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Softly ~ in my dreams... (kyrielle)
(loneliness)
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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams;
yet, reaching find I'm lonely … though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Kyrielle
The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is the required minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
Mine is in iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line length is author's choice.
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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams;
yet, reaching find I'm lonely … though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
:
My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
:
Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
:
Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
:
When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Kyrielle
The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is the required minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
Mine is in iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line length is author's choice.
Published 25th Jul 2021
| Edited 26th Jan 2022
Author's Note
The Kyrielle is a challenging form, worthy of the most accomplished poetess' or poet's skills.
If you should try this form, please, let me know, so I can read and review it for you.
(Painting: "Lonely" in oils on canvas, by Sergei Chepik)
If you should try this form, please, let me know, so I can read and review it for you.
(Painting: "Lonely" in oils on canvas, by Sergei Chepik)
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Anonymous
- Edited 19th Jul 2023 3:46am
26th Jul 2021 9:18pm
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28th Jul 2021 2:36pm
Ah, Keilani Dear 🍂
How beautifully your sweet voice warms and brims the heart to overflowing … nothing touches deeper or more alluringly than the aching tears of a poetess who knows how to express what she feels.
Bless and embrace you with gentle joy, that you'll never again know loneliness! ⁓ Richard 🍃
How beautifully your sweet voice warms and brims the heart to overflowing … nothing touches deeper or more alluringly than the aching tears of a poetess who knows how to express what she feels.
Bless and embrace you with gentle joy, that you'll never again know loneliness! ⁓ Richard 🍃
27th Jul 2021 4:52pm
Perfect execution of a challenging form. Achingly beautiful indeed. I can feel the pain, longing, and hope throughout. Really beautiful.
Most humbly, Dear Poetess, I gratefully bow 🌱
When a hopeful bard receives such accolades of expressed appreciation, praise, and deeply felt emotion from another as articulate as You are, he knows something his pen's done was done right, and what more could he reasonably wish for than that … thank you sincerely, Kristina Dearest.
Ever-so warmly, yours ⁓ Richard 🍃
When a hopeful bard receives such accolades of expressed appreciation, praise, and deeply felt emotion from another as articulate as You are, he knows something his pen's done was done right, and what more could he reasonably wish for than that … thank you sincerely, Kristina Dearest.
Ever-so warmly, yours ⁓ Richard 🍃
6th Aug 2021 4:38am
I learned from the only purple flower ever seen to compose SOFTY'S as it seems in broad day light not in dreams at night they silently scream no voice ,dreams rot nice softies as ice creams I love to see then in your dreams but never scream softly say you love
what
the dream not me
RGDS RIHY RICH
COPY PASTE GONE I SHALL RETURN
what
the dream not me
RGDS RIHY RICH
COPY PASTE GONE I SHALL RETURN
23rd Oct 2021 6:45pm
Thank you ever-so gratefully, again, for your words in review for this rather involved Kyrielle.
Bless all your nights with peaceful dreams! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Bless all your nights with peaceful dreams! ⁓ Richard 🍃
24th Oct 2021 4:25pm
8th Aug 2021 2:42pm
Warmest thanks, Dear Elsie🌼
It thrills me to know you think my poem is "Beautiful".
Hugs to You! ⁓ Richard🍃
It thrills me to know you think my poem is "Beautiful".
Hugs to You! ⁓ Richard🍃
18th Aug 2021 1:32pm
23rd Oct 2021 6:54pm
Thank you most sincerely, Dear O🌿
Your praise and expressed appreciation truly bless a bard's hopeful efforts to please his readers.
Bright brotherly hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Your praise and expressed appreciation truly bless a bard's hopeful efforts to please his readers.
Bright brotherly hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Anonymous
- Edited 17th Jan 2024 00:45am
24th Aug 2021 6:19pm
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23rd Oct 2021 6:37pm
Hi, Dear Cara 🌾
I once responded to a poetry student's request for an interview, and here's an excerpt from her review that addresses the comments in the last line of your review I think you might find interesting: "Tell me, Richard, exactly what your take on poetry is," she said.
"Hmm?" I replied. "Let me think on that for a moment......!"
"Well, My Dear, to me, more than anything else, poetry is a brilliantly creative way for humans to express who they are, what they feel, and believe ... and, to touch one another without physical contact.
As human beings, we experience and share a vast array of emotions, all of which are transient in nature. The way we feel and what we think can change more often than the weather, with even less predictability.
I look upon my own poetical efforts (for example) as attempts to capture a moment's feelings in verse upon the page, much like photographers record that which they see through their lens onto film.
While looking back on what I've written over the years reminds me of what I felt when I wrote it, it does not necessarily reflect what I feel today.
One must realize, too, that when reading poetry, the desire is to connect on some level with what the poem is saying, and when one relates well, the tendency to do so is in the here and now. "
Thank you ever-so warmly for selecting this Kyrielle poem to read and review, M'Delightfully Lovely-Hearted Poetess … with kindred hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃
I once responded to a poetry student's request for an interview, and here's an excerpt from her review that addresses the comments in the last line of your review I think you might find interesting: "Tell me, Richard, exactly what your take on poetry is," she said.
"Hmm?" I replied. "Let me think on that for a moment......!"
"Well, My Dear, to me, more than anything else, poetry is a brilliantly creative way for humans to express who they are, what they feel, and believe ... and, to touch one another without physical contact.
As human beings, we experience and share a vast array of emotions, all of which are transient in nature. The way we feel and what we think can change more often than the weather, with even less predictability.
I look upon my own poetical efforts (for example) as attempts to capture a moment's feelings in verse upon the page, much like photographers record that which they see through their lens onto film.
While looking back on what I've written over the years reminds me of what I felt when I wrote it, it does not necessarily reflect what I feel today.
One must realize, too, that when reading poetry, the desire is to connect on some level with what the poem is saying, and when one relates well, the tendency to do so is in the here and now. "
Thank you ever-so warmly for selecting this Kyrielle poem to read and review, M'Delightfully Lovely-Hearted Poetess … with kindred hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Dec 2022 00:45am
12th Nov 2021 00:23am
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12th Apr 2022 6:00am
...And elemental romance. You have something of Rosicrucian hope in that. That's good. And you devote yourself to your art.
6th May 2022 9:55pm
Thank you most humbly and gratefully, Sir Patrick,
For reading and finding this lovely poetic form worthy of such effulgent commentary.
Brightest blessing for all your days! ⁓ Richard🖌
For reading and finding this lovely poetic form worthy of such effulgent commentary.
Brightest blessing for all your days! ⁓ Richard🖌
