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HAPPINESS THROUGH LOVE
HAPPINESS THROUGH LOVE
For me, love cannot be thinking of self
but of the other person and her boon.
When l love my sweet girl, l will wish her
an endless pleasure which cannot be gone.
What is the drive that takes you to her bed?
If it's your pleasure, you are poor yourself
as pleasure will remain just for a wink
and then nostalgia will bring you sharp pain.
When love is your impulse, you think of her
as she will be all what you want from life.
You think of how your mating can affect
the person that your love wants to protect.
I don't feel you, true love, for my own self
but for the person whom l give my life.
If she's my life and love, l can't leave her
and this is what makes me have her a wife.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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For me, love cannot be thinking of self
but of the other person and her boon.
When l love my sweet girl, l will wish her
an endless pleasure which cannot be gone.
What is the drive that takes you to her bed?
If it's your pleasure, you are poor yourself
as pleasure will remain just for a wink
and then nostalgia will bring you sharp pain.
When love is your impulse, you think of her
as she will be all what you want from life.
You think of how your mating can affect
the person that your love wants to protect.
I don't feel you, true love, for my own self
but for the person whom l give my life.
If she's my life and love, l can't leave her
and this is what makes me have her a wife.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
Published 18th May 2021
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18th May 2021 5:17pm
Thank you very much, Ahavati. It is very kind of you to say so. I am very glad to get the appreciation of a great poet like you. Do you agree with me to the idea l've mentioned here?
"and this is what makes me have her a wife."
Did you mean "and this is what makes me have her AS wife."?
Your current syntax makes you say that you are impelled to obtaining a wife for your lover.
And as to this:
"What is the drive that takes you to her bed?
If it's your pleasure, you are poor yourself
as pleasure will remain just for a wink
and then nostalgia will bring you sharp pain."
What if the drive to take a woman to bed is to give her pleasure, not take pleasure from her?
And is it true that the pleasure one takes from bedding a woman will, when thinking about it after it is over, always brings pain, let alone sharp pain?
Did you mean "and this is what makes me have her AS wife."?
Your current syntax makes you say that you are impelled to obtaining a wife for your lover.
And as to this:
"What is the drive that takes you to her bed?
If it's your pleasure, you are poor yourself
as pleasure will remain just for a wink
and then nostalgia will bring you sharp pain."
What if the drive to take a woman to bed is to give her pleasure, not take pleasure from her?
And is it true that the pleasure one takes from bedding a woman will, when thinking about it after it is over, always brings pain, let alone sharp pain?
As the rhythm does not allow me to use AS, consider it OBLIGES me as the obligation here is moral.
The second idea of a lover is your idea. I can't say any more. How can you think about it in such a way. I wonder what makes you think in such a nasty, filthy, and horrible way.
The second idea of a lover is your idea. I can't say any more. How can you think about it in such a way. I wonder what makes you think in such a nasty, filthy, and horrible way.
"As the rhythm does not allow me to use AS,"
Using "as" instead of "a" does NOT change the "rhythm" of your line whether your meter is trochaic
AND this IS what MAKES me HAVE her A wife.
or iambic
and THIS is WHAT makes ME have HER a WIFE.
AND this IS what MAKES me HAVE her AS wife
and THIS is WHAT makes ME have HER as WIFE..
"it OBLIGES me as the obligation here is morally."
I think you meant to write "as the obligation is moral".
And how is thinking that a woman might like to be pleased by her spouse, let alone that it is a husband's obligation to see that she IS pleased whether or not he is, nasty in any way. It is, after all, Biblical:
1 Corinthians 7:3, ESV: "The husband should give to his wife her conjugal rights, and likewise the wife to her husband."
Using "as" instead of "a" does NOT change the "rhythm" of your line whether your meter is trochaic
AND this IS what MAKES me HAVE her A wife.
or iambic
and THIS is WHAT makes ME have HER a WIFE.
AND this IS what MAKES me HAVE her AS wife
and THIS is WHAT makes ME have HER as WIFE..
"it OBLIGES me as the obligation here is morally."
I think you meant to write "as the obligation is moral".
And how is thinking that a woman might like to be pleased by her spouse, let alone that it is a husband's obligation to see that she IS pleased whether or not he is, nasty in any way. It is, after all, Biblical:
1 Corinthians 7:3, ESV: "The husband should give to his wife her conjugal rights, and likewise the wife to her husband."
