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Springs love was borne of time and tide ( Sonnet)
Springs love that came was borne of time and tide
a garment fitted so, a crown to clasp
summer times of smiles, winter times to chide
to tick with golden trust or vain mishap
That captured restlessness within your heart
she was sweet natures breath, in cascades
strength of tempest we faced without regard
abated storms, was innocence enslaved
Flood and turbulence we are held within
endless is the eternity, of hearts entwined
ecstasy that is the bond, natures whim
bonded not broke, the coupled pair so blind
Tides pull, that glad pursuit is ever spring
times tick, its rapture bud, its flower sing
a garment fitted so, a crown to clasp
summer times of smiles, winter times to chide
to tick with golden trust or vain mishap
That captured restlessness within your heart
she was sweet natures breath, in cascades
strength of tempest we faced without regard
abated storms, was innocence enslaved
Flood and turbulence we are held within
endless is the eternity, of hearts entwined
ecstasy that is the bond, natures whim
bonded not broke, the coupled pair so blind
Tides pull, that glad pursuit is ever spring
times tick, its rapture bud, its flower sing
Published 18th Feb 2022
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19th Feb 2022 8:00am
19th Feb 2022 11:33am
Greetings, Poet🍷
I was looking around for something new when your picture caught my eye as a more mature and distinguished writer. So, I looked-in and caught sight of this piece with a catchy title and (Sonnet) pinned to it.
In as much that Sonneteers are a rarity these days, and as a lover of this disappearing form, I thought, "Oh-BOY!" And, I was thrilled to read your excellently rendered poem of love, including imagery, vivid imagination, and keen metaphor … beautifully conceived, too, Sir.
Still, a few issues jumped out you might or might not be aware of, and I'd be most proud to chat with you on them, if you'd like, of course.
I thank you most gratefully for sharing the ink from your excellent pen.
Most thankfully yours! ⁓ Richard🖌
PS: In the off-chance you're interested, I have one Sonnet posted onsite. It's titled, "LIFE'S SONG" https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/320900-lifes-song/
I was looking around for something new when your picture caught my eye as a more mature and distinguished writer. So, I looked-in and caught sight of this piece with a catchy title and (Sonnet) pinned to it.
In as much that Sonneteers are a rarity these days, and as a lover of this disappearing form, I thought, "Oh-BOY!" And, I was thrilled to read your excellently rendered poem of love, including imagery, vivid imagination, and keen metaphor … beautifully conceived, too, Sir.
Still, a few issues jumped out you might or might not be aware of, and I'd be most proud to chat with you on them, if you'd like, of course.
I thank you most gratefully for sharing the ink from your excellent pen.
Most thankfully yours! ⁓ Richard🖌
PS: In the off-chance you're interested, I have one Sonnet posted onsite. It's titled, "LIFE'S SONG" https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/320900-lifes-song/
27th Feb 2022 9:37am
Thank you for that review of the and appreciation of my work. As many writers on this site are stuck in one particular style. trapped in the ease of pros. I have a feeling that you may like me, enjoy the challenge to indulge in more formal styles which now seem regarded as "old Hat".
I have to admit that I am not well read and only started writing at the age of 76, four years ago and before that being an engineer had little interest in meaningful literature
I would welcome any dialogue Richard, but my knowledge of other poets is abysmal.
I promise to read you poem but I must warn you I am poor at critique
Regards SLIP (Dave C)
I have to admit that I am not well read and only started writing at the age of 76, four years ago and before that being an engineer had little interest in meaningful literature
I would welcome any dialogue Richard, but my knowledge of other poets is abysmal.
I promise to read you poem but I must warn you I am poor at critique
Regards SLIP (Dave C)
