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Nothing Taken But What Was Given
Go ahead, strip me
rip me into shreds
it's too late for safety
anyway
there's always curiosity
to see where this will lead
Pain is just a tool
something to breathe through
numb no longer an option
So I'll bleed on the floor
decipher Rorschach patterns
of my pride
admire the color of my shame
for daring to feel
in the first place
Published 16th Jun 2022
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16th Jun 2022 3:51am
god this hurts to read I feel you very real pain
I would never want to hurt someone in this way
but I fear in my lifetime I have in some ways unaware...
I would never want to hurt someone in this way
but I fear in my lifetime I have in some ways unaware...
16th Jun 2022 4:28am
Sometimes we know, sometimes we don't, because people don't always share the depth of their feelings. That's a choice made. All we're left with is learning from what we do know and have been told.
The pain here was very real, but it's not current. It was also unintentional and he was going through his own pain. The thing about great love is that it can devastate, but even then, I wouldn't have traded it for the absence of pain.
I'm feeling philosophical or something this evening. Thank you for responding to the poem, letting me know it moved you, and honoring it with a spot on your reading list. All very much appreciated. :-)
The pain here was very real, but it's not current. It was also unintentional and he was going through his own pain. The thing about great love is that it can devastate, but even then, I wouldn't have traded it for the absence of pain.
I'm feeling philosophical or something this evening. Thank you for responding to the poem, letting me know it moved you, and honoring it with a spot on your reading list. All very much appreciated. :-)
16th Jun 2022 5:59am
Dear PS,
This went deep. That second stanza was like a mic drop moment. I felt like I was reliving a couple of past situations of my own. Extremely relatable piece, honestly portrayed and shared.
H🌷
This went deep. That second stanza was like a mic drop moment. I felt like I was reliving a couple of past situations of my own. Extremely relatable piece, honestly portrayed and shared.
H🌷
16th Jun 2022 6:25am
Thank you, H. That stanza is the heart of it for me, so it means a lot that it was a mic drop moment for you. Pain is so universal, but handling it can be very individual. I so appreciate your time and take on this, and for the list add. :-)
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17th Jun 2022 10:20am
You're a gem, honestly. I fucking love your comments. I want to cross stitch and frame them.
My machinery was malfunctioning quite a bit early on in my life. I thought feeling was pretty overrated, honestly. Man, does that shit take you by surprise when it gets hold, doesn't it? I'm pleased you think I've captured those two very important points. Took a long damn time to learn them. Thank you, as always, for giving me your notice and a bit of your time.
My machinery was malfunctioning quite a bit early on in my life. I thought feeling was pretty overrated, honestly. Man, does that shit take you by surprise when it gets hold, doesn't it? I'm pleased you think I've captured those two very important points. Took a long damn time to learn them. Thank you, as always, for giving me your notice and a bit of your time.
