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The Beauty of the Rose
The light awakens the new day
Nature is alive and vibrant and wanting to play
I listen to the sound of the flowing stream
As my mind dips into a glorious day dream
I gaze upon the rose before me and bask in the wonder
The beauty is a vision splendid as I embrace the spell I am under
I lightly trace her smooth soft petals as she blooms before my eyes
I watch the dew form and slide down the silky walls inside.
I ease my lips closer to taste the dew against the brilliant pink
I ease inside as the walls quiver my eyes wide open, never to blink.
The taste divine as my tongue explores her majestic wonder as she appears to sigh
I focus on the tip above her full bloom taking my time as my dream comes alive
Her walls turn to crimson as her stem shakes as I enjoy her pleasing mist
I lay back and close my eyes and relive the beauty of the rose a soothing bliss
Nature is alive and vibrant and wanting to play
I listen to the sound of the flowing stream
As my mind dips into a glorious day dream
I gaze upon the rose before me and bask in the wonder
The beauty is a vision splendid as I embrace the spell I am under
I lightly trace her smooth soft petals as she blooms before my eyes
I watch the dew form and slide down the silky walls inside.
I ease my lips closer to taste the dew against the brilliant pink
I ease inside as the walls quiver my eyes wide open, never to blink.
The taste divine as my tongue explores her majestic wonder as she appears to sigh
I focus on the tip above her full bloom taking my time as my dream comes alive
Her walls turn to crimson as her stem shakes as I enjoy her pleasing mist
I lay back and close my eyes and relive the beauty of the rose a soothing bliss
Published 21st Dec 2021
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Hey there, NB - Welcome!! ;)
Your chosen genre of erotica is a tad bit fickle, where you're sometimes needing more finesse and sometimes needing less, to find that you've possibly created something magical. It's a bit of a balancing act, one that I still have my own. love /hate issues navigating. Plus, I think it's also just personal choice— what can get one person off mentally or physically can sometimes be the polar opposite of what works for someone else...It's essentially a crap shoot.... hence, the finickiness.. With your virgin poetry attempt (at least here on DU) being valiant, alluring and holding no surprises as to it's exactitude, it feels wholly like you're on your way to discovering that elusive key. Knowing yourself well and understanding your own particular inclinations makes for better writing, in my opinion..and you seem to have that knowledge down pat.
Btw, you do a wonderful job with your descriptiveness, too... captivating....
Keep up the terrific work!
In warm kindness,
🌹 - B
Your chosen genre of erotica is a tad bit fickle, where you're sometimes needing more finesse and sometimes needing less, to find that you've possibly created something magical. It's a bit of a balancing act, one that I still have my own. love /hate issues navigating. Plus, I think it's also just personal choice— what can get one person off mentally or physically can sometimes be the polar opposite of what works for someone else...It's essentially a crap shoot.... hence, the finickiness.. With your virgin poetry attempt (at least here on DU) being valiant, alluring and holding no surprises as to it's exactitude, it feels wholly like you're on your way to discovering that elusive key. Knowing yourself well and understanding your own particular inclinations makes for better writing, in my opinion..and you seem to have that knowledge down pat.
Btw, you do a wonderful job with your descriptiveness, too... captivating....
Keep up the terrific work!
In warm kindness,
🌹 - B
Anonymous
22nd Dec 2021 2:13am
Hey NB……what a great ink to start out with……..very creative…….sexy yet very sensual too……enjoyed this much……..purple luv & hugs xo :)
22nd Dec 2021 2:21am
Thank you Purple is my favorite color.
So looking forward to embrace your work mmm
So looking forward to embrace your work mmm
23rd Dec 2021 1:00am
Hey NB, I was really swept away by this wonderfully erotic and sensual piece. A lovely flow that filled my mind with such delicious imagery. The tender admiration and attentiveness for her pleasure is really beautiful. I could feel every word building up to the exciting climax. Really beautiful work.
23rd Dec 2021 3:23am
Thank you very much. I'm so glad you could feel and see the vision in my mind and make it yours.
