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Mall Rat
We wandered Yorkdale where
my sister managed
La Vie En Rose, we
drank Orange Julius’ and
swept sticky fingers
across CD sides at
Sunrise Records
until we were thrown
out at day’s end.
Sis locked up,
every time with a bag
in hand
for her boyfriend,
she would mumble,
when she drove us all home.
my sister managed
La Vie En Rose, we
drank Orange Julius’ and
swept sticky fingers
across CD sides at
Sunrise Records
until we were thrown
out at day’s end.
Sis locked up,
every time with a bag
in hand
for her boyfriend,
she would mumble,
when she drove us all home.
Published 24th Oct 2021
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24th Oct 2021 2:02am
24th Oct 2021 12:54pm
Oh thank you PS, for your comment.. nothing like the days where there was time to aimlessly wander shopping malls.
Happy Sunday!
warmly,
ursa 💜
Happy Sunday!
warmly,
ursa 💜
Anonymous
24th Oct 2021 5:59am
Awesomely poeted!
I was totally there for the nostalgia, Ursa
Great memories, indeed.
🌹 - 💙
B
I was totally there for the nostalgia, Ursa
Great memories, indeed.
🌹 - 💙
B
24th Oct 2021 12:56pm
Ahh thank you B, for your comment! Happy to have you along on this little journey into a few cute things of the past.
Happy Sunday, dear friend.
warmly,
ursa 💜
Happy Sunday, dear friend.
warmly,
ursa 💜
24th Oct 2021 6:51am
Very enjoyable.
I think I like the ending the best--it's very...adept, at using the bit of remembered dialogue to bookend the poem, without explaining anything.
Extremely well-done.
Enjoyed!
I think I like the ending the best--it's very...adept, at using the bit of remembered dialogue to bookend the poem, without explaining anything.
Extremely well-done.
Enjoyed!
24th Oct 2021 1:02pm
Thank you for your comment, Mark. Sincerely appreciate that you shared with me that you like the ending the best. I am focusing a little more on my endings, offering different textures , intentionally moving from stronger 'wrap-up' statement endings to let the rest of the poem do more of the talking.
Sincerely appreciated, and Happy Sunday,
ursa 💜
Sincerely appreciated, and Happy Sunday,
ursa 💜
24th Oct 2021 1:07pm
This set my mind ablaze with such symbols
and signs, emblematic of the cultural time period,
which you have rendered beautifully.
Awesome.
and signs, emblematic of the cultural time period,
which you have rendered beautifully.
Awesome.
25th Oct 2021 2:25pm
Cipher_O, thank you again! Sincerely appreciate you taking the time to read, to comment. So grateful for your kindness.
warmly,
ursa 💜
warmly,
ursa 💜
