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One more
I’m feeling lonley.
Want someone to hold me.
Want someone to be here to love me at night.
Tell me that everything will be fine.
It’s hard to break through this armor like shell.
It’s hard to accept that real life is hell.
You said you were done,
Go walk out the door,
Everyone else left what the hell is one more.
Want someone to hold me.
Want someone to be here to love me at night.
Tell me that everything will be fine.
It’s hard to break through this armor like shell.
It’s hard to accept that real life is hell.
You said you were done,
Go walk out the door,
Everyone else left what the hell is one more.
Published 29th Oct 2021
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30th Oct 2021 00:11am
30th Oct 2021 1:45am
Indeed!
What a last line--so hard!
Sometimes we lose so much, we throw away to keep what's left from being taken...
Very authentic feelings in the 1st half; 2nd half is believable.
Hang in there!
What a last line--so hard!
Sometimes we lose so much, we throw away to keep what's left from being taken...
Very authentic feelings in the 1st half; 2nd half is believable.
Hang in there!
Anonymous
- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
30th Oct 2021 5:28am
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31st Oct 2021 3:56am
Dear M,
You’ve expressed the feelings of apathy, complete loss and total sadness in the confines of this poem so poignantly I’m spinning my verbal wheels trying to come up with a different way to say how meaningful this poem is for me. I can’t. It’s a great write that has touched my heart. H🌷
You’ve expressed the feelings of apathy, complete loss and total sadness in the confines of this poem so poignantly I’m spinning my verbal wheels trying to come up with a different way to say how meaningful this poem is for me. I can’t. It’s a great write that has touched my heart. H🌷
31st Oct 2021 11:57am
