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Within these walls
as the liquid
percolates from
etiolated skin
a jaded past
awakens the soul
battered
bruised
tormented
and empty
painted hallucinations
delicately cry out
we surrender
our shameful secrets
to these bare walls
as the shadows gather
to say
their final goodbye
percolates from
etiolated skin
a jaded past
awakens the soul
battered
bruised
tormented
and empty
painted hallucinations
delicately cry out
we surrender
our shameful secrets
to these bare walls
as the shadows gather
to say
their final goodbye
Published 24th Sep 2021
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24th Sep 2021 12:11pm
Daaaaaamn, Journey...
The elocution here, is phenomenal. Your ability to emanate the density of such enormous emotion, is breathtaking (in my opinion) I have usually found that It's (typically) incredibly hard to capture the darkness and elicit it in a way that's truly poetic and utterly haunting, and here— you've managed it with gorgeous, elegant minimalism.
This piece is deep, personal, raw and beautiful in it's open heart....
I hear you, dear poetess.
Thank you for sharing 🙏🏻
🌹 - B
The elocution here, is phenomenal. Your ability to emanate the density of such enormous emotion, is breathtaking (in my opinion) I have usually found that It's (typically) incredibly hard to capture the darkness and elicit it in a way that's truly poetic and utterly haunting, and here— you've managed it with gorgeous, elegant minimalism.
This piece is deep, personal, raw and beautiful in it's open heart....
I hear you, dear poetess.
Thank you for sharing 🙏🏻
🌹 - B
24th Sep 2021 12:57pm
Wow you are just so beautiful B! Thank you for your amazing comment. Thank you for hearing me. Thank you lovely one!
27th Sep 2021 10:37pm
Wow, this is amazing journey. Etiolated is officially the word of the day, at least for me. This is definitely raw and you captured the intensity of emotion so incredibly well. I deal with anxiety and OCD and it's not easy to write about especially in such a truly impactful and representative way. I definitely look forward to reading more of you. :)
27th Sep 2021 11:30pm
Wow thank you so much! I appreciate your sweet comment and reading a part of my story in this thing we call life!
Much love 💜
Much love 💜
