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But You Never Really Let Go
They make it look easier
in movies, on TV
painful, sad, but simple
peaceful
No one warns you about the sound
the gurgle and rattle
of last gasping breaths
or that your aunt will urge
her sister's broken body to fight
as if your father hadn't told
the love of his life that it was safe to move on
and you hadn't held her hand
whispering that it would be okay
you'd take care of your dad
You do know to expect the silence
that eventually comes
Some emotion without a name
settled in, burrowed into my bones
fused me to the floor
and I noticed, in some part of my brain
that others were leaving the room
my dad's hand on my shoulder
quietly saying she wasn't there anymore
She was the first to hold me
I was the last to let her go
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Re. But You Never Really Let Go
8th Apr 2021 11:09am
This is so hard hitting and entirely personal. There are times in life when nothing else needs to be said other than this was seen and heard and felt, and to allow those words to exist in this place.
Sending you heartfelt warmth 💗
-M
Sending you heartfelt warmth 💗
-M
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Re: Re. But You Never Really Let Go
9th Apr 2021 4:55am
Thank you, Missy. There do seem to be times when there's nothing much else to say other than this thing happened like this, and let people will take from it what they will. Appreciate the list add, and appreciate the warmth even more.
Re. But You Never Really Let Go
8th Apr 2021 12:25pm
this was incredibly raw and that line "some emotion without a name settled in" made my throat swell up a little while i was reading it, some things are just meant to be said while others hear it
sending you hugs
from across the pond 🖤
-ethan
sending you hugs
from across the pond 🖤
-ethan
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Re: Re. But You Never Really Let Go
9th Apr 2021 5:00am
I'm repeating myself a bit from my reply to Missy, but I appreciate the list add, and the hugs even more.
That line, for me, is the heart of the matter. I really haven't heard a word that fits for me, so I knew there were other people who would understand it. It's not fresh anymore, but it's still there. Thank you, my friend :-)
That line, for me, is the heart of the matter. I really haven't heard a word that fits for me, so I knew there were other people who would understand it. It's not fresh anymore, but it's still there. Thank you, my friend :-)
Re. But You Never Really Let Go
8th Apr 2021 10:05pm
💖 I hear you Marie. Thank you for sharing from such depth with us.
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9th Apr 2021 5:02am
Re. But You Never Really Let Go
17th Apr 2021 5:46am
Crushing.
"Some emotion without a name
settled in, burrowed into my bones
fused me to the floor"
That's a heck of image and feeling..
"Some emotion without a name
settled in, burrowed into my bones
fused me to the floor"
That's a heck of image and feeling..
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Re: Re. But You Never Really Let Go
18th Apr 2021 4:33am
Glad I could find a few words for it that came across. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.
Re. But You Never Really Let Go
2nd Jun 2022 3:46am
Thanks to you RL one of mine, I now notice yours.
And this one, wow. Holy shit wow. Like thank god I'm sitting down because my knees gave out, wow. It floored me, with the bareness of the emotions during the moment.
I don't know if any of us are actual poets. We just write and call it whatever we want. We scribble words down and then use it to smear our tears and blood with. Call it art.
This is as raw and honest as it gets.
And this one, wow. Holy shit wow. Like thank god I'm sitting down because my knees gave out, wow. It floored me, with the bareness of the emotions during the moment.
I don't know if any of us are actual poets. We just write and call it whatever we want. We scribble words down and then use it to smear our tears and blood with. Call it art.
This is as raw and honest as it gets.
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Re: Re. But You Never Really Let Go
2nd Jun 2022 7:45pm
I haven't come back to this piece in a while, so it took me a little time to digest your comment, because it had me reread the poem, and took me back to writing it, and that was a little emotional.
Thank you for reminding me that I wrote this, as odd as that may sound. It is one of the more raw pieces I've written and decided to put out into the world. It would sound odd to say I'm pleased or glad that it spoke to you, so I guess appreciate is the better of the words that are coming to me at the moment. And I do appreciate your time to read, to share your reaction to it, to let me know it touched you in this way.
Thank you for reminding me that I wrote this, as odd as that may sound. It is one of the more raw pieces I've written and decided to put out into the world. It would sound odd to say I'm pleased or glad that it spoke to you, so I guess appreciate is the better of the words that are coming to me at the moment. And I do appreciate your time to read, to share your reaction to it, to let me know it touched you in this way.
Re. But You Never Really Let Go
2nd Jun 2022 3:48am
Dear PS,
Absolutely haunting piece. I found myself choked up by the end. That last line…wow. Excellent write. H🌷
Absolutely haunting piece. I found myself choked up by the end. That last line…wow. Excellent write. H🌷
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Re: Re. But You Never Really Let Go
2nd Jun 2022 7:50pm
Thank you so much. It took a long time for me to touch this subject in poetry, and comments like this make me feel like I did it a little bit of justice. Really appreciate it.
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3rd Jun 2022 4:45am
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3rd Jun 2022 11:05am
Re. But You Never Really Let Go
3rd Jun 2022 10:01pm
You're welcome sweety. This one took me back a few years to a different time. Thank you for the reminder, I needed it. Very much so.
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