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In Morning
Perched Robins sing
in view from
our kitchen window
relieving our silence
a light breeze
whistles through
evoking oils
pressed onto skin
I wash,
breathing deeply
fresh morning air;
late to the moment
you,
knotted-nosed,
recall the perfume
you no longer love.
Published 16th Jan 2022
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17th Jan 2022 00:12am
Dear U,
This makes me automatically think of the shifts in a relationship as they grow apart. Actually, it makes me think of a lot of things within a flailing relationship that are actions and nuances that once were and now no longer. I always admire how you can make the surroundings and what seems the simplest of acts, and apply them so wonderfully to the most personal of emotions. Brava. H🌷
This makes me automatically think of the shifts in a relationship as they grow apart. Actually, it makes me think of a lot of things within a flailing relationship that are actions and nuances that once were and now no longer. I always admire how you can make the surroundings and what seems the simplest of acts, and apply them so wonderfully to the most personal of emotions. Brava. H🌷
17th Jan 2022 1:06pm
Dear H,
I so appreciate your comments, and how it feels that you capture the piece as I had wanted to portray it perfectly, and offer a note to exactly what it is that I want to do as a poet. I appreciate you; thank you.
warmly,
ursa 💜
I so appreciate your comments, and how it feels that you capture the piece as I had wanted to portray it perfectly, and offer a note to exactly what it is that I want to do as a poet. I appreciate you; thank you.
warmly,
ursa 💜
17th Jan 2022 7:20am
I greatly appreciate how you engage the senses and the intellect.
How you formulate the building blocks of your vision.
Tis marvelous.
How you formulate the building blocks of your vision.
Tis marvelous.
17th Jan 2022 1:09pm
Hello Cipher_O,
your comment fuels my passion for writing. I sincerely appreciate you.
warmly,
ursa 💜
your comment fuels my passion for writing. I sincerely appreciate you.
warmly,
ursa 💜
20th Jan 2022 10:12pm
25th Jan 2022 9:52pm
Ursa,
This is a beautifully written, melancholy piece. It's so despairing and frustrating when the thrill, the magic is gone out of a once ardent relationship.
This is a beautifully written, melancholy piece. It's so despairing and frustrating when the thrill, the magic is gone out of a once ardent relationship.
26th Jan 2022 1:01pm
thank you @Gahdess_Worship for stopping by and for commenting.
I appreciate you,
ursa 💜
I appreciate you,
ursa 💜
