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Dark drops
Crucified,
letting I Love You’s
bleed from my eyes..
dripping touch~
down each point of my star..
Vision beset, a jade[‘d] red;
the sickle moon~ a falling caress
on raw edges of heart..
Small frame in hang,
cupping light in each palm..
and toes pursed in pain~
slow-painted
in dark drops..
[minus the halo.. and the cross]
..I Love You.
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7th Jun 2021 10:35am
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Re: Re. Dark drops
9th Jun 2021 2:07pm
Awww, yes i mighta been wadin in sum dark waters of emotion when penning this one~ humble thankins for wading in also ;)
wishin u such a shinee day, mr poet!
~d
wishin u such a shinee day, mr poet!
~d
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Re: Re. Dark drops
9th Jun 2021 2:11pm
oh what your capitals do ta me!!! ~ snugglin thanks on you PoetS.. ive been pouring a bit more freestyle[eee] lately so i do trust you ta keep me in line ;)
huggins to ur day sweet man, ty for takin time,
~d
huggins to ur day sweet man, ty for takin time,
~d
Re: Re. Dark drops
9th Jun 2021 2:14pm
Re: Re. Dark drops
29th Jun 2021 3:43pm
my southern roots are called to curtsy, sweet man.. kisskiss n ty♡ realized its been since idk, 2015, postin a pic.. will see how long my mood lasts, lol.
adore u PoetS.. hv a fabulous day! ;)
~d
adore u PoetS.. hv a fabulous day! ;)
~d
Re. Dark drops
7th Jun 2021 4:18pm
Phew; that last line though. . .
So good to see you back with such a strong offering. xo
So good to see you back with such a strong offering. xo
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Re: Re. Dark drops
9th Jun 2021 2:19pm
greetins sweet one! ever good to get ur feedbk~ that last line kicked my contemplation for a good while.. and it won. lol.
much love to u LadyA ;)
much love to u LadyA ;)
Re. Dark drops
Wowsers, d!
This is craftsmanship of the highest order... it's a resplendent read of darkly, creative imagery that leaves me so very swoony swoon(ing) ... I was so caught up in it! COMPLETELY! From the very beginning of
"Crucified,
letting I Love You’s
bleed from my eyes.."
to - - -
"slow-painted
in dark drops"
... to the last two lines that made me actually groan out loud, feeling all my deepest feels...
You had me....
in the palm of your hand, in a shared understanding of all those enormous emotions that your spun magic created and had jump right off the page.... ;)
Superb, ink, my lovely lady!
Your work is a true inspiration and example of how I wish I could even remotely close to emoting...I wholeheartedly appreciate you sharing it with us....
All my warmest snuggles... 🍃 🤗
🌹-💙
xo
B
This is craftsmanship of the highest order... it's a resplendent read of darkly, creative imagery that leaves me so very swoony swoon(ing) ... I was so caught up in it! COMPLETELY! From the very beginning of
"Crucified,
letting I Love You’s
bleed from my eyes.."
to - - -
"slow-painted
in dark drops"
... to the last two lines that made me actually groan out loud, feeling all my deepest feels...
You had me....
in the palm of your hand, in a shared understanding of all those enormous emotions that your spun magic created and had jump right off the page.... ;)
Superb, ink, my lovely lady!
Your work is a true inspiration and example of how I wish I could even remotely close to emoting...I wholeheartedly appreciate you sharing it with us....
All my warmest snuggles... 🍃 🤗
🌹-💙
xo
B
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Re: Re. Dark drops
9th Jun 2021 2:27pm
awww you sweet darlin~~ i dont think i shall stop kissin ur face for a good long while♡♡
such beautiful comment from an amazing poetess, u gotts magicks like crazy in ur pen yknw ;) i cant thank you enough for takin time. you aaaand ur shinee soul.
so much cali love for ur swooning presence,
~d
such beautiful comment from an amazing poetess, u gotts magicks like crazy in ur pen yknw ;) i cant thank you enough for takin time. you aaaand ur shinee soul.
so much cali love for ur swooning presence,
~d
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12th Jun 2021 9:24pm
Whoa.. wicked and beautiful write. Crucified with minus the halo and cross... that speaks!
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Re: Re. Dark drops
29th Jun 2021 3:45pm
I so appreciate you, sweet poet.. your feedback gets me smilin every time, tyty ;)
fancee day to u m'lady,
~d
fancee day to u m'lady,
~d
Re. Dark drops
9th Oct 2021 3:16pm
You get to break my cherry on this site, so to speak...I'm brand new here.
The best inspiration for a writer is to read. It opens parts of the brain that nothing else does. Sure, we can write about a great day, a person, etc. But when we read others, we "jump on the tracks" with them. A continuance of sorts.
I admit that I seek out female writers, because it motivates me to "reply" with my own creative writing. And it has to stir me to want to, obviously.
All that being said, you are a good writer. It motivates a reader to write. How else do we interact in a site such as this? I'm not one to break a poem down and critique it.
I couldn't build a house, but I'd paint it. That's mostly what we all are in here.
You have an eye for surreal. And isn't that what draws us as readers in?
An actual poet is a seer, period.
You write with a mature understanding of the nuances of interactions.
Keep doing what you do. It works.
The best inspiration for a writer is to read. It opens parts of the brain that nothing else does. Sure, we can write about a great day, a person, etc. But when we read others, we "jump on the tracks" with them. A continuance of sorts.
I admit that I seek out female writers, because it motivates me to "reply" with my own creative writing. And it has to stir me to want to, obviously.
All that being said, you are a good writer. It motivates a reader to write. How else do we interact in a site such as this? I'm not one to break a poem down and critique it.
I couldn't build a house, but I'd paint it. That's mostly what we all are in here.
You have an eye for surreal. And isn't that what draws us as readers in?
An actual poet is a seer, period.
You write with a mature understanding of the nuances of interactions.
Keep doing what you do. It works.
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14th Dec 2021 4:09am
Sendin u soo many tardy welcomes, dear man.. ive been away far too long, but damned if im not delighted and humbled to have u here with such lovely feedback, much appreciated!
.. n i do hope i was gentle on ur cherry ;) yeah, im still a'smile bout that.
"The best inspiration for a writer is to read".. a wise man u are, n i must agree, reading stokes the embers of all creativity, and i look fwd to reading your work.
wishin u allmighty shine to ur night, sir poet.. i am truly honored..
lovin respects,
~d
.. n i do hope i was gentle on ur cherry ;) yeah, im still a'smile bout that.
"The best inspiration for a writer is to read".. a wise man u are, n i must agree, reading stokes the embers of all creativity, and i look fwd to reading your work.
wishin u allmighty shine to ur night, sir poet.. i am truly honored..
lovin respects,
~d