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burn
shaken in my nakedness I turn to you
with thoughts of should I?
if I tap into your soul I will surely drown
I'm struggling to find my feet right now
I'm knocked down by your visions
so corrupt a feeling
my love for you daunting
I come closer then pull away
when I send out my soul,
I will peer deeply into your darkness
what will I find there?
insidious greed wonders
I am hurting
I am burning
I am yearning
do you feel me there?
my touch disturbs a lake within you
I see the ripple then the waves
your pain swallows me
surely I will drown
it's too late to turn back now
I have no choice, but to walk through the fire with you
Published 21st May 2022
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21st May 2022 9:19pm
Hi crimsin,how u doing?
I love the intricacies of your work.
Thought provoking journey's undertaken by the human spirit.
Your work is like a beautiful hand- made quilt, so rare,that it can't be found in any stores,cos it was created by an Angel.
As I said. Beautiful.
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I love the intricacies of your work.
Thought provoking journey's undertaken by the human spirit.
Your work is like a beautiful hand- made quilt, so rare,that it can't be found in any stores,cos it was created by an Angel.
As I said. Beautiful.
X
21st May 2022 11:23pm
hello dearest Wired I am blushing from your comment well, my soul is... that is such a beautiful thought...I was feeling very raw this morning and this is what came forth I'm so happy it touched you ❤️
On the flip side your rawness brought forth beauty which can be appreciated by many.
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22nd May 2022 1:31am
"....a lake within you"
Excellent. Such a simple line, yet descriptive enough for the reader to expand on for themselves.
This type of poem is what I like to read most from you. You do it so well. It's not aggressive nor fragile. It's curious but not intrusive. It's attractive.
So well done, Crimson.
Excellent. Such a simple line, yet descriptive enough for the reader to expand on for themselves.
This type of poem is what I like to read most from you. You do it so well. It's not aggressive nor fragile. It's curious but not intrusive. It's attractive.
So well done, Crimson.
6th Jul 2022 00:48am
That last line was pretty intense, covering a great of depth of compassion. Consuming spill dear Crimsin.
