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See Me, Love
I see you,
you don't see me
You are older,
wiser
I am younger,
naive
I'm falling for you
You barley notice me
I can't focus
You're too captivating
The way you play your guitar,
a peaceful melody
Our love that could be,
clarity
I know you have a lover
She's so close to your heart
Why can't I be the one,
to have you in my arms
you don't see me
You are older,
wiser
I am younger,
naive
I'm falling for you
You barley notice me
I can't focus
You're too captivating
The way you play your guitar,
a peaceful melody
Our love that could be,
clarity
I know you have a lover
She's so close to your heart
Why can't I be the one,
to have you in my arms
Published 13th May 2021
Author's Note
My second poem!
If you have any constructive criticism, please tell me. Thank you!
Also don't be too harsh, please.
If you have any constructive criticism, please tell me. Thank you!
Also don't be too harsh, please.
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17th May 2021 1:08pm
I like this ... good emoting/evoking ... also like the structure ... maintains the poem's flow ... welcome to DUP ...
17th May 2021 1:15pm
19th May 2021 10:19pm
... well I like it ... interesting ... not too long ago I wrote something similar hence why this resonates with me ... but all in all neatly done
20th May 2021 1:13pm
