Ephah

I’d cut out any and all punctuation since when used so sparsely it just kind of gets in the way. I really enjoyed this poem. The reference to the Biblical Ruth subtly expresses a desire for innocence, to be the blameless instrument of art.

I removed them all except L7 of the S2, as I felt it would be too much of a run-on removing the commas.

I am tired and all watery-eyed. Been working WAY too much - two jobs and school; you know, I'm sure. This little micro-burst was inspired by reading tonight; I've missed my poets and am glad I took some time to catch up.

Thanks, Jack. Always appreciate your suggestions.

Yes.  What a familiar feeling, it paints vividly for me.

Thank you, LJ. xo

"I simply want words  
to emerge as the Moon
from behind clouds  
illuminating the field"....

Love the above verse...
On the entirety, such beauty of a write 🌹❤😊

Thank you, Rohini. xo

I think the simplicity of the poem begs that you remove Lines 5 & 6. Lines 3 & 4 already speak of the desire to exert yourself no further, so it's not like you are sacrificing anything. Plus, the reference to modern technology sort of clashes with the Biblicalness.  

Otherwise, it's wonderfully brief verse describing the need to reconnect with a world that yields amazing results in an effortless fashion, for many an ephah can be an ephiphany.  

📝❤

This one's gonna get a total makeover! Sometimes ya just gotta let it out at the moment.  However, I do like the clash between the biblical reference and modern technology. It's like a sickle reaping the harvest; a cold metal blade against a natural grain. Something like that.

My thinking was, the Biblical reference will likely stand the test of time, while "design consumeristic graphics" might not. Yanno, for when people are reading your poetry 500 years into the future!

good! let them wonder! muahahahaha!

I can never find an instance where I’m not fully
immersed into your thoughts thru ink… makes me feel as if I grow a lil more with each visit. 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾✌🏾😊

Thank you, PoeticOne. <3

Great poem.  Let the words come out of your soul.  Keep on writing.

Thank you, Francisco.

Dear A,

Sometimes you just have to read and sometimes you just have write it out because it’s coming out in some way some how. I really related to physical release behind and throughout this poem. As though the head was bowed, the shoulders were rounded and the arms were limp in exhaustion yet ready to receive.
Felt this! H🌷

Thank you, Honoria. xo

Great. I love the biblical reference to Ruth in the field.  It really enriches the writing and is also so unexpected though refreshing.

Thank you, Lozzamus! <3

Bravo my friend!

Cheers...Harry

Thank you, Harry! <3

Like you, "I want to write"
Not work, or wonder, or any of the properly "adult" things I must often do
I want to write

Thank you, FATBOY. <3

Deeply relatable - the moon sometimes calls loudly, yes?  Beautifully written, as always 💖

Thank you, Luna. xo

I feel like this is spoken word. As if your at a podium with a glass of red wine in front of you with friends at a near by table .
Your words, particularly here, paints a most vivid mind painting.
Well done Ava 🤗

I simply want words  
to emerge as the Moon
from behind clouds  
illuminating the field

You are a brilliant writer Ava
I love you always ♥️
Your lil Sis
Jackie 🤗😘

Thank you, my sweet friend. Missing you! <3

Miss you too ♥️

It's a relatable feeling, when we just want to write, regardless of the state of mine, just the wanting to pour whatever comes out.

Either way, you scribed something that's just as wonderful as it is profound.

Thank you, Wally! Miss you all! <3

The use of Biblical and natural imagery together is very well done here. It gives the poem a powerful atmosphere and an almost sensual quality, causing me to see a Ruth-like figure in a field at dusk. This strengthens the metaphor for creativity.

Thank you, Turpin! I deeply appreciate your insights.