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Waterworks
the pipes lay dormant
encased in an atmosphere of rust
panting at the hint
of just once more
to be wet
encased in an atmosphere of rust
panting at the hint
of just once more
to be wet
Published 20th Jun 2022
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20th Jun 2022 10:15pm
21st Jun 2022 2:19am
Fucking brilliant minimalist piece. The last two lines can tweak to extend into any metaphor from a heartline, a lifeline, a sewer line, sex. It's just really cool. The more you look at it, the more versatile it is, but in every interpretation, it speaks well of need/want. Neat!
21st Jun 2022 3:56am
21st Jun 2022 3:32am
So many things come to mind when reading - which in my opinion - is what
a minimalist poem should do. Brilliantly written Tim!!
a minimalist poem should do. Brilliantly written Tim!!
21st Jun 2022 3:57am
22nd Jun 2022 1:17am
This has me thinking of many things as well. Okay maybe not that many. lol But it's distracting thinking about pipes that need to be polished or some plumbing work, that's all I am saying.
22nd Jun 2022 10:45pm
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1st Jul 2022 9:04pm
3rd Jul 2022 7:37pm
Wonder if this is about dry pipes or in metaphor. Its super both ways. Thumbs up.!
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
8th Jul 2022 4:01pm
