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A Renewed Challenge to J-Z

I wonder if you’re capable of writing verse
that’s not about calamity
or man’s “bright” Gnostic otherworldly destiny,
or how men are depraved, like beasts,
unsaved, unsave-able and jealous, full of
damning lusts,
or just how much you love the lord
and see in him relief, release,
from this world’s misery?
 
Can you post, instead, a gentled exploration of
the subtitles of love
with cunning vibrant words,
not heavy-handed ones,
as is your wont,
that show, not tell,
through simile and metaphor
and language that is sparkling, fresh,
just what the joys of being flesh is like,
and how there’s liberation true and good
within a woman’s kiss
or what the feeling is of being wrapped,
enveloped in,
the raptured bliss inside her arms?
 
Have you ability to craft the kind of lines
that make a woman catch her breath and sigh
for want of your embrace?
that and brim her glad she’s bodied,
of the earth,
and not a flimsy ghost
up somewhere in the sky?
.
Sing, now, if you can,
of how the earth’s our home,
a sacred place
that God intends to bring once more
alive, and to uncurse, renew.
 
You say you’re talented in poetry
OK. So show us that you have
the skill
to write in such a way
that makes a female's heart beat fast
and spurs in her desire for you?
 
I for one
have many doubts you do.
Written by Baldwin
Published
Author's Note
What inspired my composing and present reposing of this piece of mine are two things: (1) J-Z's continued implicit and explicit highly questionable  claims that he's god's gift to poetry and (2) the fact that he has yet to produce (and seems incapable, despite his bluster about his poetic talent,  of producing) anything that approaches a  moving and memorable and transporting love poem.  

Does anyone here think that he can?  Does anyone here think that instead  of J-Z showing that he is not only willing but capable of meeting this challenge,  he'll respond to it  with ad hominems and red herrings and paltry excuses for not doing so or false claims that he shouldn't have to meet the challenge since he'll claim (falsley BTW)  that I haven't met poetical challenges he's sent to me??
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