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A crucial winding road
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A crucial winding road
Creates a bridge over the abysm
Then the wide open highway...
Which is always sitting empty
Destiny is feeding its need for speed...
So it is left for fate to fill in and interpret
This relationship pans out...
And visual poetry is fastened with concrete poetry
All lanes of travel open
Unseen twists and turns become visible
They are unable to trap thoughts
So hopes and goals are rendered all clear
... ... ...
A crucial winding road
Creates a bridge over the abysm
Then the wide open highway...
Which is always sitting empty
Destiny is feeding its need for speed...
So it is left for fate to fill in and interpret
This relationship pans out...
And visual poetry is fastened with concrete poetry
All lanes of travel open
Unseen twists and turns become visible
They are unable to trap thoughts
So hopes and goals are rendered all clear
... ... ...
Published 21st Jul 2021
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21st Jul 2021 10:44pm
--Roads
Really enjoyed this poem, or at least its topic.
The beginning starts out concretely--the absym, the winding road, then the open highway. These come across as symbolic, metaphors to this reader.
"This relationship" would be the heart of the poem, whatever the relationship would be--a lover, friendship...Probably.
The 3rd stanza--what was wide open, the highway, reveals twists and turns. Last 2 lines embody syntactical / grammatical ambiguity in the causal relationship. Can be interpreted 2 ways.
Really enjoyed this poem, or at least its topic.
The beginning starts out concretely--the absym, the winding road, then the open highway. These come across as symbolic, metaphors to this reader.
"This relationship" would be the heart of the poem, whatever the relationship would be--a lover, friendship...Probably.
The 3rd stanza--what was wide open, the highway, reveals twists and turns. Last 2 lines embody syntactical / grammatical ambiguity in the causal relationship. Can be interpreted 2 ways.
22nd Jul 2021 1:32am
Thank you very much for your comment, Mark_Parsons.
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"A crucial winding road... Creates a bridge over the abysm" Take the hardest way out to success in life,... that's why the "wide open highway, *Which is always sitting empty* (no twists, no turns, no trapped thoughts) ... take place.
Exactly, ... "This relationship" is the heart of the poem.
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"A crucial winding road... Creates a bridge over the abysm" Take the hardest way out to success in life,... that's why the "wide open highway, *Which is always sitting empty* (no twists, no turns, no trapped thoughts) ... take place.
Exactly, ... "This relationship" is the heart of the poem.
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22nd Jul 2021 6:22am
Dear M,
For me, your poem reminded me that I can’t ignore the universe. I have a roll to play and hard as I might try to ignore it the gravitational pull refuses to let me be lazy. Your closing stanza is stellar. Great write. H🌷
For me, your poem reminded me that I can’t ignore the universe. I have a roll to play and hard as I might try to ignore it the gravitational pull refuses to let me be lazy. Your closing stanza is stellar. Great write. H🌷
22nd Jul 2021 7:05pm
