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Descent into the Madness
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watch your descent into the madness
I feel blue for whatever is happening to you
Seeing you fall deeper into that blackness
Makes my heart ache for the person I once knew
Thinking I should extend a helping hand
As I watch your decent into the madness
I really try to sympathize and understand
Hoping you will come out of this badness
But you’ve gone too far into that sadness
I can’t climb down or jump into the abyss
As I watch your descent into the madness
I feel helpless at the edge of the precipice
So in the image of you in this psychotic state
I see your soul has been stripped of gladness
Wondering what will be of this dire fate
As I watch your descent into the m
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Published 8th Jul 2021
Author's Note
#empathy
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8th Jul 2021 6:58pm
The visual effect of descent is fantastic here. It makes me sad to think of how helpless others must feel when they see me slip away. Damn near unbearable. Great piece on empathy here, wallyroo.
2nd Aug 2021 10:16pm
Thank you for your comment nightbird.
I had wanted to write about this subject for a while and it came to me as I was falling asleep the night before. Yes, one does tend to feel helpless watching someone you know and/or love go through this difficult phase/stage.
I had wanted to write about this subject for a while and it came to me as I was falling asleep the night before. Yes, one does tend to feel helpless watching someone you know and/or love go through this difficult phase/stage.
8th Jul 2021 11:57pm
2nd Aug 2021 10:17pm
Thank you very much, I always look to add a little visual to help convey the emotion.
9th Jul 2021 00:14am
hello dearest Wally this makes me think of me
I've just come out of a very bad psychotic break
it is very difficult to see someone you care for slip
but also little can be done when it happens....
this is beautiful thank you💕
I've just come out of a very bad psychotic break
it is very difficult to see someone you care for slip
but also little can be done when it happens....
this is beautiful thank you💕
2nd Aug 2021 10:19pm
Dear crimsin,
Thank you for commenting and for adding to your RL. I'm glad this resonated with you and I hope that you are feeling better. It serves a reminder that most of us know of someone who may be going through this difficult phase, but to let them know that there are plenty of people who love and care.
blessings.
Thank you for commenting and for adding to your RL. I'm glad this resonated with you and I hope that you are feeling better. It serves a reminder that most of us know of someone who may be going through this difficult phase, but to let them know that there are plenty of people who love and care.
blessings.
Anonymous
9th Jul 2021 00:27am
Really wonderfully formatted, Walter. Your words are so deeply felt.. the poignancy is palpable... it's difficult to be a bystander when it's someone you love, but unfortunately that's sometimes the only option...
I was captivated by this piece and wholly appreciate it's message...
Really great work, my friend
🌹 - 💙
B
I was captivated by this piece and wholly appreciate it's message...
Really great work, my friend
🌹 - 💙
B
2nd Aug 2021 10:21pm
Thank you very much Blue for those kind words and for adding to your RL.
Hopefully those who have (or are going through that phase) understand that there are plenty of family and/or friends who are there for them. Mental Health is an important issue in today's society, we just have to be aware and look for the signs.
Hopefully those who have (or are going through that phase) understand that there are plenty of family and/or friends who are there for them. Mental Health is an important issue in today's society, we just have to be aware and look for the signs.
9th Jul 2021 6:35pm
Excellent use of form on this one, Wally. While we're accustomed to your use of rhyming, here your lines are more precise and polished.
2nd Aug 2021 10:24pm
Thank you very much JB for your comment and RL. I thought I'd use the quartern format, I've always thought the use of repetition helps with the message, and a little visual.
