17pm
Wow, you took my breath away APPS. Such an incredible comment. I love that you can feel my sensuality and lust, which are always off the scale. ;) But completely feminine and hot as well. I absolutely love that you can feel the femininity even when that femininity is leading the effort to be fulfilled. Feminine energy comes in many forms. :) Re-inventing erotica, and both femininity and masculinity. I am a deer in the headlights. That is such an amazing thing to say, really love everything about this.
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
22nd Jul 2022 3:24am
Ahhh, my love, you are the most brilliant fellatrice I've had the pleasure to know. You take the art of fellatio into a finesse as only a mind like yours can. You pillage this man to his delight much as I dream of knowing from you. Your erotica takes such delicious turns that I feel giddy with excitement and ready to have what you describe so exquisitely. There is nothing like the feel of a woman's lips wrapped around my cock. But you take the experience to a whole other level where my seeds are like stars flooding your milky way until the galaxy is one throbbing core of being.
"Moving downward sucking deeply like this is the last Gelato on earth on the hottest day in Rome"
"It’s like he is running through me and out of me below onto my fingers inside me."
"Moving downward sucking deeply like this is the last Gelato on earth on the hottest day in Rome"
"It’s like he is running through me and out of me below onto my fingers inside me."
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
22nd Jul 2022 2:41pm
Most brilliant fellatrice, oh I adore that. I definitely how to * nevermind, innocent look * :p Pillaging a man to his delight really gets me going. Well, most things do but that too. lol Giddy with excitement is a great feeling, few things could be better, so I want to bring that feeling. A woman's lips are extremely sensual and that 'comes' through a throbbing cock for sure, doesn't it? Greedy to taste her reward... That image of her with a mouth full is just so sexy. mmmmm.... 'flooding your milky way until the galaxy is one throbbing...' now that definitely sounds like a poem waiting to happen to me, beautiful. I really appreciate you taking this journey with me and enjoyed reading all your comments today. :)
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
22nd Jul 2022 10:06am
I'm a little behind on this. But I'll get to part 5 soon. This is super sexy and dirty. Just the kind of thing I like hehe. "This cock needs a hole, any hole to demonstrate its power in". Wonderful 😁
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
22nd Jul 2022 2:44pm
Hey Devilschild, no worries I just love that you are here to share with me. I know you like super sexy and super dirty like I do. haha, so I love that you like taking this little journey with me. I have something else brewing too. And I love that line also... I could really feel it. I really needed it while writing. lol Sometimes you just have to take care of that right away to keep from... * nevermind * you get the point. Just saying...
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
4th Aug 2022 3:04am
that was quite a session!
I bet that gelato & co. never had such good treatment before
I bet that gelato & co. never had such good treatment before
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
5th Aug 2022 00:32am
I love the long hard sessions. The ones where your whole body aches after but you just want to repeat it as soon as possible. Gelato is amazing, I love it. :p Especially on a hot day in Rome, fortunately I got to have that experience when I was living in the UK growing up. But I can think of something better than Gelato for sure. The best anti-depressant for a woman ever and I would never want to let that go to waste. Look up a post called 'Waterfall' by Kx ;)
Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revised)
18th Aug 2022 2:25am
You know if this fantasy were to be known by someone who you were involved with in real life, what would happen?
This person who lives in her head while there is a real man right in front of her.
People can die in silence rather than reveal their true feelings for someone.
This person who lives in her head while there is a real man right in front of her.
People can die in silence rather than reveal their true feelings for someone.
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
18th Aug 2022 2:43pm
The best part of a fantasy is living it in real life. ;) All sorts of things can happen and will happen. There is nothing better than taking someone there with you.
So often people live in their head and are afraid to take risks. I find sex definitely brings down those barriers for me. I love doing things in public and elsewhere... it's so thrilling. ;) Intimacy is an amazing experience anywhere, anytime...
That's certainly true. So often we wonder what the other person is thinking. And so often it's exactly what you are thinking too. ;)
So often people live in their head and are afraid to take risks. I find sex definitely brings down those barriers for me. I love doing things in public and elsewhere... it's so thrilling. ;) Intimacy is an amazing experience anywhere, anytime...
That's certainly true. So often we wonder what the other person is thinking. And so often it's exactly what you are thinking too. ;)
Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
You are one of the more open-minded women out there. There's still a very significant large population of women who live under self imposed restrictions.
You should thank your lucky stars for being able to be with someone who's willing to take you there in all those uninhibited spaces and places.
You should thank your lucky stars for being able to be with someone who's willing to take you there in all those uninhibited spaces and places.
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Re: Re. Little gym rat... Part 4 - I continue to take it deeper (revis
18th Aug 2022 5:47pm
I suppose that's true in general about self imposed restrictions. Yes, I am very open minded. I don't really like restrictions all that much.
It's true that not everyone is comfortable with that although I suppose I have found that hesitation to be easily overcome in most cases.
It's true that not everyone is comfortable with that although I suppose I have found that hesitation to be easily overcome in most cases.