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You get wet off the poetry
I get high off the response
Herein lies the problem
How am I to stop writing for your approval
When making you feel
Deep things
And emotions,
Sexual thoughts
And devotions
My drug…
Is your growing desire for me
Your wanting
To have me
To be wanted
To be had,
the way the poetry
Explained in vivid detail
And before you know it
We find ourselves
In a predicament
That can only go 1 of 2 ways
Either we fall apart
Or…
We Cum together
I get high off the response
Herein lies the problem
How am I to stop writing for your approval
When making you feel
Deep things
And emotions,
Sexual thoughts
And devotions
My drug…
Is your growing desire for me
Your wanting
To have me
To be wanted
To be had,
the way the poetry
Explained in vivid detail
And before you know it
We find ourselves
In a predicament
That can only go 1 of 2 ways
Either we fall apart
Or…
We Cum together
Published 19th Jul 2021
Author's Note
This was written for and about the repeating online love affairs that continue to happen and get to the inevitable breaking point where it logically has to end, but the break is usually messy. Stemming from a conversation I was having with a new poetess friend who we’ve both been down this path before multiple times and we see ourselves heading in the same direction.
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19th Jul 2021 2:30am
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19th Jul 2021 6:19am
You get wet off the poetry
I get high off the response
In the case of erotic poetry by women it's a case of reader gets hard off the poetry.
I get high off the response
In the case of erotic poetry by women it's a case of reader gets hard off the poetry.
19th Jul 2021 11:29am
--Missed Opportunity
The man making the woman feel language in her clitoris.
This could be much more compelling to this reader, if the poet went deeper into himself.
That doesn't happen here.
There's such a powerful relationship between a male artist and a woman who feels his art in her sex...but here it's treated cavalierly.
Maybe that's a choice--I'm not sure.
When things like math or language go so far they become sexual feelings, that's an intense place. And a man this jaded / cynical is fascinating psychological terrain this reader would like explored more.
Enjoyed, if only for what might have been!
Oh, & LOVE the title! REALLY!!!
The man making the woman feel language in her clitoris.
This could be much more compelling to this reader, if the poet went deeper into himself.
That doesn't happen here.
There's such a powerful relationship between a male artist and a woman who feels his art in her sex...but here it's treated cavalierly.
Maybe that's a choice--I'm not sure.
When things like math or language go so far they become sexual feelings, that's an intense place. And a man this jaded / cynical is fascinating psychological terrain this reader would like explored more.
Enjoyed, if only for what might have been!
Oh, & LOVE the title! REALLY!!!
19th Jul 2021 11:31am
Thanks for the review. I guess I should have explained in the author’s note when I posted. I updated the explanation.
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