Suicide Note

Fitting. nice.

thanks. i had some issues with rhyme and stuff but sorta workd them out. not my best, but thanks :)

now that is what i would call deep
it touched me...almost made me weep
i have thought of suicide but never so steep
& you are still so young with expected Life by the heaps
but it is too late once you make that fatal leap
because there is no way to wake up from that eternal sleep....

haha, i like that. good job and thanks for the comment! :)

Suicide Note
***************
I am writing this note to say goodbye. 
Im asking you one thing please dont cry. 
I am better off now than I was before 
but Im sorry that you found me hanging 
when you opened up the closet door. 
I dont want a funeral. 
********
I dont care what you do. 
I did my job 
and now Im through. 
********
Please remember me 
from your happier memories 
and keep my secrets 
from family, friends, and my ememies. 
For my friends.
********
I left some notes. They're on my desk 
maybe it'll raise their hopes. 
Distribute them as my final wish. 
Thats the only thing I need you to finish. 
********
I'll keep your secrets 
and the memories you gave. 
I'll keep them and take them to my grave 
((GOOD BYE WORLD IS ALL THAT IS LEFT TO SAY))
((I KNOW YOU WILL ALL UNDERSTAND WHY SOMEDAY))
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The last two lines are a gift to you.
Use them or bin them. Its up to you.

The Warrior Poet

alright, i do like what you did with the last two lines. the only thing there that i would fix in the revision is moving the "for my friends" down to the next verse. what do you think?

Loved it, loved it, loved it! it's brilliant! Wow... Thank you for sharing!:)

Not a problem, thanks for reading :P

you have no idea how much i love this poem, id wish i wrote it, but then it wouldent be the same, i love this, your ever so talented, it actuly reminded me of my failed attempts