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Crumbling
salt spray, november gray
nothing stops the tide
heeding call of the milky way
nothing stops the tide
sea relentless, wave on wave
we're boulders...
boulders ground to sand
my walls are crumbling
my will is crumbling
my words are crumbling
my mind is crumbling
(can you hear me, crumbling?)
tightrope, balancing
quicksand at my feet
beach face washed with salt again
quicksand at my feet
waters rising, take a breath
there's seaweed...
seaweed in my hair
my walls are crumbling
my will is crumbling
my words are crumbling
my mind is crumbling
(can you hear me, crumbling?)
nothing stops the tide
heeding call of the milky way
nothing stops the tide
sea relentless, wave on wave
we're boulders...
boulders ground to sand
my walls are crumbling
my will is crumbling
my words are crumbling
my mind is crumbling
(can you hear me, crumbling?)
tightrope, balancing
quicksand at my feet
beach face washed with salt again
quicksand at my feet
waters rising, take a breath
there's seaweed...
seaweed in my hair
my walls are crumbling
my will is crumbling
my words are crumbling
my mind is crumbling
(can you hear me, crumbling?)
Published 6th Dec 2021
| Edited 11th Dec 2021
Author's Note
Here it is on my bandlab page:
https://www.bandlab.com/post/3a037533-9458-ec11-94f6-a04a5e79a6b8
https://www.bandlab.com/post/3a037533-9458-ec11-94f6-a04a5e79a6b8
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6th Dec 2021 8:35pm
6th Dec 2021 9:25pm
Thank you! ❤ It is becoming a song... will add the link when it's done. 🙂
❤k
❤k
6th Dec 2021 10:13pm
6th Dec 2021 10:17pm
3am write to match a cool instrumental track that wouldn't get out of my head. Stay tuned for the finished product...
Thanks for the kudos
❤k
Thanks for the kudos
❤k
6th Dec 2021 10:43pm
loved the rhythm and
the free flow of this song K.
I hope you make an audio rendition
sooner.
Subject is full on impactful.
the free flow of this song K.
I hope you make an audio rendition
sooner.
Subject is full on impactful.
6th Dec 2021 11:53pm
7th Dec 2021 1:41am
I love this with whole thing!!
My favorite is the 3rd verse!!
Balancing on quicksand:)
Sending positive vibes your way.
My favorite is the 3rd verse!!
Balancing on quicksand:)
Sending positive vibes your way.
7th Dec 2021 1:44am
7th Dec 2021 10:29am
Dear K,
I’m psyched to hear this out to music. How come when I’m awake at 3 am I only want to eat? You write a song! Where’s the creative justice?! The refrain is so relative when you’re feeling out of sorts and cant get out of the drowning feeling. I love the relationship to the energy of the ocean. Can’t wait to hear the finished product.
Great write. H🌷
I’m psyched to hear this out to music. How come when I’m awake at 3 am I only want to eat? You write a song! Where’s the creative justice?! The refrain is so relative when you’re feeling out of sorts and cant get out of the drowning feeling. I love the relationship to the energy of the ocean. Can’t wait to hear the finished product.
Great write. H🌷
7th Dec 2021 10:29pm
Thanks so much. The ocean is both energizing and humbling in the best way possible...
I can't wait to hear the finished product either! Recording is done and the sound wizard is mixing it.... 😁
❤k
I can't wait to hear the finished product either! Recording is done and the sound wizard is mixing it.... 😁
❤k
So, who are you…really? Are you a famous singer? This is ah-maze-ing!!!!
You have a beautiful voice! I loved how you harmonized it and the melody is as beautiful as the words!!
Congratulations and you know what this means now right? We’ll be expecting more of these. 🎼
Awesome!!!
You have a beautiful voice! I loved how you harmonized it and the melody is as beautiful as the words!!
Congratulations and you know what this means now right? We’ll be expecting more of these. 🎼
Awesome!!!
10th Dec 2021 1:13pm
Thanks so much for your enthusiastic praise, H! I'm blushing. 😊
There's a method to my madness of sharing... if people expect me to make music, I might actually get over my nerves and do it... 😉
❤❤
There's a method to my madness of sharing... if people expect me to make music, I might actually get over my nerves and do it... 😉
❤❤
7th Dec 2021 9:42pm
Bt busting out the tunes like a true Songsmith.
I absolutely feel your rhythm & vibe.
You connect!
...and I find myself singing your words to my own tunes in my head.
Sounds amazing too with the echo of your words reverberating in my empty skull, lol.
...not even kidding about singing your song, stuck in my head,
Love it!!!
I absolutely feel your rhythm & vibe.
You connect!
...and I find myself singing your words to my own tunes in my head.
Sounds amazing too with the echo of your words reverberating in my empty skull, lol.
...not even kidding about singing your song, stuck in my head,
Love it!!!
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11th Dec 2021 12:18pm
LOL give that rowdy superfan at the back another beer before the bouncer kicks him out.... 😆😆 🍺
Thanks so much, Feet. Really appreciate your support.
❤k
Thanks so much, Feet. Really appreciate your support.
❤k
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15th Dec 2021 00:10am
Oooh, hello fellow musician! 😀 I always wished I was a drummer.
Thank you so much for your assessment & encouragement. Putting my words to music is new to me, and it's absolutely thrilling.
❤k
Thank you so much for your assessment & encouragement. Putting my words to music is new to me, and it's absolutely thrilling.
❤k
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