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Isn’t life good
I crept into the
clearing. I saw
them lying there.
She sat across
his waist, while
he played with
her hair. Why I
was filled with
rage, I just will
never know. So
now the voices claw at me, I try but cannot go.
I have to feed the monster, the need has to be
met. So I must feed upon them lest I forget.
With every slice of my blade, I feel a debt has
been paid. I hope the demons find peace, as I
bask in the release. It feels too damn good to
kill. Adrenaline
at full tilt. Into
the dumpster
they thud, as I
finish the blood.
Isn’t life good?
clearing. I saw
them lying there.
She sat across
his waist, while
he played with
her hair. Why I
was filled with
rage, I just will
never know. So
now the voices claw at me, I try but cannot go.
I have to feed the monster, the need has to be
met. So I must feed upon them lest I forget.
With every slice of my blade, I feel a debt has
been paid. I hope the demons find peace, as I
bask in the release. It feels too damn good to
kill. Adrenaline
at full tilt. Into
the dumpster
they thud, as I
finish the blood.
Isn’t life good?
Published 22nd Jun 2022
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22nd Jun 2022 7:16pm
we like this, as you know we like the darkness. But style of forming the poem into an upside down cross is tight as heck
22nd Jun 2022 7:25pm
It’s probably not the best flowing poem but it was fun to put together!! :)
22nd Jun 2022 7:28pm
22nd Jun 2022 7:43pm
Great concrete poem... (I see the upside down cross)... evil made beautiful by poetry... such sweet darkness... great dark write Jay...
I love love love the macabre flavour, story and creativity of the formatting! I bet that was a complete bitch to construct yet I think it adds an iteresting and creepy(ier) atmosphere, which absolutely entices me as a reader. I'm dark by nature and if all of my innermost thoughts were made public, I'd probably be locked away.... Mwahahaha!😈 Horror, dark disturbing human nature, gothic fiction, lore and pretty much anything that goes 'bump in the night' will always keep me riveted!! It's a favorite!!
So glad you went darker... this is wonderfully wicked and sinister!!
YES!
🌹-🖤🖤🖤
B
So glad you went darker... this is wonderfully wicked and sinister!!
YES!
🌹-🖤🖤🖤
B
23rd Jun 2022 1:32pm
It actually was difficult try to keep a poetic structure while counting letters and spaces to form the shape of it. It was also a fun challenge to make a simple poem have a little more underlying punch. I appreciate you and your comments greatly!
23rd Jun 2022 7:47pm
Damn Jay, I read this literally and was like now that's passion. lol
Remind me not to leave you... Where else can you find this level of passion.
Great stuff... Love it when you show the Darkness...
I know she was dying for more. I know everyone is dying for more. ;)
Remind me not to leave you... Where else can you find this level of passion.
Great stuff... Love it when you show the Darkness...
I know she was dying for more. I know everyone is dying for more. ;)
23rd Jun 2022 8:06pm
