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Remember Me
Remember me
When my shadow has left your sight
Remember me
When the nights are long and lonely
And I'm no longer by your side
When memories are all you have
Remember me
When my shadow has left your sight
Remember me
When the nights are long and lonely
And I'm no longer by your side
When memories are all you have
Remember me
Published 11th Oct 2021
| Edited 20th Oct 2021
Author's Note
For Left Hand....Right A Rondelet Competition
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Anonymous
- Edited 9th Apr 2022 5:45am
11th Oct 2021 6:54am
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11th Oct 2021 7:27am
11th Oct 2021 10:36am
11th Oct 2021 8:52pm
Dear S,
I loved the delicacy of this. A simple request with a deep passion of sadness. The ache and tenderness you have managed to convey is enviable. Beautiful piece. H🌷
I loved the delicacy of this. A simple request with a deep passion of sadness. The ache and tenderness you have managed to convey is enviable. Beautiful piece. H🌷
12th Oct 2021 5:42pm
13th Oct 2021 11:21pm
This felt like a fragile flower, wilting away. Thanks for entering the competition.
LJ
LJ
16th Oct 2021 2:39pm
14th Oct 2021 11:47am
16th Oct 2021 2:40pm
20th Oct 2021 2:48pm
I would change "have" to "has" in Line 2 to correct the tense . . . then print this onto an image, frame it, and hang it on the wall for your family & friends to admire ( and perhaps be haunted by ). It's a poem truly worthy of the labels "minimalist" and "art".
20th Oct 2021 3:48pm
Thank you JB. I will correct it. I appreciate your comment and critique. Honored for the RL🙏
