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Swallowing Fractions to Fill the Hole
The guy with the guitar reminds me of you
not his face
the sound of his voice
he can't have your touch
but I like the way his fingers move
when he plays
It's how he sings his stories
candid straight shots of tequila
with the shielded openness
you wield so well
Felt a twinge of guilt when I give him my number
acutely aware of the false familiarity
in shared glances while he sang
the flirtatious ease chatting between sets
Don't plan to fuck him
my want isn't for that
though willing to change my mind
I crave his telling of tales
the little details that don't fit
in four and a half minutes
key of E minor
Just want to drink in the dark
while he explains how he retrained
his broken hand
to dance along the fret board
it looks a lot like yours
Maybe I'll blow him
moon rising over the beach
wash the taste of you
from my mouth
his not-quite-your-grip
in my hair
It'll do for now
Published 3rd Jun 2022
| Edited 9th Jun 2022
Author's Note
Sort of fits the category, and there's no # I liked for this, so make of them what you will. :-)
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4th Jun 2022 1:03am
4th Jun 2022 5:21am
Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jun 2022 5:02am
4th Jun 2022 4:03am
Hey there ps,
I've read this a few times now and as usual, I found such connection to how you communicate and layout your thoughts. Clever, witty, sexy. It feels like I'm peeking in on your personal inner monolog and to me that's just delicious. That openness you smartly convey and the raw richness... it draws me in and keeps me riveted.
I very much enjoy this new title,too
.. it's a bit cheeky and completely catchy.
Nice choice.
So great to read you again. :)
Hope you are well.
🌹 B
I've read this a few times now and as usual, I found such connection to how you communicate and layout your thoughts. Clever, witty, sexy. It feels like I'm peeking in on your personal inner monolog and to me that's just delicious. That openness you smartly convey and the raw richness... it draws me in and keeps me riveted.
I very much enjoy this new title,too
.. it's a bit cheeky and completely catchy.
Nice choice.
So great to read you again. :)
Hope you are well.
🌹 B
4th Jun 2022 5:28am
Thank you! Such a touching comment, and I always know when I see your name that I'll feel a little better after reading what you've had to say.
The title to this one has been a bit of a process, so I'm very glad to hear that you're enjoying the new one, and I may stick with it for a while.
I'm doing well, thank you, and I hope the same for you. :-)
The title to this one has been a bit of a process, so I'm very glad to hear that you're enjoying the new one, and I may stick with it for a while.
I'm doing well, thank you, and I hope the same for you. :-)
Anonymous
5th Jun 2022 4:10pm
i'm so glad to read about the attraction in story telling whether it's through communication or art and how we can become drawn into it all, i feel like it's an unspoken thing brought to surface and i'm happy somebody is speaking for that, of course it had to be you didn't it 😆
i liked the exploration of devils advocate throughout this poem, that being aware of the familiarity, the guilt and the inbetween stage of moving forward, there was a lot to digest, it felt like many uncertainties in a small time capsule
thank you for sharing 🙂
-ethan
i liked the exploration of devils advocate throughout this poem, that being aware of the familiarity, the guilt and the inbetween stage of moving forward, there was a lot to digest, it felt like many uncertainties in a small time capsule
thank you for sharing 🙂
-ethan
5th Jun 2022 10:18pm
Now that you mention it, you really don't see many people talking (that I've seen) about how people can be attracted to someone because of the way they tell a story, though I think it's pretty common, it isn't often expressed that way.
In a place like DU, for instance, attractions happen and various levels of connection can come from that, all based on whether or not you resonate with someone's poetry and how... everything from friendly acquaintanceship to some form of love. We've seen it all here, haven't we?
One of the things I've learned, and touched on in this piece is that poetry, songs, etc that really reach you can form a false sense of intimacy. One can feel like they really know another person, that someone else truly understands them deep inside, based on a handful of stanzas and good rhyme scheme. As personal and deep as poetry can be, it's still only brief snapshots, a moment in time, a small piece of what someone wants to put on public display. And it's not always autobiography. You can watch some people repeatedly step in the same puddle, and get surprised every time that their shoes are wet and muddy.
Some lessons need to be learned more than once, though, and I think that's true for most, present company included.
I'm very chatty at present, it seems.
Thank you for stopping in, and for seeing so clearly the bits and pieces that I put into this time capsule. Love that description. You're such a poet. :-) The reading list addition is an honor.
In a place like DU, for instance, attractions happen and various levels of connection can come from that, all based on whether or not you resonate with someone's poetry and how... everything from friendly acquaintanceship to some form of love. We've seen it all here, haven't we?
One of the things I've learned, and touched on in this piece is that poetry, songs, etc that really reach you can form a false sense of intimacy. One can feel like they really know another person, that someone else truly understands them deep inside, based on a handful of stanzas and good rhyme scheme. As personal and deep as poetry can be, it's still only brief snapshots, a moment in time, a small piece of what someone wants to put on public display. And it's not always autobiography. You can watch some people repeatedly step in the same puddle, and get surprised every time that their shoes are wet and muddy.
Some lessons need to be learned more than once, though, and I think that's true for most, present company included.
I'm very chatty at present, it seems.
Thank you for stopping in, and for seeing so clearly the bits and pieces that I put into this time capsule. Love that description. You're such a poet. :-) The reading list addition is an honor.
