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the last swift twitch of a rabbit's heartbeat, then:
a sheer halo of cosmic light softening my earthly grasp
pulsing, gasping, like the reckoning celestial void of orgasm
rippling rainbow ribbons from my fingertips
unraveling fractals of their dye on the air I draw my hands through
I can feel the whisper of my lashes on my face
every ridge and ravine of my fingerprint on my mouth
a heady, leaden thrumming heat blazing down the nape of my neck
shivering, vibrating, dulling
parching my throat
drenching my thighs
spiralling out in great hot wisps
of silence
a sheer halo of cosmic light softening my earthly grasp
pulsing, gasping, like the reckoning celestial void of orgasm
rippling rainbow ribbons from my fingertips
unraveling fractals of their dye on the air I draw my hands through
I can feel the whisper of my lashes on my face
every ridge and ravine of my fingerprint on my mouth
a heady, leaden thrumming heat blazing down the nape of my neck
shivering, vibrating, dulling
parching my throat
drenching my thighs
spiralling out in great hot wisps
of silence
Published 7th Sep 2021
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8th Sep 2021 1:10am
I really like this.
A beautiful, lush, but organized...inter-connected, vision.
Love the way the little details follow through, from one image to the next:
the fingertips, to the fractals, to the ridges of the fingerprints (the gesture not explained, but rather implied--a nice effect!).
Much to like here.
The visionary quality.
The ambiguity of the experience--death or orgasm, religious experience or snare...
Drawback: the language sometimes overwhelms...might trim it down just a bit...
Like!
A beautiful, lush, but organized...inter-connected, vision.
Love the way the little details follow through, from one image to the next:
the fingertips, to the fractals, to the ridges of the fingerprints (the gesture not explained, but rather implied--a nice effect!).
Much to like here.
The visionary quality.
The ambiguity of the experience--death or orgasm, religious experience or snare...
Drawback: the language sometimes overwhelms...might trim it down just a bit...
Like!
9th Sep 2021 2:54am
