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Ghost Queen
Permanent residence.
My testament
of abandoned cold
hallways lined with
ground floating dust
that has long melted
into the air like me.
This dark fractured castle
is my beloved shelter
that is fit for a king
but belongs to a
ghost queen.
Windows whisper like a
beacon of ocean tides
calling me to peer
out and gaze to
the haunted sea.
I dare not go
out there.
Many have died in
my honor.
I have held off
armies of ships
multiple times from this
fortress made of stone.
Constantly guarding.
Protecting as I fade into the
frozen cracked walls.
Room to room.
Floating like a glowing
amoeba with tentacles
that stream like
a forgotten dream.
Only to sting
when an exorcism is
taking place.
I am no prisoner
with rusted heavy shackles.
I am a ghost queen.
This is my home.
and I'm not going anywhere.
My testament
of abandoned cold
hallways lined with
ground floating dust
that has long melted
into the air like me.
This dark fractured castle
is my beloved shelter
that is fit for a king
but belongs to a
ghost queen.
Windows whisper like a
beacon of ocean tides
calling me to peer
out and gaze to
the haunted sea.
I dare not go
out there.
Many have died in
my honor.
I have held off
armies of ships
multiple times from this
fortress made of stone.
Constantly guarding.
Protecting as I fade into the
frozen cracked walls.
Room to room.
Floating like a glowing
amoeba with tentacles
that stream like
a forgotten dream.
Only to sting
when an exorcism is
taking place.
I am no prisoner
with rusted heavy shackles.
I am a ghost queen.
This is my home.
and I'm not going anywhere.
Author's Note
I love the movie The Haunting of Hill House. It was eerie and beautiful at the same time.
Plus, I love castles and it makes me thing off all of the life that has passed through.
Plus, I love castles and it makes me thing off all of the life that has passed through.
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Re. Ghost Queen
11th Sep 2021 10:13pm
Nice tight write ... great line breaks ... smooth flow ... vivid ... captivating write ...
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11th Sep 2021 10:18pm
Re. Ghost Queen
11th Sep 2021 10:59pm
Some great images here--especially the 4 lines about dust:
hallways lined with
ground floating dust
that has long melted
into the air like me.
--or the lines about the walls:
I fade into the
frozen cracked walls.
--the Lovecraftian allusion to a psych-sexualized, tentacled monster, ameobic, or protean, shifting, suggesting a kind of body-horror--
The theme of "holding off" intruders creates a sexual subtext, like the Arthurian legends--a kind of medusa, ice-queen, the unfulfillable quest.
Really great stuff!
Enjoyed! & liked!
hallways lined with
ground floating dust
that has long melted
into the air like me.
--or the lines about the walls:
I fade into the
frozen cracked walls.
--the Lovecraftian allusion to a psych-sexualized, tentacled monster, ameobic, or protean, shifting, suggesting a kind of body-horror--
The theme of "holding off" intruders creates a sexual subtext, like the Arthurian legends--a kind of medusa, ice-queen, the unfulfillable quest.
Really great stuff!
Enjoyed! & liked!
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Re: Re. Ghost Queen
11th Sep 2021 11:06pm
Wow!! Where to start. Thank you for all of the feedback.
Imagery is kind of my thing. For me my poems are a bit
like a movie.
I need motion and lots of visuals!!
Thanks you so much!!!
Imagery is kind of my thing. For me my poems are a bit
like a movie.
I need motion and lots of visuals!!
Thanks you so much!!!
Re. Ghost Queen
11th Sep 2021 11:00pm
From ancient times the Sirens lured men to the rocky shores of hope only to be consumed by their own lust, but I guess it would be worth it to answer the call of the "Ghost Queen." Great poem. Hugs and peace, (OO) xoxo
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Re: Re. Ghost Queen
11th Sep 2021 11:10pm
I was hoping it would come off as ancient. I wanted to use the phrase "like an imprint of a vinyl record"
but thought it would date my poem. I wanted to keep it in her point of view. I was just the medium.
Thank you. Glad you liked it.
but thought it would date my poem. I wanted to keep it in her point of view. I was just the medium.
Thank you. Glad you liked it.
Re: Re. Ghost Queen
11th Sep 2021 11:13pm
I would say as a medium you are 100 + so far in your writings. Look forward to more. xo, (OO)
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Re. Ghost Queen
12th Sep 2021 1:14am
Oh, I definitely love this Adelphina (such a beautiful name btw). The imagery was very immersive for me... I so love to walk the abandoned cold hallways. It reminds me of many abandoned buildings I have been in (so many stories on that :p). I absolutely love castles and have so many memories from when I lived in the UK growing up. I miss being able to jump on a train and see all the incredible old structures. I felt like the ghost queen haunting these beautifully dark places you have transported me to. And The Haunting of Hill House is a great movie that now I must find and watch again.
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Re: Re. Ghost Queen
12th Sep 2021 1:28am
Thank you so much!!! The quick few minutes of escape. I do love castles. The mysteries and secrets they must hold.
Whole other poem. LOL
And I'm named after my Grandmother whose name is Delphina.
My mom just put an A in front of it. LOL
Glad you enjoyed!!
Whole other poem. LOL
And I'm named after my Grandmother whose name is Delphina.
My mom just put an A in front of it. LOL
Glad you enjoyed!!
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Re. Ghost Queen
14th Sep 2021 00:07am
I like your form, style, and word choice. This is very creative and simplistic (in a really good way) I'm looking forward to reading more ☺️
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14th Sep 2021 00:17am
Re: Re. Ghost Queen
14th Sep 2021 00:19am
Thanks for putting it out there. I've already looked through some of your other work and I can tell I enjoy it. You a definitely talented. I'll have some more comments for ya😊
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Re: Re. Ghost Queen
14th Sep 2021 00:24am
I have a bad habit of posting at night.
I really should wait a day before I push
the submit button. I always find a freaking typo. LOL
I really should wait a day before I push
the submit button. I always find a freaking typo. LOL
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14th Sep 2021 00:40am
Re. Ghost Queen
12th Nov 2021 00:38am
I Think this poem has a lot of detail to it. Also I have seen that movie the house on haunted hill, great movie and I don't usual like horror movies.
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Re: Re. Ghost Queen
12th Nov 2021 00:44am
Hi!
It is one of my favorites. The one on Netflix - that is a series. The dialog with the characters was amazing!!!!
It had so much haunting beauty in it. Also - a lot of morbid stuff
to shake things up.
Thanks for stopping by and commenting.
It is one of my favorites. The one on Netflix - that is a series. The dialog with the characters was amazing!!!!
It had so much haunting beauty in it. Also - a lot of morbid stuff
to shake things up.
Thanks for stopping by and commenting.
Re: Re. Ghost Queen
12th Nov 2021 00:55am