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sin
exotic lingers in the shadows
masculine wiles in charge of yourself
drives me in my thoughts
I'll be yours inside of midnight's call
diligent lonely cries for your touch
is it hot enough where you are?
leave fingerprints on my soul
I feel you deeply
in the heated moments we come together
push, pull exchange glances
fire inside my heart pulls me closer
tenderness cries for more
little bursts of pleasure light me up
a pink blush covers my nakedness
you growl I crawl to you
temptation's master
sin speaks in tongues
a metaphor in the telling
the steel in your resolve drives me mad
your sex intoxicating
I burn in my cult of need
on the bed of want...I succumb
Published 15th Jul 2021
Author's Note
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FVFcfgZaVEo
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15th Jul 2021 7:47am
I like the author's note--kind of; never listened to post m. before--but didn't understand the relation to the poem.
"tenderness cries for more"--this line makes me wonder, more what? more tenderness? or more force? some stronger sensation? (maybe that's because I just read a poem by I_Is_Me).
I also like the idea of fingerprints on someone's soul. Recently, I've come to think of a soul like a basket, something filled with our experiences, to some degree.
A question: why is it "sin"? I guess I don't think sex is inherently sinful, but more our relationships to it, context, or whatever.
Enjoyed!
"tenderness cries for more"--this line makes me wonder, more what? more tenderness? or more force? some stronger sensation? (maybe that's because I just read a poem by I_Is_Me).
I also like the idea of fingerprints on someone's soul. Recently, I've come to think of a soul like a basket, something filled with our experiences, to some degree.
A question: why is it "sin"? I guess I don't think sex is inherently sinful, but more our relationships to it, context, or whatever.
Enjoyed!
15th Jul 2021 4:02pm
good morning yes in that line it's a cry for more tenderness... I'm glad you liked the Post M. sometimes I just the song that I was listening to while writing the poem... yes the soul does seem to collect bits of those we've encountered... thank you for reading and leaving such a thoughtful comment💕
16th Jul 2021 5:48am
I like the idea of posting the song you were listening to when you wrote it--definitely! I tend to have strong connections between the poem I wrote & the song I listened to when I wrote it. Thanks for explaining!
15th Jul 2021 8:54am
Wow that was the most beautiful erotic piece I've read in such along time. Truly mesmerising I love this piece from start to finish. Just brilliant if I could stand to applaud 👏 I would
Love and light
Ron xx
Love and light
Ron xx
15th Jul 2021 4:04pm
good morning dearest Ron thank you dearly for such a beautiful comment lighting my day that much more wonderful i hope your day is treating you good💕
7th Aug 2021 8:18pm
It's a very sultry write crimsin. The passion and connection between is palpable through each line.
Very spellbiding. Great work!
Very spellbiding. Great work!
7th Aug 2021 11:04pm
good afternoon dearest Wally thank you graciously dear poet I cherish your visits💕
