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Kitchen tables overturned inside a mind
Spoke of defilement,
tongue is a guilty pleasurable.
though lady and lord
(dialogue to crowd)
orgasms deities,
earth consumes our marrowed bones.
existing in makeshift soot alters,
fond folded memories we construct.
ethereal in selfishness
I berate you on the coldest nights cement,
a great confusion bearing down.
lunging cowardice stagnates in my fingertips.
why does my priestess yell?
this dissatisfaction sweats
tacky washable lives.
puss with a proclamation for sickness.
tongue is a guilty pleasurable.
though lady and lord
(dialogue to crowd)
orgasms deities,
earth consumes our marrowed bones.
existing in makeshift soot alters,
fond folded memories we construct.
ethereal in selfishness
I berate you on the coldest nights cement,
a great confusion bearing down.
lunging cowardice stagnates in my fingertips.
why does my priestess yell?
this dissatisfaction sweats
tacky washable lives.
puss with a proclamation for sickness.
Published 20th Apr 2021
Author's Note
in ode to John Berryman.
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20th Apr 2021 11:07pm
There’s just so much I could mention here.
Firstly I found the use of the comma followed by the full stop really rather impactful here. It gave this sense of frequent progression and finishing and this really echoed the theme of your words.
This theme echoes into the heady mix of words you have here. It moves from pleasurable and ethereal to words like berate and defilement. I found this ricochet really poignant, and if I’m honest, ricochet is a really good word for this read.
I really loved the supernatural imagery here — the mention of deities and lords and ladies add this unseen element to your poem. It is the spiritual element surpassing all knowledge and understanding.
So much to unpack here, I thought it was entirely wonderful. Thank you for sharing.
-M
Firstly I found the use of the comma followed by the full stop really rather impactful here. It gave this sense of frequent progression and finishing and this really echoed the theme of your words.
This theme echoes into the heady mix of words you have here. It moves from pleasurable and ethereal to words like berate and defilement. I found this ricochet really poignant, and if I’m honest, ricochet is a really good word for this read.
I really loved the supernatural imagery here — the mention of deities and lords and ladies add this unseen element to your poem. It is the spiritual element surpassing all knowledge and understanding.
So much to unpack here, I thought it was entirely wonderful. Thank you for sharing.
-M
20th Apr 2021 11:15pm
Much appreciated Northern_soul. thanks for stopping by and giving me a moment of your time. that's the most I could ask for in my writing. thank you for the kind words and the multiple points of this piece that was touched on.
