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When Angels Fly
Sunbathing
up top on
towels of clouds
soaking up
close to sun
army of halos
electrified
in the land of
Kingdom Come
Feel them in the air it's swirling
Up above the clouds are moving
Hope they
pass me by
don't want to
learn to fly
need another drop
of eternity or time
dial back that
flaming sun dial
up in the sky
So much left to do
a great life left to live
praying they stay up high
when angels fly
Searching for a
miraculous miracle
something in the
air isn't right
do I have any fight left
or Is it just dread
inside my head
It recklessly treads
stomping me down
Don't see any clouds swirling or moving
It's dark outside and the tears keep flowing
Need you tonight
swoop down with
golden glory of wings
praying they don't pass me by
when angels fly
up top on
towels of clouds
soaking up
close to sun
army of halos
electrified
in the land of
Kingdom Come
Feel them in the air it's swirling
Up above the clouds are moving
Hope they
pass me by
don't want to
learn to fly
need another drop
of eternity or time
dial back that
flaming sun dial
up in the sky
So much left to do
a great life left to live
praying they stay up high
when angels fly
Searching for a
miraculous miracle
something in the
air isn't right
do I have any fight left
or Is it just dread
inside my head
It recklessly treads
stomping me down
Don't see any clouds swirling or moving
It's dark outside and the tears keep flowing
Need you tonight
swoop down with
golden glory of wings
praying they don't pass me by
when angels fly
Published 19th Dec 2021
Author's Note
We had a trampoline in my parents back yard. Sometimes I would lay on it and just watch the clouds sail by. In my mind when clouds start moving I feel the angels are flying by heading somewhere. A whole flock of angels on a mission of miracles. Real miracles. Makes me wonder how many close ones we had and just never realized.
To me they are the Rock Stars of heaven who wear rosaries as their bling and have a few swords masquerading as feathers hidden in their wings:)
Listening to Journey - Only the Young
To me they are the Rock Stars of heaven who wear rosaries as their bling and have a few swords masquerading as feathers hidden in their wings:)
Listening to Journey - Only the Young
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19th Dec 2021 00:59am
Sweet poem. I loved laying on my trampoline looking up. Then one day the springs broke 💔
Hi N!
Me too:)
Not fun either when they pinch you. Ouch!!!
Always kinda tricky getting off and on when you loose the
freaking ladder. LOL
Me too:)
Not fun either when they pinch you. Ouch!!!
Always kinda tricky getting off and on when you loose the
freaking ladder. LOL
19th Dec 2021 1:06am
Love this ode to childhood memories and the nod to angelic beings. I’ve read they are terrifying to look at, but I can’t fathom it so I see them as beautiful.
I too have wondered how many times they’ve been watching over me, though I do know of a few specific ones.
Really enjoyed this one. The rhyme scheme was really terrific and it read smooth like butter.
I too have wondered how many times they’ve been watching over me, though I do know of a few specific ones.
Really enjoyed this one. The rhyme scheme was really terrific and it read smooth like butter.
19th Dec 2021 1:14am
Hi Eerie!!
Like butter. Best compliment ever amiga:)!!!!
I see them as beautiful as well. Just full of feathers of love.
Just wanted to write about them today. One of them must
have been whispering in my ear. LOL
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment chica!!!
Like butter. Best compliment ever amiga:)!!!!
I see them as beautiful as well. Just full of feathers of love.
Just wanted to write about them today. One of them must
have been whispering in my ear. LOL
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment chica!!!
19th Dec 2021 1:13am
19th Dec 2021 1:19am
Hey Ron!!
Thank you for the snaps amigo:)
Just a little pondering about angels.
Thanks for the RL and the comment
Woop Woop!!
Thank you for the snaps amigo:)
Just a little pondering about angels.
Thanks for the RL and the comment
Woop Woop!!
Anonymous
- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
19th Dec 2021 1:57am
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19th Dec 2021 6:40pm
Hey BP!!!
Thank you.
Just a channel I had on in my mind's T.V. LOL
Hope you are having a great Sunday amigo:)
Thank you.
Just a channel I had on in my mind's T.V. LOL
Hope you are having a great Sunday amigo:)
19th Dec 2021 2:38am
19th Dec 2021 6:45pm
Hey PS!!
Sometimes that trampoline was scary. When I had to share with my brother I always got too close to the edge. By the springs. Scared I would accidentally just jump right off in mid air. LOL
Much preferred just laying on it daydreaming.
Thanks for stopping by amigo!!
Sometimes that trampoline was scary. When I had to share with my brother I always got too close to the edge. By the springs. Scared I would accidentally just jump right off in mid air. LOL
Much preferred just laying on it daydreaming.
Thanks for stopping by amigo!!
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Dec 2022 00:45am
19th Dec 2021 3:26am
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19th Dec 2021 6:54pm
Hey Buddy:)
Thank you for your snaps!! The movement of clouds for me is so mesmerizing. They have such a rolling flow. Like a calm river in the sky which it kinda is. LOL
I love Journey. All of their albums actually.
I know what you mean about that feeling -of another lifetime. The intuition of the spirit. It never forgets:)
Thanks for the RL
Whoop Whoop!!! hahah
Have a wonderful Sunday amigo:)
Thank you for your snaps!! The movement of clouds for me is so mesmerizing. They have such a rolling flow. Like a calm river in the sky which it kinda is. LOL
I love Journey. All of their albums actually.
I know what you mean about that feeling -of another lifetime. The intuition of the spirit. It never forgets:)
Thanks for the RL
Whoop Whoop!!! hahah
Have a wonderful Sunday amigo:)
19th Dec 2021 9:17am
Dear A,
I loved how this write went from calm and fun memories of childhood, the total admiration for the beauty of clouds and angels to oh my god don’t take me yet! I have more shoes to buy, dresses to wear, and lunch dates to attend!
I really dig the idea of angels as miracle ninja’s and blingy rosaries! Fantastic visual. I’ve further adorned some of them with the newer trend of cotton candy blue and funky fuchsia hair too! Very thoughtful combination of ideas and beautiful execution! Great piece. H🌷
I loved how this write went from calm and fun memories of childhood, the total admiration for the beauty of clouds and angels to oh my god don’t take me yet! I have more shoes to buy, dresses to wear, and lunch dates to attend!
I really dig the idea of angels as miracle ninja’s and blingy rosaries! Fantastic visual. I’ve further adorned some of them with the newer trend of cotton candy blue and funky fuchsia hair too! Very thoughtful combination of ideas and beautiful execution! Great piece. H🌷
19th Dec 2021 7:00pm
Hahahaha.
You are a Rock Star when it comes to comments amiga. I picture you typing away with glammed up bracelets and blinging rocks of rings on your fingers typing in a frenzy. LOL
Yes I do think of angels quite a lot. When I was younger my mom put a guardian angel print above my bed. She was guarding two kids across a bridge.
I want my angels to have a sense of style. Why not?
Just rock and roll with it. LOL
Thanks for stopping by and commenting!!
You are a Rock Star when it comes to comments amiga. I picture you typing away with glammed up bracelets and blinging rocks of rings on your fingers typing in a frenzy. LOL
Yes I do think of angels quite a lot. When I was younger my mom put a guardian angel print above my bed. She was guarding two kids across a bridge.
I want my angels to have a sense of style. Why not?
Just rock and roll with it. LOL
Thanks for stopping by and commenting!!
19th Dec 2021 10:38am
The rhythms in stanzas 3-5 are real nice--
The use of cretic feet, as their own lines, with rhymes, as in lines 2 & 4 of the 3rd stanza:
Hope they
pass me by
don't want to
learn to fly
Or embedded in lines of iambs, like the opening of the 4th stanza:
So much LEFT to DO
a great life LEFT to LIVE
praying they STAY up HIGH
when angels fly
A nice, understated move in the above lines, the way the 2nd lines arched, first foot (a GREAT LIFE, -``) echoes the iamb+cretic of the 1st line (so MUCH LEFT, -``)
Nice workmanship with the rhythms--enjoyed!
On the subject of Angels--the Bible says followers, once baptized in the blood of the Lamb, have all the Angels at His command, at their command, & that the working of miracles, generally called "healing," should be considered no big deal.
Enjoyed!
The use of cretic feet, as their own lines, with rhymes, as in lines 2 & 4 of the 3rd stanza:
Hope they
pass me by
don't want to
learn to fly
Or embedded in lines of iambs, like the opening of the 4th stanza:
So much
a great life
praying they
when angels fly
A nice, understated move in the above lines, the way the 2nd lines arched, first foot (a GREAT LIFE, -``) echoes the iamb+cretic of the 1st line (so MUCH
Nice workmanship with the rhythms--enjoyed!
On the subject of Angels--the Bible says followers, once baptized in the blood of the Lamb, have all the Angels at His command, at their command, & that the working of miracles, generally called "healing," should be considered no big deal.
Enjoyed!
19th Dec 2021 7:07pm
Hi Mark!!!
So glad you stopped by for a comment. Where to start with your fabulous in depth comment.
I wanted to use any word other than die.
I wanted to keep it hopeful. I felt that word would darken the rhythm of my message. Hope that makes sense. LOL
I've missed these comments amigo
Hope you stick around:)
So glad you stopped by for a comment. Where to start with your fabulous in depth comment.
I wanted to use any word other than die.
I wanted to keep it hopeful. I felt that word would darken the rhythm of my message. Hope that makes sense. LOL
I've missed these comments amigo
Hope you stick around:)
Anonymous
- Edited 19th Dec 2021 7:55pm
19th Dec 2021 7:51pm
Lovely read, Adelphina!
I am prone to and usually drawn to the darker side of things, so for me, angels have usually found their way to becoming more beastlike in my mind... lol. Taking a little stroll upon your imagination was a true, lovely excursion..... thank you.
By the way Journey is one of my favorite bands, ever! I'm a huge fan and probably could listen to the song 'Stone In Love' everyday for the rest of my life and be happy as a clam;.instantly transported back to the summers of my childhood!... So yeah, I loved the Author's note as well.... 👍🏻 .... hahaha...
Nice work!
🌹 - B
I am prone to and usually drawn to the darker side of things, so for me, angels have usually found their way to becoming more beastlike in my mind... lol. Taking a little stroll upon your imagination was a true, lovely excursion..... thank you.
By the way Journey is one of my favorite bands, ever! I'm a huge fan and probably could listen to the song 'Stone In Love' everyday for the rest of my life and be happy as a clam;.instantly transported back to the summers of my childhood!... So yeah, I loved the Author's note as well.... 👍🏻 .... hahaha...
Nice work!
🌹 - B
Hi B!!
Just had that phrase in my mind. When Angels Fly and automatically thought of my trampoline daydreaming days and the clouds just coasting by. LOL And you are most welcome:)
Listening to Journey this very second amiga!!
Have a great Sunday:)
Thanks for commenting and stopping by:)
Just had that phrase in my mind. When Angels Fly and automatically thought of my trampoline daydreaming days and the clouds just coasting by. LOL And you are most welcome:)
Listening to Journey this very second amiga!!
Have a great Sunday:)
Thanks for commenting and stopping by:)
25th Dec 2021 3:06am
Hey Angel…….this a great ink…….I’m sure when it’s your time…….you will no doubt fly with the Angel’s…….I personally feel you’re an Angel among us…….purple luv & hugs Merry Christmas! 🎄
25th Dec 2021 3:12am
Hi FG:)
Awhhh thank you.
What a great thing to say.
Just made me smile:)
Merry Christmas my living rose garden:)
Awhhh thank you.
What a great thing to say.
Just made me smile:)
Merry Christmas my living rose garden:)
