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White Midnight
Tragically magical
each forward step in an infatuation
of purpose that leads closer and closer
to my altar of collaboration
a constant, dependable hour who
whispers a seductive caress
that lavishes my face
and dress made of lace
my own private silky twilight
so for midnight
I wear white
nothing affects me like the
heavy air of midnight
the vast motivation that inspires
me to create something, anything
to fill the endless void
something beautiful, maybe
something true, absolutely
at least for the moment
midnight for me is brutal honesty
a good look in the mirror
that challenges my way of thinking
challenging my changes
challenging why I create
challenging my impatience
to walk down the path of patience
so for midnight
I wear white
It won't be bullied to suddenly appear
and secretly I love
the respect of waiting
as I do.
I am midnights constant as well
year after year
decade after decade
millennia after millennia
and when the long tired yawn
of time finally comes and
I lay on my deathbed
as I have done with all the
countless lives I have led
and gladly exhale my last
pulsing breath onto the ebony
page that has yet to be written
I will not cower
because the possibilities
are endless
and I'll be wearing white
each forward step in an infatuation
of purpose that leads closer and closer
to my altar of collaboration
a constant, dependable hour who
whispers a seductive caress
that lavishes my face
and dress made of lace
my own private silky twilight
so for midnight
I wear white
nothing affects me like the
heavy air of midnight
the vast motivation that inspires
me to create something, anything
to fill the endless void
something beautiful, maybe
something true, absolutely
at least for the moment
midnight for me is brutal honesty
a good look in the mirror
that challenges my way of thinking
challenging my changes
challenging why I create
challenging my impatience
to walk down the path of patience
so for midnight
I wear white
It won't be bullied to suddenly appear
and secretly I love
the respect of waiting
as I do.
I am midnights constant as well
year after year
decade after decade
millennia after millennia
and when the long tired yawn
of time finally comes and
I lay on my deathbed
as I have done with all the
countless lives I have led
and gladly exhale my last
pulsing breath onto the ebony
page that has yet to be written
I will not cower
because the possibilities
are endless
and I'll be wearing white
Author's Note
For me midnight does have magic.
Too many distractions during the day to take a
dive into my own mind.
Too many distractions during the day to take a
dive into my own mind.
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Re. White Midnight
7th Sep 2021 1:38am
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7th Sep 2021 1:45am
Thank you!! As writers I feel we all must have had past lives.
Cause where the hell else do we get all this stuff. LOL
Again thank you!!!
Cause where the hell else do we get all this stuff. LOL
Again thank you!!!
Re. White Midnight
8th Sep 2021 8:47pm
I loved the ebb and flow of the words here, and the carefully applied rhyme, alliteration and repetition. Never overdone. Enjoyed!
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8th Sep 2021 10:46pm
Thank you!!!!
I altered this poem so many times and had to just push send.
Appreciate the critique.
Thanks again.
I altered this poem so many times and had to just push send.
Appreciate the critique.
Thanks again.
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9th Sep 2021 4:34am
Re. White Midnight
10th Sep 2021 00:09am
This is so beautiful, I found myself holding my breath as I read it. You are so talented; look forward to more of your poetry. Hugs and peace, (OO)
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10th Sep 2021 00:25am
Thank you so much. This is my baby. I've worked on it for a while. I love embellishing and expanding on simple sentences. Start small and simple. Then slowly let your mind wander to a metaphor that has truth to it. Then embellish again. You will be surprised where you end up. Glad you enjoyed it.
Re. White Midnight
10th Sep 2021 5:44am
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10th Sep 2021 1:27pm
Thank you!!.
Some poems just flow.
Others take time and nurture.
This for me was that poem.
Some poems just flow.
Others take time and nurture.
This for me was that poem.
Re. White Midnight
6th Oct 2021 12:56pm
Another stellar write Adelphina. I think midnight has magic too, there are less distractions; well bad ones anyway. ;) I absolutely love the imagery you have woven around this special time. It's definitely magical and dreamy with a wonderful flow. Midnight definitely inspires and I love all the symbolism like wearing white.
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Re. White Midnight
6th Oct 2021 11:31pm
Hi Kristina!!
I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I wanted to compare it to being married to midnight.
It being your equal in a sense. But also challenging your writing and the life choices you make.
I wrote this many years ago when I was in my early thirties and I realized I needed to write. It was not a
choice. More like a have to or I will go insane.
Nowadays I got to really be in sink with what I'm writing otherwise I fall asleep. LOL
Thank you so much for the RL and commenting!!
I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I wanted to compare it to being married to midnight.
It being your equal in a sense. But also challenging your writing and the life choices you make.
I wrote this many years ago when I was in my early thirties and I realized I needed to write. It was not a
choice. More like a have to or I will go insane.
Nowadays I got to really be in sink with what I'm writing otherwise I fall asleep. LOL
Thank you so much for the RL and commenting!!
Re. White Midnight
4th Dec 2021 3:42am
I see why you love this write
Gave me chills as it neared the end
Chills are involuntary so when something hits you in the sweet spot of storytelling, hair on my legs rises ....
You have a unique ability for cadence and what I call a drum beat.
You keeping building in. Like Ravel's Bolero you keep the reader on the edge of his chair. Where is this going and how will it end ??
This is BIG LIKE country
RL AWRD TOO
Sweet
Gave me chills as it neared the end
Chills are involuntary so when something hits you in the sweet spot of storytelling, hair on my legs rises ....
You have a unique ability for cadence and what I call a drum beat.
You keeping building in. Like Ravel's Bolero you keep the reader on the edge of his chair. Where is this going and how will it end ??
This is BIG LIKE country
RL AWRD TOO
Sweet
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4th Dec 2021 3:54am
Awhhh. Hey amigo.
Thank you sooo much for your gracious comment.
I think of poems as a mini movie. If I can depending on topic
I like a beginning, middle and end.
Means so much that you got chills. I love to move people with my writing. To make you feel something is my goal.
Thank you so much for stopping by and the RL:)
Thank you sooo much for your gracious comment.
I think of poems as a mini movie. If I can depending on topic
I like a beginning, middle and end.
Means so much that you got chills. I love to move people with my writing. To make you feel something is my goal.
Thank you so much for stopping by and the RL:)
Re. White Midnight
9th Dec 2021 00:15am
For me, no matter the time, I am constantly distracted.
I love the story in the poem, this is what I've always thought poetry dhould be like, that's my school days kicking in.
Reading this and your other poems, this is how I'd like mine to read.
I've read other wonderful amazing poetry here, each of them masterpieces. Loved them.
But this, reading this, how it's composed,
It's the prose, the composition of words here that reaches into me.
I'm not sure about my own anymore. Not sure if I want to post anymore
💜💜💜
I love the story in the poem, this is what I've always thought poetry dhould be like, that's my school days kicking in.
Reading this and your other poems, this is how I'd like mine to read.
I've read other wonderful amazing poetry here, each of them masterpieces. Loved them.
But this, reading this, how it's composed,
It's the prose, the composition of words here that reaches into me.
I'm not sure about my own anymore. Not sure if I want to post anymore
💜💜💜
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9th Dec 2021 00:20am
Oh no no no. We are all a work in progress.
It takes balls of steel to post your original work.
Some people get it and maybe some won't - and that's ok.
It's about your journey. Keep at it.
Work that word muscle you have in your brain. LOL
Hang in there.
I was terrified when I first got here. Not measuring up.
Still nervous before I push that button.
Sending you waves of positivity.
It takes balls of steel to post your original work.
Some people get it and maybe some won't - and that's ok.
It's about your journey. Keep at it.
Work that word muscle you have in your brain. LOL
Hang in there.
I was terrified when I first got here. Not measuring up.
Still nervous before I push that button.
Sending you waves of positivity.
Re: Re. White Midnight
9th Dec 2021 00:28am
I don't know,, reading that poem just blew my mind, I'm in bits, now I know how mine looks, it's not even funny, I was foolish to think about mine.
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Re: Re. White Midnight
15th Dec 2021 00:25am
Hey R!!
Thanks for checking it out. Midnight is tricky for me. I have to be really in tune with what I'm writing or I will fall asleep. But when I do get sleepy I put a spiral and pen right beside me because I dream. When I do I jot down the words before they disappear into dream land. Not on the nightstand. It has to be right beside me so I can quickly pick up that pen. Thank you for all your snaps today amigo!!
Thanks for checking it out. Midnight is tricky for me. I have to be really in tune with what I'm writing or I will fall asleep. But when I do get sleepy I put a spiral and pen right beside me because I dream. When I do I jot down the words before they disappear into dream land. Not on the nightstand. It has to be right beside me so I can quickly pick up that pen. Thank you for all your snaps today amigo!!
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Re. White Midnight
18th Dec 2021 4:21am
I see all the potential and way with words that has developed into one hell of a poet here. It is cool to see the beginnings of your journey. This is so potent. I love it. Your work van not be mistaken for another. I've always been moved by words more than anything else and you have a beautiful mind.
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18th Dec 2021 4:27am
Thank you so much!!
This is one of my earlier poems.
I took my time with it. Did a few sentences a day.
I should rearrange to make it
look better on the page but I kinda like it the way it is.
Did you just call me a van. LOL
I must share this with you.
I drive an astro van. hahahah.
Too funny.
In all seriousness thanks for taking a look at
my stuff today Rainy.
Means muncho amigo!!
This is one of my earlier poems.
I took my time with it. Did a few sentences a day.
I should rearrange to make it
look better on the page but I kinda like it the way it is.
Did you just call me a van. LOL
I must share this with you.
I drive an astro van. hahahah.
Too funny.
In all seriousness thanks for taking a look at
my stuff today Rainy.
Means muncho amigo!!
Re: Re. White Midnight
18th Dec 2021 4:30am
It was my pleasure. I will be reading more. One day I'm going to convince you to collaborate with me!
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18th Dec 2021 4:31am