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Wolves bring Frozen Roses in the peak of Winter - part1
the wolf wandered
thru the grey of dusk
emergent from a forest
beset with landridden snow
and drifted with each fall
searching for his Vampress
gripping the frozen stem
between his teeth
the lifeless body
of a blood-purple rose
bruised and frostbitten
by the empire of winter
yet as the ice melted
into his mouth
she became more alive
and he more undead
then shivered
as he had to press it on
and preserve from
fates' duality
and find her
for she could not return
to the realm of mortals
and drink from their cup again
......then in the shadows
over the rise
spied he redness of cloak
suresign of his mistress
and hope rayed in
like first mornings’ light
and spurred him onwards………
thru the grey of dusk
emergent from a forest
beset with landridden snow
and drifted with each fall
searching for his Vampress
gripping the frozen stem
between his teeth
the lifeless body
of a blood-purple rose
bruised and frostbitten
by the empire of winter
yet as the ice melted
into his mouth
she became more alive
and he more undead
then shivered
as he had to press it on
and preserve from
fates' duality
and find her
for she could not return
to the realm of mortals
and drink from their cup again
......then in the shadows
over the rise
spied he redness of cloak
suresign of his mistress
and hope rayed in
like first mornings’ light
and spurred him onwards………
Published 8th Jun 2022
Author's Note
a frozen rose theme just stumbled upon recently............
in response to some very thoughtful and synchronised feedback from a very nice dup lady
© CanisInk-Untis 2022
in response to some very thoughtful and synchronised feedback from a very nice dup lady
© CanisInk-Untis 2022
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9th Jun 2022 11:21am
I have you to thank for this one my dear BluV
if it wasnt for your great feedback on that previous work (SStF)
I would never of sent you that primitive keyboard rose (that was outclassed by your next one)
although my intentions were noble, I stepped out for you and gave it.
This is another one of those penned in 24hrs under inspiration
(maybe thats an idea for a competition??)
and could I share with you that yesterday afternoon, the words, atmosphere, the whole picture just flowed!
I just couldnt help myself, it was like a cinema
I found it a lot easier than constructing the last 4 submissions (BwB inclusive) that even though I was inspired with those too, had to work more on refining them down to an acceptable standard.
Very appreciate your feedback :)
Ive already got the subplot worked out for the 2nd part.......
if it wasnt for your great feedback on that previous work (SStF)
I would never of sent you that primitive keyboard rose (that was outclassed by your next one)
although my intentions were noble, I stepped out for you and gave it.
This is another one of those penned in 24hrs under inspiration
(maybe thats an idea for a competition??)
and could I share with you that yesterday afternoon, the words, atmosphere, the whole picture just flowed!
I just couldnt help myself, it was like a cinema
I found it a lot easier than constructing the last 4 submissions (BwB inclusive) that even though I was inspired with those too, had to work more on refining them down to an acceptable standard.
Very appreciate your feedback :)
Ive already got the subplot worked out for the 2nd part.......
